Wow, this was a beautiful story to read. The way how you described the founders and how Helga sees them all. I liked especially the part where Salazar, Rowena and Helga stood behind their chairs and she thinks about the robes and colours they wear.
We stand behind our chairs wearing our ceremonial robes in the colours that we have chosen for our Houses. Salazar looks imposing in his threads of green and silver, and the blue and bronze colours in Rowena’s robe look beautiful in contrast with her skin.
I, the plain one, try not to think about what the yellow looks like on me.
*chuckles* The last sentence is nice and shows that Helga is different to Rowena and Salazar. Simply wonderful part.
Also, the idea with the bet and tickling a dragon? Great. I liked it a lot.
I noticed some minor mistakes:
Salazar tells me that I acting like a fool, […]
The “acting” should be “act” here. And in the following you missed the third-person-s at the end of the first verb:
Rowena senses this and leans over to me,
And in the following sentence, in the speech, there’s a “was” too much; the first one doesn’t work in the sentence:
[…] I assure Godric, “I am certain that was Salazar was not afraid of the dragon.”
I especially liked that you used first person as the narrator and present tense. It gave me the feeling to be with Helga at all times. I could really feel the time and the loneliness Helga felt with Godric’s absence. You’ve grasped Helga’s thoughts perfectly.
And the reference to Hogwarts’ motto with never to tickle a sleeping dragon? Fantastic.
Great story. Liked it a lot.
Oh that was wonderful! I love myself a good founders fic... And that last line definitely gave me chills. Wonderful, dear!
Tehehe. I like the portrayal of Salazar, he seems almost Snape-like, but with a better sense of humour. Godric shone, honestly, Tash, the character you've got for him there is awesome! Actually, I suppose I could say the same for Rowena and Helga. You've got all those characters very well-written.
I also liked the concept of the "dark spirits" being within rather than without. And the tickling of the sleeping dragon was funny!
This is the second Founder story I've read today where it mentioned Helga having a habit of looking towards the future; is it mentioned in canon or something?
All round, a terribly lovely fic. The opening paragraphs were so good, and from thereon in it only got better. Well done!
I actually laughed out loud when I read the "Never Tickle a Sleeping Dragon" reference. Great one-shot.