...although he [Bill] usually complied with most of them, he seemed to do it just because he agreed on the rules, not because he respected them
This sentence struck me in particular because this seems to be the attitude a lot of people I know have. A very good way of wording it.
That she let him grow up on her own, because she thought he was very good at it.
This sentence is a little confusing. Did you mean let him grow up on his own?
The beginning of your story was beautiful. I loved the comparison between each of the Weasley siblings in Molly's eyes. While I'm not a mother, I can see how sometimes it's hard not to have a favorite. The way you described how Percy's leaving impacted Molly was beautiful. The way she glances at the clock, the way she couldn't deal with the rejection of her son.
My favorite part, ironically, was when Fred died. It seemed like Molly was finally understanding that each one of her children was precious and that she can't bear to lose any of them or choose between them.
I felt that that was the best place to stop the story. I would've found the message of the story more agreeable had you stopped there.
I felt the description of events following Fred's death were rushed. I suppose you did have to put a cap, an ending, and follow the same comparison-between-Weasleys format that you started with. However, none of the information seemed necessary since we know what had happened afterwards (at least, what happened to Ron, Ginny, and Bill). It seemed like the only reason why you included all the information that you did (the Weasley sibling's children) was just to follow the pattern. It didn't make a smooth transition.
And I found it odd that even after Fred's death, Molly still saw Percy as her favorite. While I understand that perhaps this story is more focused on the bonding between Molly and Percy, I can't help but wonder if she didn't learn anything from her emotions after Fred's death.
Like I said, if the message was about how there couldn't ever be favorites amongst your own children, I would've loved this story. Though the theme of the story wasn't what I wanted, I still think you handled this story well and that you portrayed each character, particularly Molly, superbly.
This was so sweet, and nicely written. I love your idea of Percy being the favorite, and him waiting for Molly to be all right before moving on with his life. It was very original and heart-warming, great job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) I always thought there was a little more to Percy, and the fact that he named his daughter Molly just clinched it for me. I thought, God, Molly would have loved that ....and this idea just came.
awww... good story!! that's so sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed. :)
This was so good. My eyes are still filled with tears. Poor Mrs. Weasley.Great Job!
Author's Response: I know, I cried too! LOL. Thanks for reading!
I love it.
I LOVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVVE IT.
That's all I can say.
Author's Response: :) Thank you sooo much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.