So sad... But I really enjoyed it.
The mention of his real eye, his little black eye was beyond heartbreaking. It seems they've spent so little time together as a married couple.
Beside this, I really hope to read more of Moody/Elizabeth fics from you, like a continuation to Muggling Along, just telling about their new life and all. Do you plan on writing on this? I really hope so!
Anyway, I really enjoyed your three stories involving this pairing, and hope to read more.
Take care. ^^
How come I've never read this before. Probably because I'm a fool. Thea, this is lovely. Elizabeth is so alone and yet so certain that she's right. It was wonderful to read, and you've convinced me that he's still alive.
Why didn't they send more than two people, and two people that already assumed he was dead?
I liked Remus in this very much. He's one of my favourite characters and I think you caught his innate kindness as well as his intelligence. But he also has that unquestioning side to his nature (belief that Moody had died, belief that Snape was good on Dumbledore's say so - okay I know he was right, but he didn't want to believe he hadn't questioned Dumbledore) . Yeah, you captured Remus very well, and the whole magical condescension towards us Muggles. Great story ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you for this lovely review! I like Remus very much myself. I think his self doubt and self-loathing because of his lycanthropy, while understandable, is self-indulgent and keeps him from being what he could have been - not just to himself, or to Tonks, but to the Wizarding World as a whole. It is very very human, but I'd love to see an AU in which he mans up and takes on the leadership role that Dumbledore leaves vacant- since no one else does. I also like Mad-Eye, (OK, I passionately adore Moody and should he show up on my doorstep Mr. Posky might have a bit of trouble holding on to me) and I think he is sadly undervalued by his "friends." As much as Arthur and Amos do try to save his bacon in the beginning of Goblet of Fire, they both think he's nuts. If they hadn't dismissed him then, Barty Crouch might not have had his opportunity. As the series goes on, we see he isn't quite as nuts as they play it out. (of course if anyone in the books had any sense they'rd be no plot, but still...) I think it was unconscionable that the Order let Moody go up with Mundungus, who he basically had to shanghai into it, as his back rider. Harry, when he carefully searches for an appropriate tree to under which to bury Moody's eye, mourns him more than anyone else, including those who'd known him for years. I think it's more than Harry just feeling badly about yet another person dieing for him - I think as a partial outsider himself he has a clearer vision of Mad-Eye than, say, the twins or Ron. Elizabeth, also an outsider, has a clearer vision of him as well. She knew him for years as a Muggle, so to her, his human qualities are far more important than his magical properties. He may have been the best Auror the Ministry ever had, but to his wife he is preeminently the exquisitely kind and good-humored man in the house over the hedge, who taught her how to prune rosebushes and poked the mashed potatoes at her Thanksgiving dinner with a stick like a little boy. Thanks again. I love reviews of any sort, but I especially love reviews where people tell me they are fools for not having read the story earlier - I can see this may be favorite type of all, despite this being the very first one! Thea
PP, this was such a touching one-shot and I felt genuinely emotional reading it. You portrayed Elizabeth’s emotions in such an effective manner and I felt so sad for her, especially as she just seems so alone. At the beginning, the line if she had to keep breathing at all is just so heart wrenchingly sad and, I think, a really wonderful description of quite how painful grief can be.
The only person she gets to talk to is Lupin – to the rest it almost seems as if she doesn’t really matter, due to her Muggleness, and I think you summed this up here: Being a Muggle makes me magicless, not deaf. Obviously, no one at The Burrow would intentionally ignore her because she is a Muggle but it does seem that perhaps she is a little easy to overlook and you can understand her frustration that the rest of the wizards and witches seem to think it is not only magic that she is incapable of, but everything else as well, including being privy to the actual truth about the death of her husband. It seems almost as if the rest of them are too wrapped in thoughts of the wedding to worry about the Muggle widower, with McGonagall only hurriedly and not quite finishing altering her robes, and everyone avoiding talking to her, so as not to have to bring up the subject of Moody’s death.
I loved the description of The Burrow as chipped and scuffed by time, mellowed with age, slightly dusty in corners, a little stained along the flat surfaces. You paint it so vividly, and it’s so true, that The Burrow is aged and a little worn, and I think that is just what a visitor would first notice in such an unusual house.. It is a little old and little scruffy, but then to the people that call it home, the actual building itself is not what makes it so – it’s the people that live in it and the fact that it’s always been theirs and has been well and truly lived in.
I do wish you had mentioned Elizabeth’s name earlier on. I knew who she was of course, from your other stories, but I couldn’t remember what she was actually called at first, and so waiting nearly half the story to work out her name was a bit frustrating. Though it was nothing too serious, it did distract me a little in the first few paragraphs! This did also get me thinking that for someone not familiar with your other stories, it's not necessarily immediately clear who she is and perhaps a warning that reading one of the other two fics first would be be beneficial, might help.
Elizabeth’s conviction that Moody must still be alive, and her unspoken anger at Lupin’s insistence that he must be dead even though, in her mind, Your Order didn’t look all that hard, did you? There was a long way to look, it needed more than two people, but only two went. was very realistic. You can understand why should expect them to do more, and her anger at the fact that they were seemingly content to give up without too much proof. I can imagine it is very hard to accept a death when there is simply no evidence of it, and so the lack of a body is incredibly troubling for her, especially combined with the feeling that something is not as it seems.
The conversation between the pair was well-written and showed a lot of thought behind it. Her disgust, particularly, at the thought of his real eye being taken is excellent, as she doesn’t even consider for a moment that it might really be his magical eye which has been taken as eye immediately leads her to think of the one that was actually part of him and which she was able to see love from. And for her to finish with the realisation that it was after all, that, and not any actual part of him, is a really effective ending and the final image you leave us with, of her standing in the robes that once belonged to him and now are supposed to be hers, is a really touching one.
Author's Response: Thank you! I just can't thank you enough for this long, thought-out review of my story! I am very gratified to hear that it was that powerful a read. As I've developed the whole arc this comes from in my mind she is really the ultimate outsider, and these people who are normally quite nice but who are, let's face it, stressed beyond belief at the moment are basically ignoring her because they don't know what to do with her, and because there is some resentment, here and there, of being saddled with what they see as the equivalent of a slightly dim-witted child. Lupin, who is also something of an outsider because of his Lycanthropy, does understand better than the others. He's also got more experience with Muggles than most of them. I was trying to paint the Burrow in a nice light - did it come across that she was pleased that it was not shiny and new? I''m glad you liked the phrase. You are not the first person to mention that her identity is a bit confusing - I think I may go identify her in the summary, and add a note that reading one of the other stories first might help put this one in context. Elizabeth is more than a little angry about how the Order treats Mad-Eye from the beginning. She doesn't feel they looked very hard for him, and she is quite, quite certain he is alive. Something else at Bill's wedding that isn't in this story further convinces her. This is a woman who has surprised herselfby realizing she's in love with her neighbor, who she figures is 20 or thirty years older than she is.. (Actually, it is closer to 60 years, but he's holding up well...) I am glad the conversations work. I hope Remus seems in character - I think he does because no one has mentioned him not being. I can' t thank you enough for taking the time to give me such a detailed review. Thank you again!!!
Hmm. Interesting story.
I must admit that I was rather confused. Really confused. What era was this in, was the woman a Muggle, was she an OC, who was her husband, what was going on? I'm still not exactly sure, but I've come to the conclusion that this is August in DH about an OC named Elizabeth that was in love with Moody. Eh?
In the end, though, I enjoyed the dialogue. It seemed very realistic and was quite compelling. The descriptions, too: they were smooth and grabbing.
Even though I didn't get it, I still liked it.
Author's Response: You are right - they are at Bill's wedding, and the woman is an OC named Elizabeth who is actually married to Moody. In the sense that it introduces a new character in a one shot, and so obliquely, it is not the best challenge entry or one-shot in general, perhaps. I took the opportunity of the challenge to write a story about a character and a situation I am working out in longer fics. Muggle Matters is the prologue to Muggling Along, which tells the story of their marriage and what comes after. I got one chapter of Muggle Matters up before we were asked to refrain from submitting to the Queue, and I have been sitting on those that are ready to go until we are told it is well to submit again. When I get up to it, Muggling Along, written for a contest quite a while ago, will be overhauled as well before it goes on to become a very long fic. I am highly complimented that you found it an enjoyable fic even if it was not entirely clear. I wanted it to seem realistic and to give a sense of immediacy with the details, and perhaps I succeeded. Thank you very much for the review!
I've just read it again and am crying ^_^; I think you trie dot leave an authors response to my last review, but it didn't work. Please try again!
Author's Response: Wolfie, I Keeo trying to leave responses to everyone and the site won't let me! I hope this gets through! I am so glad that my story moved you! I think they don't know what to do about Elizabeth, and they are so stressed by other events that they basically treat her like a child and ignore her as much as possilbe when they don't. She sees all the things in Moody that they don't. It is not his magic she loves him for! Thank you so much for all your reviews! I really appreciate them! ProfPosky
Ah, such a sad little story... but I could see people acting like that. I don't know if everyone would have totally avoided her, but it is hard to tell. I love how she holds onto hope though, and won't admit that he could be dead. That was actually really nice when she realized it was the magical eye and not his real eye that was with Umbridge. LOL Cyns
Author's Response: This is a missing moment from Muggling Along, albeit a moment no one would know is missing yet, because the only part of that story posted is the original part from a year and a half ago. They are busy, they are worried about losing Moody's skills, and they do miss him, but she has seen so much more in him than they have that she is capable of missing him so much more deeply. To her, his magic is cool, but largely irrelevant. Muggle Matters is the prologue to that story, and shows how they met. I'm almost ready to post the second chapter of that, but it is still a while till we get all the way to Bill's wedding! Thank you so much for reviewing! I've responded to every review, but some refuse to post, and I don't know why. Sorry if it seemed I didn't notice! ProfPosky
I never imagined Mad-Eye married, but it's an interesting idea. well-written too. good job.
Author's Response: I'm glad you think it is interesting. The chapter of a less dark fic where he met his wife went up a few days ago - Muggle matters. I appreciate that you think it is well written. Thank you very much for reviewing and saying that! ProfPosky
HALLELUYAH!!!! I have been scouring mugglenet for six months and have failed to find a story about Mad-Eye, one that actually has him as a main character. And now I have found 3! 3 I tell you! 3! Okay, breathe... I just logged on and there it was, sitting there in the most recent stories...I am so, so pleased with you, person-who-I-do-not-know. Thank you SO much! I am going to add ALL of your Mad-Eye stories to faves (once I have read them, of course). :-D