Reviewer: padfoot2116
Date: 10/28/10 19:42
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

this is really good, when are you going to update again?

Reviewer: RedBlack
Date: 06/14/10 21:06
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

its good, please update soon. :)

Reviewer: The-heir-of-Gryffindor
Date: 07/29/08 8:44
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

that was really good please write more!!!!

Reviewer: lilyevans489
Date: 06/24/08 18:38
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

Hey,
Just read over this again- it's great- and wondering when (if? please not if) you are going to update?

Author's Response: I honestly have no idea, but thanks :D

Reviewer: BertieBotsBeans741
Date: 04/10/08 20:58
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

*sings* This is going on my favorites. =D Another promising Marauder Era fic *huggles* I'm anxious for the next chapter already.

Brittany

Author's Response: thank you:D the next chapter should be up in like a week.

Reviewer: Bexia
Date: 04/08/08 17:47
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

It is like super interesting!!

Author's Response: thanks.

Reviewer: fg_weasley
Date: 04/07/08 20:19
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

I definitely like that last scene better with out that little bit. I hope you know what part I mean. lol. I'll be honest, I still sort of think its a bit soon, but I'm sure you'll pull it all together, love. I can't wait to get started on three! Which I should really go do ... lol. Sorry about that. I'll have it back very soon!

p.s. you're quite welcome to that thank you. You flatter me, love. :]

Author's Response: yeah, it might be, but I'll make it work:D haha, don't worry about it :D rnrnof course i flatter you. you help me heaps and heaps:D:D

Reviewer: CloewithLOVE
Date: 04/07/08 13:54
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

OMG YOUR SOOO GOOD! YOU ALSO HAVE A LOVELY BETA. NIKKI IS AMAZING JUST LIKE YOU! YOU DID AN EXCELLENT JOB AND YOUR WRITING STYLE IS SO UNIQUE! I LOVED IT SO FAR AND I'M PUTTING IT ON MY FAVORITES! GREAT JOB!

Author's Response: thank you heaps:D yeah, nikki is amazing. rnrnagain, thanks heaps.

Reviewer: eaglette with wheels
Date: 04/06/08 12:51
Chapter: Chapter 2 - Because Firewhiskey makes all decisions bad, and all situations awkward

To Moony! Seriously, that was awesome. Still.. in the dorms? Kinda weird- or at the very least significantly lacking in class- in other words, exactly what you would expect from a 16 year old drunken Sirius. That was really well written- I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: haha, thank you. Next chapter is currently being beta-d:D

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 04/05/08 12:25
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

Ah, I love seeing Sirius confused. :p

You already know I love your dialogue (as I said in your drabble thread, which, incidentally, is what led me here). The only nitpick I have is really minor - when Sirius and Bree talk, they use each other’s names a lot, i.e.:

“I ran away Bree,”

and

“No, and will you please leave it Sirius?”

That's fine every once in a while, because people in RL do that every once in a while. However, they don't do it as often as it occurs here - when two people are talking, they usually don't feel the need to specify who they are talking to, because there's only one person there to talk to at all (unless they're talking to themselves/are crazy, but that's for another time XD). Anyway, I'd just thought I'd point that out. All you have to do is trim away those excess names floating around…I don't want anything to mar your dialogue. =o

I love the beginning, where Sirius and Bree pass notes in class. However - if Sirius had known Bree for so long, shouldn't he have known Bree liked to be called Brianna? But otherwise, the notes they passed were hilarious and really showed us what those two were like.

Besides those nitpicks, this was a great first chapter. It introduced us nicely to Bree, and to her relationship with Sirius. Sirius's internal torture (whether or not he likes Bree) was extremely well written - I loved the way you incorporated his interior monologue seamlessly into the story. Fantastic job, especially for your first fic (even though for all I know you may have been writing for years).

--Kate

Author's Response: confuzzled sirius is way fun:Drnrnumm...with the names. i don't know. I think it kind of shows that thier agitated.rnrnAnd with the Briana thing, he calls her that because she hate's it, and he's mean:SrnrnThank you heaps:D rnrnAnd yes, I've been writing for a while. This is just my first posted HP fic:Drn

Reviewer: fg_weasley
Date: 03/18/08 19:55
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

you didn't tell me this was up, love! Yay! hahaha. Or maybe you did and I just don't remember. lol. Either way, I'm happy for you, kid! :]

Author's Response: actually, i only just realized then. lol.

Reviewer: inluvwid_pdft
Date: 03/01/08 21:47
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

I really like it...nice. I havt really read a really good fanfic of sirius with an OC

Author's Response: thanks:D I have. rnrnhttp://fanfiction.mugglenet.com/viewstory.php?sid=71847&warning=3rnrnHaha, it's my beta's, but it rocks:D

Reviewer: tashy
Date: 02/28/08 11:49
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

i love the fact that u chose to write a story about sirius!i

Author's Response: haha, Sirius rules.

Reviewer: Lilyknep
Date: 02/25/08 18:16
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

Love this one! There aren't enough fanfics about sirius, he's one of my all time favorite characters!

Author's Response: thanks.. I agree. Sirius rocks my socks:D

Reviewer: Rhi for HP
Date: 02/25/08 13:47
Chapter: Chapter 1-Because Poking Someone in the Eye is NOT a Safe Practice

Good start! I want to see what happens!

Author's Response: thanks:D The next part will be up.... when it's up. lol.

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