Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 07/31/08 18:16
Chapter: Clever Tricks and Cute Bums

Haha, funny! I love Hermione's robes... you certainly come up with interesting character names. They're probably not British, but that's all right ^_^ *wishes for next chapter to be validated*

Author's Response: Almost all of the extra characters' names were volunteered by readers! It was fun including them in the story and let them be interactive. But I got too many requests, and subsequently started "To Draco, With Love". Thanks for reading my story, I'm glad you got a laugh!

Reviewer: XxXharrypottergirlXxX
Date: 07/29/08 9:09
Chapter: Let the Game Begin

*claps* well done!!! I'm such a huge HP fan and it felt like a little continuation of the books for me. You may not have stuck completely to the characters exactly like they are in the books, but I really enjoyed reading your story!! I'm planning on studying English in college I'd like to say, and I know the hard work that goes into writing a story!! I laughed so hard at the Luna thinking Snape was a vampire part!! :D v funny!! I wasn't very taken with Harry daring Hermione to kiss Ron; however I liked the notes they sent b/w them the next day (Hermione not accepting apology until Ron said "You're very pretty" - funny! Although she is smart too so maybe you should have included that in the note - think about how she lets them borrow her notes/hw in the books, if they compliment her study skills! I think you should have said that, I know Ron doesn't just value Hermione because she's simply "pretty". You know?:D) Anyway, overall, I really enjoyed it!! ;-) well done, please keep updating! Thanks:D xx

Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to write to me! I'm glad you felt the story, even if my characterization isn't always perfect! I studied some English Literature in college, and I know you'll enjoy it. There's so many subjects to choose from! I was never, ever bored. I'm glad you liked the bit about passing notes. Ron does know how smart Hermione is, and could easily have complimented her on it, but instead he went to what he thinks is the most appreciated compliment a girl can hear: "You're very pretty". Lucky for him, it put a smile on Hermione's face. She's *always* hearing about how smart and bookish she is, so I thought she deserved some new praise for a change. Plus, it's the start of some Ron/Hermione flirting.... ;)

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 20:08
Chapter: S.P.E.W and Truth

yay awesome. update soon please!

Author's Response: Should be any day now... I've been having some Beta problems! Thanks for your patience!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 20:03
Chapter: Green and Crimson

yay, the war continues! thats really great!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 9:16
Chapter: Soaps and Suds

wow, that sliding thing in the bathroom really seems like fun. I should try that some timer *grins adventurously*
great chapter. This story is really AWESOME!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: It is! I've done it before when a friend of mine bought a new home, and wanted a creative way to clean the floors. A bunch of us volunteered and had a lot of fun scrubbing around!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 9:11
Chapter: Worms and Wars

a prank war. i love those. i bet its gonna be hilarious!!!

Author's Response: I hope so! ;)

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 9:03
Chapter: Passing Notes

hehe. funny funny. very very very (a thousand more very's that i will not add because its too much) funny! you've got a talent!

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 9:00
Chapter: Candy and Garlic

i shall read on immediately...
*reads on immediately*

Author's Response: LOL... nice narrative!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 8:53
Chapter: Dares Fulfilled

this is on of my favorite chapter. neville is so cute standing up for everyone!
“Admission is the first step to acceptance,” That made me totally crack up. Your hilarious!

Author's Response: I'm glad I made you laugh!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 8:49
Chapter: Boxers and Beans

Harry wears snitch boxers? hehe thats so funny :)
Even though i've read it before, im still excited to see what happens next.

Author's Response: Some think it's too cliche, but some found it surprising. I just thought it was adorable. I'm glad you enjoyed that bit!

Reviewer: Raffles
Date: 07/28/08 8:45
Chapter: Let the Game Begin

Yay, i read the first chapter again. It's still awesomely awesome!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: GryffindorGirl163
Date: 07/27/08 12:45
Chapter: S.P.E.W and Truth

i have been gone away for awhile so i didn't get to read the chapter in till today. must say i loved it like always. i love the way you write ginny and luna the most there so much like them selfs it great. any why i hope the next chapter gets threw soon becasue i can't wait to read it.
i just wanted to tell you that i would favoried this but it is not working and it wont let me it hasn't for awhile but it is my fav humor fiction so great job

Author's Response: The next chapter should be up soon. I kept having techmical difficulties, and it was rejected three times in a row! All for careless mistakes, I'm embarassed to say. But it should be ready soon and I hope you enjoy it. Thanks for the support!

Reviewer: Babbity Rabbity
Date: 07/23/08 17:21
Chapter: Let the Game Begin

Just finished reading all ten chapters.
Then I went into the reviews.
Got to page 2, and what did I find?
My good friend Mirekano, reviewing your fic.
However, I’m not supposed to go off talking about other reviews first (I think).
So, to start with your story.
It was more than mildly amusing, I will agree with that. I didn’t split my sides laughing, but probably only JKR, Andy Riley (The Book of Bunny Suicides) and Terry Pratchett have really done that for me. So, your story was pretty good, especially considering that it wasn’t professionally edited and such.
The idea of a truth or dare in the Gryffindor common room spreading to the rest of the school was pretty clever, I don’t think I have seen that before. Also, a lot of the dares were pretty creative. There weren’t too many standard ones. I know most commonly (from experience) that the truths are “Who is your crush”, and others about a personal love life. Dares don’t really have a typical form or anything, but the serenading was some nice use of the brain. I think. Can’t be sure when it comes to that organ, but I found it pretty creative (for lack of a better word, sorry).
However, Mirekano is right about some things. The class schedules are not canon compliant. Although some may say that it doesn’t matter, to me, it causes a bit of irritation.
Also, would Luna really be allowed in the Gryffindor common room?
The technical stuff isn’t that important, I suppose. But all your OCs seem a bit much. Don’t want to sound like a response to a “Dear [insert generic female name here],” in a newspaper column (you know, where the writers spill their guts) but have you thought about saying no? I read your response to Mirekano’s review, and see that you’ve stopped accepting. However, it seemed like you were just agreeing with the requests, not even trying to work with the names. I mean, ‘Lulu’? Really?
Also, there was some extreme OOC-ness. Hate to break it to you, but although you tried to counter Luna’s OOC-ness with a rubber band bracelet, etc., she just isn’t that kind of character. She’d also never get that much detention. What were you thinking.
Also, would everyone really be obsessed with Harry? And Luna’s fellow Ravenclaws didn’t seem to display Ravenclaw-ish traits. Although maybe they are revealed later, I don’t know.
One last piece of constructive criticism. Draco Malfoy… I feel like it would take way more than what Ginny did to get him to sob like a girl.
He’s been humiliated much worse, but now he breaks down? It’s just that our Slytherin Prince has gone through a few too many changes.
Gosh, this is turning out to be way too long. Sorry if I take up a lot of your page.
Now, I sigh and write more. I guess.
HPAndHG4ever. Flame? Really? I don’t like to complain about other people’s reviews, but this is ridiculous. She offered constructive criticism. It’s sort of welcome after all the seriously I LOVE this story!!!’s. How else will the author get better? To say, “I’ve established that this person doesn't know what they're talking about” is just unfair? Seriously, just because someone disagreed with you doesn’t mean their wrong. Mirekano has a right to express her opinion, and she made some very good points. Maybe the story was more than ‘mildly amusing’, but how can it hurt the author’s feelings after everybody else expressed glee with the story.
This is way too long for anyone to care but me. Oh well. Maybe I’ll be able to keep it short next story.

Author's Response: I really appreciate your well-rounded criticism, and your detailed feedback about the things you liked and the things you didn't like, or may not have agreed with. To respond: I know some of my non-canon class attendance is grating on some readers, and I plan on phasing it out now that the "game" is a little more school-wide. I thought I explained about Luna being allowed in the common-room, and how most of the Gryffindors had agreed to let her sneak in for games of T and D. Now that you mention it, however, I do think that bears some more explaining... and may even be an interesting wrench in the gears. You're completely right about the "OCs". There's too many of them still in the story, even though I stop accepting "interactive cameos" long, long ago. Here's the embarassing thing, though: What you're reading is the result of cutting a LOT of the OCs! You have no idea how many were stuffed into it before! But I've been phasing those out increasingly as well as trying to give them more "Potterverse" names. Hopefully you'll start to see an improvement in that soon. But how could I turn down "Lulu"? That's just too cute. (I digress.) I realize that Luna isn't usually this detention-bound, but the point of this story is that Luna is becoming a bit more daring, while some of her quirks are rubbing off on our favourite Gryffindors. About the believablity of Ginny make Draco whine or cry, remember how melodramatic he's been before, such as when Buckbeak "tried to kill him". I think I'll take your advice to temper his silly disposition in his story, because I think I may have used up all his icyness in one of my other stories, "New Azkaban". I appreciate you leaving such a comprehensive note for me to read, and I assure you, you're not the only one who cares. I read (and eventually respond to) every review. I also appreciate you wanting to defend Mirekano's right to express her feelings, but I think she and I settled that in the back-and-forths on the review board. I care about all feedback, whether it's critical or praising, short or long, and I promise I won't let the "OMG" posts go to my head. Thanks for being out there and taking the time to give me feedback. My prize baby is "New Azkaban", and I'd love to hear what you think of it so far. I'm really constantly trying to make that one perfect, and you seem to have sharp eyes. Much love - Hutchinson

Reviewer: x2o
Date: 07/22/08 21:11
Chapter: Let the Game Begin

A very original and funny story! I love it and can't wait to hear the upcoming parts :D

Author's Response: Thanks! Check out some of my other stories if you get a chance!

Reviewer: meandprongs
Date: 07/21/08 22:03
Chapter: S.P.E.W and Truth

UPDATE!!!!! DO IT!!! DO IT!!!

Author's Response: I've been getting a lot of notes, (some kinda angry), about the not updating. I promise it's not completely up to me. Chapters get into the queue, and sometimes don't make it out again. But I promise, I have not abandoned this story! If you get terrible bored while awaiting the new chapter, though, check out any of my other stories. I have plenty to keep you occupied.

Reviewer: Mirekano
Date: 07/21/08 12:06
Chapter: Let the Game Begin

A bit late replying here- shut up, I was at camp. Dx
But it saddens me greatly that MNFF has fallen to the point where constructive criticism is viewed as a flame, and met only with a defensive attitude.
I did attempt to soften my review- it wasn't all bad, which I notice you didn't comment on.
Is the truth no longer important? As long as the only reviews you're getting are the generic 'omg i luv ur story i'm addin u to my favs!!!!1!!', you aren't going to improve. Isn't that the point of reviews?
Maybe not. It's a shame, though, to see how far standards have dropped.

Author's Response: I love this site, and the web of supportive and intelligent readers/writers, but sometimes one of these comes along. *Sigh*, here goes: *I* didn't view your comment as a flame, but some other readers may have. In my response, I told you very clearly what about your feedback I appreciated and what I didn't. I thought I made it very clear that I want to continue to improve my writing style. It seem that you may have read *other* reviewers' responses, but not mine. Go back and read it again. I'm sorry I didn't give you a cookie for "softening" your review, considering the "mildly amusing" quip (which came off pretty snobby, by the way). But I certainly told you several times that I appreciate *all* feedback and that you'd given me something to think about. What more did you expect from me? ....... Of course the the truth is important, but it's about tact... not speaking down to people, or trying to "soften" something that's only a thinly veiled insult. I'll say it again just so you don't mistake me this time: I read, thought about, and considered your feedback along with replying to every single thing you had to say in it. Go read it again and think it over before you get on here and speak down to me (or anyone else) again. I don't ever want to have a conversation like this again. On an end note, I'll agree with you on one thing; "It's a shame, though, to see how far standards have dropped".

Reviewer: ChaChia
Date: 07/21/08 8:32
Chapter: S.P.E.W and Truth


Can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Me, either! I think it's been in the queue for two weeks! Hopefully it'll be up soon. Sometimes I don't get the e-mails, so someone tell me in a review if the new chapter gets posted!

Reviewer: ChaChia
Date: 07/21/08 8:24
Chapter: Green and Crimson

Another good chapter. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Much appreciated!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/20/08 9:29
Chapter: S.P.E.W and Truth

Hahaha! This was a wonderful chapter!

Author's Response: Glad I got a laugh out of you!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/20/08 9:27
Chapter: Green and Crimson

Ooo, Cannot wait to see what happens next! Two thumbs way up for this chapter :-)

Author's Response: Thanks! I have some other stories up, another humour story as well as a couple Dramiones. Check them out!

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