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Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 07/07/08 15:40 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
I loved this, and it shows even more that Regulus was only trying to be what everyone expected as opposed to being himself, something I've believed for a long tome. I'm afraid I just like seeing the good in people, except perhaps Pettigrew. Anyway, an excellent fic, thanks.

Name: LunaWorshiper (Signed) · Date: 03/07/08 21:45 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
I really liked it!

Name: LifeAtRandom (Signed) · Date: 03/05/08 5:45 · For: That Black!
Interesting two-shot, and a good probe into Lily's life. But I have to give out some constructive criticism:

The characters' dialogue was unrealistic and too stilted for sixteen year olds. Your portrayal of Regulus was really odd and just not anything that I pictured of Regulus (but I suppose this is subjective because Regulus is a minor character). He just seemed too polite and friendly to become a future Death Eater, he had to have at least a little contempt for Lily or maybe he thought he was better than everyone else.

And there were some awkward moments in the story that seemed out of place (ie, the ending where Regulus pushed her against the wall and said "I just wanted you to get a taste of what you’re dealing with when you try to mess with a Slytherin."). I think you should of written more before that point, maybe more interactions between Regulus and Lily to get a better understanding of them.

Anyway, that's my opinion. Overall, the story had a lot of potential, it just came off a little dry.

Name: electronicquillster (Signed) · Date: 02/25/08 2:03 · For: That Black!
You know, I think your Regulus is brilliant, and I think that, even though Lily was a good influence on him, he was also a good influence on her. Blast you. I want them to be together! Anyway, I'm already digressing, which is probably a bad sign for this review.

Serious review time now. It's so interesting that the theme toward the end is Lily being good for Regulus, but Regulus was good for Lily. He helped her start to be more aware of the people around her, to not take them for face value. But you wrote that theme so subtly, it's probably not noticed by most people, and that is awesome of you as a writer. Being able to successfully write in subtle undertones can be very difficult.

One of the things I think you really have a talent for is writing the Marauders. Sure, you write lots of characters well, but you have such a handle on writing that nonchalance and teasing and just... there's not really any other term for it than essence of Marauder. There are so many bits that showcase that so well. One of my particular favorites of these is the sitting by Remus, and Remus sitting by the rest of them bit that features in this chapter. I also always adore your Lily. I think it's because I find you to be a lot like Lily, and so you can put a lot of yourself into this character, and she's just a fabulous character to read about. Honestly, I think she's one of your best. You seem to write her with a myriad of layers quite effortlessly. She has so much depth and richness the way you write her. I could clearly just go on and on about the way you write her.

I do have to take issue with this sentence though:
When the meeting was over, Lily saw Remus go, stammering, ask Rachael if he could escort her home and beamed when a soft smile lit her face.

I don't feel like the 'stammering' is in the right spot. The lovely flow that had been running throughout the narrative up to this point is all of a sudden jumbled up in my head.

And then there's this whole Lily-Regulus confrontation scene that I can't even handle, Leslie. Just, oh my goodness. There is so much delicious tension and anticipation in it. The sentences build upon each other, compounding the suspense of this conversation between them. She has to admit to him that she's been spying, he lets her know full well that he's been aware of this - meaning he's been watching her, too. There's the amusing point of stealth that is brought up, and then the terrible pain for Lily when Regulus brings up Severus. But, oh, the absolute sexual tension between them that is built up. They NEED a kiss! They need simply SOMETHING to alleviate all of this.

Instead they just get a chapter break.

Mwahaha. Which is perfect, actually. I know this was originally a one-shot, and you picked the perfect place to break it up. The whole chapter is building up, of course, and then there's that intense scene that nearly kills the readers at the end. It's all such a wonderful read. I do love this story. Your writing is absolutely topnotch in it.

Name: linnealovegood (Signed) · Date: 02/17/08 13:39 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
i loooooooooooove this!!!!!!!!!! its sooooooooooooo cute!!

Name: Hansolohpfrk (Signed) · Date: 02/16/08 10:58 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
This is a really really good fic. Please keep updating!


Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 02/06/08 16:37 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
A great idea for a fan fic! It was a nice way for Lily to get some closure too. Awesome chapter =)

Name: MaraudingMarauders (Signed) · Date: 02/06/08 13:42 · For: That Black!
Terrific chapter! I really like how Sirius was portrayed in this chapter :-)

Name: phoenixfire7 (Signed) · Date: 02/06/08 3:31 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
oh yeah...and it'd be absolutely great if you decided to continue this... :)

Name: phoenixfire7 (Signed) · Date: 02/06/08 3:29 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
all i have to say is: wow. this is def. one of the best stories i've ever read on here. it was so perfect, it flowed amazingly...impressively written!!

Name: Rhi for HP (Signed) · Date: 02/05/08 21:09 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
Nice finish! Poor Regulus-- Do we ever find out what happens to him out of all this? I like how you managed to finagle it to Lily and James getting together, too. I've read so many Lily/James fics and every time I grin anew when they, after years of unrequited love and hatred, finally get together. So sweet.

Name: Pissenoffanis (Anonymous) · Date: 02/05/08 16:36 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
LOL about the ending. Nice little touch of humour there. Great story, the plot is very well written, and keeps the reader interested. Poor Regulus though :(

Name: moonstonesilver (Signed) · Date: 02/05/08 10:29 · For: Chapter 2, for lack of a better title
lolol - until one hit her in the face :D :D lolol well, the story's going perfect - update soon, please!!!!!

Name: Karya (Signed) · Date: 02/04/08 19:59 · For: That Black!
wow i had goosebumps that was good

Name: Rhi for HP (Signed) · Date: 02/04/08 19:22 · For: That Black!
Wow, this is really good! I didn't read the synopsis before reading it, and was quite surprised, in a good way. Hmm... is there a Lily/Regulus ship, or animosity, blossoming here? I loved this, please continue!

Name: Pissenoffanis (Anonymous) · Date: 02/04/08 15:37 · For: That Black!
Hmmm, interesting story... I can't wait to find out more about Regulus! GOod job on weaving Lily's fight with Severus into it as well. Update soon!

Name: Crows (Signed) · Date: 02/04/08 15:17 · For: That Black!
Wow! It's so...heart-pounding! I need more. Congrats on an excellent opening chapter.

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