Reviewer: annabelsmith
Date: 04/27/10 12:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

ur doing grt dear keep on

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

Reviewer: snape sauce
Date: 05/15/09 17:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

i really liked this, the conversation flowed well. and i'm glad you didn't rush the romance like a lot of other one shots do. nice job!

Author's Response: Yay! More compliments!!! :D

Reviewer: snape sauce
Date: 05/15/09 17:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

i really liked this, the conversation flowed well. and i'm glad you didn't rush the romance like a lot of other one shots do. nice job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I wanted to make it a smooth reading that wasn't filled with mushy-gushy romantic scenes. Readers can imagine that stuff on their own well enough!

Reviewer: i AM lily potter
Date: 11/18/08 19:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh its so sweet.
That wasn't very constructive, but that's all I really have to say. Keep up the great writing. :)

Author's Response: But it IS constructive! At least now I know that I'm doing something right. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Nattycutie14
Date: 06/17/08 12:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

how 'bout starting their date then have Lily kiss him when they are walking up to the castle??
Love it by the way!! **

Author's Response: Oh, I'm not sure Lily's quite to that point yet! But thanks for the review! I love that you loved it. :)

Reviewer: ginnyseeker
Date: 05/29/08 1:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

I read The Beginning and Unexpected Hope too and I think the stories are brilliant. :D

Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: thesmart1
Date: 04/25/08 19:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

oh, good, good, very good!! made me laugh. quite cute too. especially with the vivid image i'm getting of james and the marauders pacing and going through 1001 things he must not do around lily....hahahahaha! nice. i often prefer it when lily/james stories are in james' POV. i like the name james. haha. random, i know. i really liked this! i wish you could've continued and wrote about the date. lol this was very good :)

Author's Response: One question: have you had sugar recently? Ha, ha! I don't mind if your review is a little random. You still reviewed and that's what I love. Any feedback is good to have! Sorry about the date, though. I want to leave that open for you to imagine. At least you enjoyed what I DID write! Thank you so much!

Reviewer: Bexia
Date: 04/06/08 19:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

I love your writing. Stick to your quirky cool style!

Author's Response: Ooh, quirky! Thanks for your review! I definitely won't be changing my style anytime soon now that you've mentioned it.

Reviewer: GryffindorGals
Date: 03/05/08 9:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

I loved it!!! Brilliant! Please write more.
P.S. I love James/Lily stories

~Hannah {one of the GryffindorGals}

Author's Response: Ooh! Reviews like yours makes an author's day! Thank you so much!

Reviewer: tashy
Date: 03/01/08 12:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

i really like ur ideas and your writing is brilliant
however i get a feeling it may turn out to be like the usual james/lily love story
....but....its only ur first chapter and the chapter is are doing well
i hope you add a little...hmmm...spice into ur next few
gud luck!

Author's Response: Thanks, tashy! It won't be like the usual J/L fics, I promise, because this story's a one-shot. The series is only meant to show how they first got together. If you haven't already, you can check out the two prequels. The links are on my author's page.

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 02/28/08 20:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow! u are an amazing writer. i love this series. its so great. its sweet and cute. i love how you describe James charactor and how you show the changes he made with himself to impress Lily. great job!

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliments! I was actually afraid while writing it that James would seem a little TOO obsessed. I'm glad you didn't think so.

Reviewer: lilys fairy
Date: 02/13/08 21:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

awww thats cute!

Author's Response: *smug look* I've got the most darling little bunny on the block. Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: daffy
Date: 02/13/08 9:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

really nice!! CUTE!! loved it loved it loved it!!!
i think u shud continue writin!! maybe lily's pov or sequel.... ur pic.... m here just to read!!

Author's Response: Again with the cuteness! My story must be really styling! Thank you for the ideas. I actually thought it might be interesting to see the series from Lily's POV, too. I guess that's just another plot bunny for me to feed and look after.

Reviewer: I Am Peeves
Date: 02/12/08 23:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think this was an amazing one-shot, wich is saying something since I usually despise one-shots. I am more the type that likes really really long stories with equally long sequels. If you would write one of those, I would be very interested.

hint hint

Author's Response: Despise one-shots? I love them! That's a pretty high compliment, though, for someone who hates them to like mine. I do have some ideas for some longer stories, but they still need to stew around for awhile before they're posted for public reading.

Reviewer: The Mighty KFC
Date: 02/12/08 21:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

this story is really good and I don't have any constuctive criticisim. I typically don't review, but after I read this I knew that I had to congratulate you on a great oneshot.
While the story was a chapter, it didn't feel rushed at all. Great Job!

Author's Response: Yet again, no criticism for me to work off of. I'm sooo disappointed. :D Ha, ha! I'm happy you reviewed at all! Thank you many, many times over! Rushing was a worry of mine, so I'm glad you didn't sense any.

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 02/12/08 20:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

I'm really sorry, but I'm afraid I haven't any constructive criticism for you. I absolutely loved this! It was just so well written, the characters leap off the page, James' constant reminders to himself of how to win Lily over are so endraring and the whole chapter just flowed. My only disappointment was that there are no other chapters waiting to be read, so perhaps you can work on that, hint, hint. And just in case my rambling wasn't clear, I LOVE THIS FIC! PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOON!

Author's Response: No constructive criticism, eh? Well, that's okay. Compliments that make me feel all warm and fuzzy work, too. The story was meant to stand alone (except for prequels :) ), so I'm going to have to think about the whole "updating" issue.

Reviewer: siriuslysirius92
Date: 02/12/08 16:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

aw that was so cute! really! update!!!

Author's Response: Cute! I'm glad you thought so! I don't know about the whole update thing, though.

Reviewer: Pennilyn Novus
Date: 02/12/08 15:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

You're growing as a writer; from your first story to this one, I can see a vast improvement. This story is cohesive, has a plot, a character arc, and had some fluffy warm James/Lily moments. I hope you'll write more in this series.

Author's Response: SQUEE!!! Thank you so much! Those were some of the best compliments I have even received for writing. Comments like yours are the things that make my day.

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