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Name: dragonwings (Signed) · Date: 04/29/08 21:19 · For: Part I: Sleepless Nights and Old Friends
Ahhh! I am INCREDIBLY tempted to read the next chapter, and I shall--later. Because now, I need to write your review along with three others, write out a Review lesson plan, catch up on GRC house points and go to defense class! So for now I'm going to have to settle for reviewing!

This story has a fantastic set up--but I'm guessing that the first part was added later =P You certainly handled the prompts far better than I did, your descriptions are so detailed and vivid! Your writing hooked me hard and you have no idea how hard it is not to just go onto the next part! >.<

I only have a tiny little critique--(Alex’s mother, Anastasia, had been Abraxas’s younger sister; she’d married into the Bonnet family of France (a pureblood family nearly as old as the Malfoys), though Alex had lived in Britain, attending Hogwarts as a Ravenclaw before leaving in June of 1979 and entering the war … on the side of the Order of the Phoenix.) Why a double parenthesis? WHY!?!?! lol I just think that the first set of parenthesis isn't needed.

I wish that I had more concrit things to say! But what can I say? This chapter was wonderfully written, I'm DYING to read the next part and you're a wonderful writer who can do no evil! =P Great job!

~Allie: Captain of your Friendly GRC! =P

Name: luinrina (Signed) · Date: 04/21/08 1:50 · For: Part III: Explanations Given and a Task Completed
Oh my, this is just amazing. I so love this story. It‘s written perfectly, gripping up to the last word and really an insight into Sirius’s mind.

And I wonder – was there such a thing for real, an Order Recolitus Optimus with its several branches? Did a woman called Melinda Maleficent really live at the beginning of the 19th century? Or did you just make it up? If so, wow, absolutely worth a prize. You could invent your own story with this idea, create own characters and so on. I would so sure read this book.

Your poems are fantastic, too. Rhyming and having a riddle in them to sound like kind of a prophecy. Wonderful. Congrats. I hope there’s going to be another story about that? You get a huge double-thumbs-up from me for this and “Recolitus Optimus”.

Author's Response: Wow, well, thank you so very much, luinrina, for the review. I'm thrilled to hear that you liked this story, especially since I found it incredibly fun to write - and was so happy that it won the challenge.

As for if any it was real, it's not, to my knowledge. As far as I know, the whole idea with the Order of Recolitus Optimus and Melinda Maleficent is completely my own creation. The only actual, historical - inspiration, I guess you could call it - comes from the fact that historical Orders and societies did exist, but as for everything about this particular story, it's 100 percent made up from my head.

And the funny thing about that was, when I first came up with the idea, it was just some random thing to add to Melinda's Chocolate Frog Card. I didn't plan for it to take over and play a major role of the story, thus making me have to create a history and such for it. Oh, it was a prime example of a story taking control of the author, rather than the other way around.

As for using it with any original fiction of mine, I've definitely thought of that idea. There's definitely a reason why my notes on the whole thing haven't ended up in the deleted files of my computer ;)

I'm glad you liked the poems with these stories, too. They truly were ... interesting to write, I'll say. Poetry is not one of my better writing talents, especially when I want the poems to rhyme, as I did in this story, but I thought it made the whole thing work better, so I'm glad you liked it. As for any other story that deals with this kind of thing - the Order, the poetic prophecies, etc. - who knows? I may write something in the future with them, either fan fic or changing things to make it an original work.

Thanks again, though, for the wonderful review. I really appreciate it!


Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 03/11/08 23:08 · For: Part III: Explanations Given and a Task Completed
Wow, just... wow. I loved how you characterized Sirius in this story. I really like how you had him truly realize that he couldn't change what had happened... that he subconsciously knew that even when given the things that could make it possible. It makes me wonder if that dark witch was truly dark if should could help someone find the healing he needed to be able to rest and accomplish what was needed to be done.

Now I would like to see the mystery of what is Remus Lupin from your POV! LOL Cyns

Author's Response: Thanks so very much for the review, Cheshlin. I'm glad you enjoyed this fic, mainly for the reason that I had SO much fun writing it! Also, I'm happy to hear you liked my Sirius characterisation. As my favourite character, I really always want to get him just *perfect* and give a deeper side to him. The exploration in this fic was a part of that. rn

rnAs for whether or not Melinda is truly as Dark as thought ... who knows? She's definitely just a one-dimensional villain (or hero), that's for sure.rn

rnRemus is definitely a mystery, that's for sure. I may write him again in a starring role sometime. You never know!rn


Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 03/11/08 22:20 · For: Part I: Sleepless Nights and Old Friends
Wow, this is a great beginning! I can't wait to read the rest. I just wanted to point out a few little things that had me a little confused...

Upon entering the kitchen, he made his way over towards the counter, on top of which sat the bottle of Firewhisky he’d left the night before after talking with Sirius over something or other. Still half-full, he picked it up before sitting down at the table and taking a swig, staring across the room at nothing in particular and trying to keep from focussing on his thoughts as the alcohol travelled down his throat.

Sirius knew that the sleepless (or on those that he did get sleep, restless) nights would soon catch up to him, but he couldn’t think of any other way to cease the nightmares, and trying to sleep after having one of those was just about impossible — He knew from experience. Obviously a Dreamless Sleep Potion wouldn’t work for long (but, glancing at his watch, he saw that it did manage to get him a good four hours of rest), and even when Sirius had suggested that he try to stop the nightmares by talking about them had produced negative results.

I hope the coding is correct, but twice you named Sirius but I think you meant Remus or another Order Member. If he gave the advice or drank firewhiskey with himself he really is losing his mind! LOL

The ending of this chapter is very interesting! I need to go read the next chapter so I can know what is happening. I can see why this won the Gauntlet! Cyns

Author's Response: Oh, Cyns, you are *definitely* right. (I wonder how I missed those two.) They're definitely supposed to be Remus, not Sirius. Thanks for pointing them out.

And thanks, too, for the review. I'm glad you're liking the fic so far.


Name: FanFicFanatic12 (Signed) · Date: 02/18/08 9:44 · For: Part III: Explanations Given and a Task Completed
This story was very cool--I never would've thought of writing something like this! The whole concept was interesting, and I liked Alex's character. Thank you!

Author's Response: Thanks, FanFicFanatic. I'm glad you enjoyed the fic. And yes, I like Alex, too.


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