Reviewer: ChosenOneFtw
Date: 09/25/11 6:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was so saaaaaaaaaad! Especially this sentence- "When Hermione awoke, she shivered; the hand upon her shoulder was cold."
But one thing I'd like to know, why did Ron die?

Reviewer: mugglenetaddict813
Date: 07/18/08 10:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

What a sad but beautiful story! It really pulled me in even from the beginning. I think you did a great job of displaying Hermione's grief through the words. You really captured what it would be like for a young wife to lose her husband. (I know that I would feel empty without my husband!) But, I am curious about one thing. What did Ron die of? Was he hurt or was it something like cancer? Just wondering. Great job though on the story! :)

Reviewer: LoveHarry_93
Date: 02/24/08 2:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

Great story. You painted the picture of Hermione's suffering well, I was able to feel what she was feeling- i felt sad...
Beautiful piece of writing! (:

Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking the time to review. I'm glad you enjoyed! Phily :)

Reviewer: Padfoot Patronus
Date: 01/31/08 11:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very nice, Phily. Specially loved the ending. Unexpected, innocent and thoughtful :D I've always enjoyed reading the variety of strong bonds shared by the trio. In your one-shot, Hermione refering to Ron as her husband as well as best friend, Harry refusing to accept Ron's death, Hermione feeling sad at Harry's absence, are all very touching and well-written.

I also think you very beautifully pulled the references to the colours. There are some very orignal scenary and descriptions you used. It keeps the reader hooked.

The downside was its length :)

I'd have loved some elaboration of the title. It could very well have been your style, but as I got attached with the fic, I was also hoping for some more details, Ron's sickness, maybe an event in between when Hermione tries to contact Harry.

And perhaps, if you can find the urge and a plot bunny, a sequel. Maybe :)

good job there.

Akay

Author's Response: Haha! A sequel may be interesting... :) I will bear that in mind for when I get time to write some more. This was exciting for me because as many can see, I haven't written anything for mnff in a long time! I'm glad the prompt for the challenge gave me a plot bunny and I had a chance to go with it. Thanks for the comments and I'm glad you liked it! *hugs* Phily :)

Reviewer: HermionesTwin_FromOz
Date: 01/30/08 16:52
Chapter: Chapter 1

First review? Phily, this deserves heaps of them! Wow, wow ,wow! I loved it from the first time I read it! :D Sad, but beautiful...


Author's Response: Thank you! And thanks for all your help! :) First review for first beta job? Sounds good! I will be back if I get time to write some more! Phily :)

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