Reviews For A Black Tonks
Reviewer: BrokenPromise
Date: 02/22/12 20:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

Beautifully written. I could really feel Andromeda's emotions.

Reviewer: GinervaPotter213
Date: 11/28/08 21:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ooh, Kat, I loved this story. I like how you portrayed Andromeda and Ted. They are a rather sweet couple. The description was beautiful as well. I look forward to reading more of your stories! :]
-Ayra

Reviewer: helz_belz
Date: 11/08/08 19:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

I absolutely adore A/T and this story really does the pairing justice.

I won't write a long review, just a quick message to say I really adored this One-Shot. I especially liked the idea that she welcomed being burned off the tapestry. Nice touch :)

I have no nitpicks & I didn't spy any typos or errors.

Once again great job :)

Reviewer: Vitamin Vicki
Date: 08/22/08 14:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! This story is wonderfully written, quite amazing. Brilliant! You had the characters' personalities completely captured, and it's incredible how you portrayed this. Especially since you wrote it in first-person - undoubtedly harded than writing this piece in third. Some nitpicks...

'A heavy feeling of tranquillity settled in my chest, erasing all that I had just done and replacing it with the feeling of him.' Unless there is some British spelling I don't know of, 'tranquility' has only one L, not two.

'I listened as his soft footsteps as they faded away.' This part doesn't make sense. It should say, 'I listened to his soft footsteps as they faded away' or 'I listened as his soft footsteps faded away'.

'As we reached the Atrium, I turned to him, unable to hide my smile of joy, and saw and equally as brilliant a smile upon his face.' It should be 'and saw an equally as brilliant a smile upon his face'. You put 'and' instead of 'an'.

'They were eyes that believed I was nothing more than the man standing beside me—a Mudblood, a bloodtraiter.' It should be 'bloodtraitor', right?

'“We blew her of the tapestry, of course,” she replied as she pulled out her wand.' It should be off the tapestry, not of.

Sorry, for the nitpicks, *blushes*, but I have been quite the spelling and grammar Nazi lately.

Oh, and I especially liked this:

'His eyes bore into my apparently tell-tale slanted ones. This was the reason I was here tonight. He knew everything about me almost incessantly; he knew me better than I knew myself.' This is an amazing thing. It really captures the feeling - one of my favorite pieces from the story.

All together, I enjoyed this story immensely. It was great, and I usually am not one to enjoy romance fics - I usually stray towards humour. ^_^ I loved it. Good job! You write impeccably well! (It's actually kind of scary!) ... (That, my friend, was a really bad joke. c: )

Cheers!

Vicki

Reviewer: Sdogg
Date: 08/12/08 16:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

Not bad, would actually like to see what you do with these characters in a longer plot. Found the beginning very attention grabbing, good job.

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 07/31/08 7:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was fantastic--thank you for pointing me to it! 'Dromeda was real without losing that slight haughtiness, the old poise she seemed to have in that very brief scene in DH. The two of them coming back to the house was probably the best part, and the ending felt surreal and calm in the best of ways.

A couple of little things: 2nd scene, 7th paragraph, "lost touch of with own opinion" maybe to "of my" or "with my"; and last scene, "we blew her of the tapestry" needs another f in off.

Lovely Ted/Andromeda. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the nitpicks, Penn! I'm glad you enjoyed it :]

Reviewer: Lyra Lestrange
Date: 03/30/08 18:46
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was really good! I like how it is in first person and really liked the line 'face our demons.' I was looking for a good story to read about the Blacks, so I'm glad I found this one!

Reviewer: kritchen
Date: 02/17/08 22:57
Chapter: Chapter 1

Have I reviewed this? I don't think I have! Gah, I'm a horrible beta if I haven't. Lol. You know that I so love this scene and that I think you totally stole it from my brain. Or rather, that I'm thinking of stealing it for my ALLTB sequel. :D Whoopsie. Wasn't supposed to let that slip. ;) Still hyper obviously and this is not very story related... Moving on!

I so loved the tensions and the emotions and the way you showed Ted and Dromeda and really, I'm just in love with it. That was a horribly incorrect grammatically sentence. >.< Okay, I should shut up now. I LOVE IT! [favorites]

Author's Response: I don't know why I haven't responded to this? SO! Thanks, kritch :] Great minds think alike! Obviously... And I really do think your brain steals my brain's ideas sometimes.. >.> Sketch. Lol. THANKIESFORTEHLUBLYREVIEW!

Reviewer: Guhlinda
Date: 02/07/08 8:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

*SQUEEE*

Seriously, I am falling in absolute love with this pairing because of you, Kat. The way you wrote Andromeda was so beautifully perfect. You seemed to get her mixed emotions perfectly, which is really good! And I love Ted-- he seems so genuinely caring. :] You did a nice job of balancing their relationship and you made it seem so real! Anyway, great job!

~emily.

Author's Response: Well dang, Em. *blushes* If you want a really good A/T... I recommend you read kritchen's writing. She writes the pair wonderfully. Anyway, thanks for the review sis :]

Reviewer: ravenclawslostdiadem
Date: 02/04/08 17:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very nice job, I just wrote an Andromeda/Ted fic that is up on this site except they're still at Hogwarts. This is well written and enjoyable!

Author's Response: Thanks so much :] I'm glad you enjoyed it. I might go check your fic out....

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 02/04/08 14:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

great story. really good job. i love how you describe adromada's emotions.

Author's Response: Thanks dear :]

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