Reviewer: Edelweiss
Date: 03/05/10 21:51
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

Ambrose Bierce? An Occurence at Owl Creek? Cool adaption of that idea. . .

Reviewer: The_Lovely_Rowena
Date: 08/03/09 14:03
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

Oooo! Action-y! I loved the twist! Twists are fun! I did notice that the escape was unrealistic. At first I was thinking, "He can't honestly expect me to believe this?" But then I was like, "oh." Aaaanyway, I thought it was really good, and I usually don't like dark/angsty fics, so yay! =)

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review. I like twists too! And yes, it was quite fun to write his escape attempt, particularly the part with the potted plant. I also don’t usually read dark/angst, but I felt like giving this fic a shot for some reason.

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: helz_belz
Date: 04/19/09 19:36
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

Oh wow. Just wow.

Rarely do you see a fanfiction which is truly realistic to the state of war. Not everyone has a crazy, daring escape that many people write into their stories and often the people who don't escape are ignored to become another "dead sidekick" type character. Rarely do they get their own thoughts and feelings written down and explained. Like you probably intended, I got sucked into believing that William was escaping with a blaze of glory, until you hit home with that final point- his. It really hammers home the message that in a war, not everyone escapes, but everyone wishes that they could. *Sniff* Poor William never got to see his family, but at least they were the last thing he imagined.

Fantastic piece, shows how versatile that you are with writing. Keep up the good work :)

Author's Response:

Poor William here would be lucky to be a “dead sidekick.” He’s not associated with any big names – he’s just another expendable pawn, a “dead extra,” if you will. Duly noted, wars are not fought by the politicians and generals. It is the little people who fight, suffer, die, and there is little glamour in their desperate fights for survivals. Perhaps this very insignificance is what makes good dark/angst material.

Anyway, thanks for reviewing, and I’m glad this little story made an impression on you.

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: The Lark Dord
Date: 04/17/09 5:04
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

It's too dark for my kind of think :
Amazing how sad, shocked and disappointed you can get because of a piece of writing.

Author's Response:

Glad to know the story had an impact. Thanks for the review.

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: luinrina
Date: 04/16/09 5:57
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

Tim, this one-shot is fantastic. It's so sad and dark, and it surprised me a bit that you, who is quite well-known for humorous and funny stories, could write something this capturing. I felt with William, I felt for William. It's a cruel fate he faced and you showed that exceptionally. I applaud you.

What I liked is the present tense. It's so different than what you usually see, but it worked really great in this context. It gave me as the reader a deeper emotional inside to the story and the character, enabling me much more to feel with William.

The action sequence of his flight is very well done and gripping. I could feel my heart beating faster in the hope of William's success in fleeing. And when he then arrived at his home, being able to embrace his wife and son again, I was glad he had escaped and smiled to myself. But then he dies, and it shocked me. It is a truly magnificent work you've done with this. It reads and feels so real.

What bothered me a bit was the unnecessary capitalisation of normal words like "witch" or "wizarding world". But apart from that, the one-shot was an excellent read. You should write more D/A as it seems to be a strength of yours.

~Bine

Author's Response:

I’m surprised that this story is popular all of a sudden, but I’m glad you enjoyed this experiment of mine in the dark/angst genre. I wrote this to diversify a bit, and it’s good to know that my first attempt at this kind of story was effective. My writing tends to be more event-driven and I dread writing internal monologues, but I think I might give this kind of writing another go if I can come up with a good idea.

Thank you for reading and for the review,

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: Vittoria
Date: 04/12/09 1:28
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

Hello Tim,

I must say that the genre of the story took me by surprise. It's a rather different attempt from you and I loved the ending. Though there are a few tense errors, I think they can be overlooked as the content of the story compensates the errors.

Overall, you've done a good job.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review and for liking the story! The present tense is tricky to write in, but I like it for its immediacy. Anyway, this story was quite a departure from what I usually write, and I’m glad it was effective.

~ Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: hpsupafan
Date: 11/12/08 23:09
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

One of your finest works :D

Author's Response:

Why, thank you! I don't write stories as dark or serious as this very often, so I'm glad you liked it. Cheerio!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: IndigoPassion
Date: 10/29/08 11:04
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

Haha Lipstick....

Sorry, that one had me laughing so much.

But yeah, Amazing story..Again...

:) Lexxyy

Author's Response:

Ha! I forgot about that… just goes to prove that even in something as dark and serious as this, I have to put at least one joke in a story somewhere… Imagine that, Dementors with lipstick – quite a scary thought!

Thanks for the review!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: AgentSquishy
Date: 02/10/08 20:19
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

haha, yeah, it was the fact that he was able to point the wands at his manacles that angered me while i read it, makes sense that it wasnt real now, good story, i liked the fast pace, why does he use a pot to attack the death eater when he has his wand?

Author's Response: Thanks for leaving this review, AgentSquishy person (that’s a great username, by the way). I’m pleased that you enjoyed the story and its fast pace. You see, I really like writing in the present tense for that very reason. Writing in the present tense as opposed to the past tense makes it sound like the story is happening right now and right in front of you, making it more immediate, and hopefully more exciting. For future reference, if you see me launching into the present tense in a story, something important is going to happen.

I must praise your powers of observation for noticing the fact that it is impossible to aim a wand at your own wrists while they are manacled together. I deliberately inserted that detail to illustrate that the whole escape is impossible, and thus not real. However, I am surprised that that scene “angered” you. Did I touch a nerve somehow?

In your review you asked why William attacks the Death Eater with the potted plant instead of the wand he had stolen. Well, I wrote that because I thought it would be a ridiculous, humorous, and needlessly violent way to dispatch an enemy. Also, this entire scene is occurring in his imagination, so all logic goes out the window. In William’s delusional state, it makes perfect sense to hit the Death Eater in the face with the potted plant, completely forgetting about the wand in his hand.

I suppose that’s it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: OJShinra104
Date: 02/08/08 23:25
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

This story was very entertaining and I was sort of surprised at the ending. I kind of suspected that he was just dreaming mostly because at the very beginning when he hits that guy and grabs his wand he dodged a curse almost at point blank. Most curses in the Harry Potter world do not require too much accuracy and at the close range there is almost no chance of missing. What really interested me the most was how similar this story was to a story I read in my English class. The name of that story was "An Occurrence at Owl Creek Bridge". If you wish to read that story I leave the link here: http://fiction.eserver.org/short/occurrence_at_owl_creek.html. The whole story is almost identical in a way to yours. Aside from that detail I felt the story was very original and kind of fills us in on what was happening while Harry was occupied “saving the world”.

Author's Response: Well, I just read “An Occurrence” (pardon my abbreviation) for the first time with the link you provided, and I liked it a lot. I’ll just say it was much more satisfying than my previous knowledge of the story, which went something like this: “a man is about to be executed when he escapes, but then he dies because the escape was imagined.” It was that relatively vague idea that I based my story off of, and now that I’ve read the original, I see that my version is quite similar.

Once again, I’m glad you liked my fic, and thank you for leaving a review to let me know. My only complaint about Harry Potter is that it is (with the exception of about five chapters in the entire series) only presented from Harry’s perspective, so our insight into the Wizarding World is quite narrow. However, this is great for us fanfiction writers, because it allows us to make up the details on what was happening elsewhere while Harry was occupied “saving the world”. By the way, I just copied and pasted the last part of your review right there…

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: OJShinra104
Date: 02/08/08 23:24
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

This story was very entertaining and I was sort of surprised at the ending. I kind of suspected that he was just dreaming mostly because at the very beginning when he hits that guy and grabs his wand he dodged a curse almost at point blank. Most curses in the Harry Potter world do not require too much accuracy and at the close range there is almost no chance of missing. What really interested me the most was how similar this story was to a story I read in my English class. The name of that story was "An Occurrence at Owl Creek Bridge". If you wish to read that story I leave the link here: http://fiction.eserver.org/short/occurrence_at_owl_creek.html. The whole story is almost identical in a way to yours. Aside from that detail I felt the story was very original and kind of fills us in on what was happening while Harry was occupied “saving the world”.

Author's Response: Hello reviewer person,

Thank you for leaving the review, and I’m glad that you liked the story. Though I have never actually read “An Occurrence at Owl Creek Bridge,” I have heard about it and I have a general idea of the basic storyline. I thought the idea in the story was interesting and that’s what motivated me to write this, as I said in my Author’s Notes.

I’ll definitely read the story’s link you provided. Thanks again for the review!

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: moonstonesilver
Date: 02/05/08 11:36
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

hey, cool! i was quite flabbergasted when he died, but then i realized he'd probably imagined it all... it was very touching and sweet, and i really couldn't understand about the levels and grilles and everything, until you wrote the explanation. thanks for writing that fic - it was great :D

Author's Response: Thank you kindly for reviewing, moonstonesilver,

I very glad you enjoyed my rather short and depressing story, and thank you a second time for taking the extra minute (or two) to write this lovely review.

Additionally, I am quite pleased that you were ‘quite flabbergasted’ by William’s fate at the end, because that was my intention. I know I’ve succeeded in my stories when I take people by surprise, so thank you for letting me know you were. If you enjoyed this fic (which I presume you did, seeing that you reviewed, but I digress), you might like to read one of my other plot-twisting stories, Out of the Darkness (I apologise for the self-advertising, but oh well.). Now, about the strange floor numbering and grilles and such… I originally wrote the story without them, but I added them at the last minute as subtle hints and for the extra realism.

Thank you again for the review.

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: marvelousmeg
Date: 02/03/08 22:36
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

wo1 i knew something was wrong but I didn't know what. That was very clever. I think that is too kind an end by the death eater standard but very imaginitive. Great story!

Author's Response: Greetings,

Thank you for leaving a review for this story. Reviews like these motivate me to write more!

I do have to agree with you that the Killing Curse is too merciful for Death Eater execution purposes, so a Dementor's Kiss would probably be used instead. However, William would probably pass out at some point in the Dementor's presence and his head would have been filled with voices and nightmares, so he wouldn't be able to concentrate on his escape dream.

Tim the Enchanter

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 02/03/08 15:25
Chapter: As The Clock Strikes Twelve

well, that's depressing. good story though!

Author's Response: Hurray! I love reviews. Anyway, thank you for taking the time to leave a review for this rather depressing story of mine. I’m glad you liked it! Tim the Enchanter

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