Reviewer: HPLoverForever
Date: 02/24/08 20:53
Chapter: When the wolf

I enjoyed reading this so much. You have such a way with words, along with the ability to evoke strong emotions from your reader. Well, at least from me.

I suppose I'll start on that topic. However ridiculous this may sound, as I was reading the scene before Remus' attack and Fenrir was talking to him, I practically shouted at the computer for Remus to run. Sad, huh? For me, yes. For you, no way! That's great that you have the ability to give your reader emotions like that, as it really makes the story that much more exciting to read.

I was wondering, why did Remus' parents leave him alone in the first place? It seems a bit odd that such a protective mother would let his small son sit alone...outside...in the dark? Especially since they are slightly concerned about Fenrir being somewhat close, although that is before Walbert's reassurance with his location.

The beast got up and, as if in afterthought said, in it’s gravely, raspy voice, ‘Tell your father Fenrir sends his regards.’ Remus simply caught sight of the beast

This part confused me a little bit, mainly the last sentence. I'm not really sure what you meant by that? Is it implying that Remus didn't hear, but only saw him? Plus Fenrir did say in the beginning to send his father his regards, so you might want to just take that bit out and conclude the scene another way. Oh, and remember a period at the end. ;)

This was a great story, especially for your first one! You did a great job writing it, you should be very proud. :)

Author's Response: Wow thank you soooo much! This is by far the best review I've received and I'll edit it. Thanks a lot! Yeah I think I'll need to have a word with my beta about the period ;)

Author's Response: Oh yeah, in response to your comments: a) I kinda meant it to show that Remus' father was reasonably cocky. b) It wasn't as dark as I made it out to be. I hope this didn't stop you from enjoying the story. I'm really excited... I've got to show my English Teacher!

Reviewer: qqquill_rita
Date: 02/23/08 14:51
Chapter: When the wolf

creepy

Author's Response: Whadya mean creepy? (PS.S I'm not taking offense)

Reviewer: qqquill_rita
Date: 02/23/08 14:50
Chapter: When the wolf

creepy

Reviewer: CowGirlHPFan
Date: 02/23/08 11:43
Chapter: When the wolf

Wow:) Very good, I kinda think a sequel would be really good with this though...maybe eventually you could write one? It was really good for your 1st fic, great job:)

Author's Response: Right tahnks a lot. I was thinking of doing one, after a while has gone by. Maybe Remus could be an adult. I'll think about it.

Reviewer: Vampire Hunter Blade
Date: 02/22/08 16:23
Chapter: When the wolf

Very Interesting.

Author's Response: Hmmm, yeah. What do you mean by interesting? PM me in the forums if you want, my name is Sev.

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