MuggleNet Fan Fiction
Harry Potter stories written by fans!
Name: Sayla Nable
(Signed) · Date:
01/20/08 20:16 · For:
I can't begin to describe how much I enjoyed this fic! Your attention to detail is remarkable! It makes the story much more colorful and interesting, as I'm sure you know. You also captured Voldemort perfectly. I always found him to be a tricky character to understand, but you wrote him as well as J.K. Rowling herself.
I only have one nit-picky critique. Snape was already a part of the Order at the beginning of Book 5, so he wouldn't have needed to teach Harry Occlumency to get into the Order. That's the only flaw I could find.
I really loved your fic. I'm really interested to see what happens next!
Author's Response: ha, thanks for the review; I'm glad you enjoyed. And as for Snape...well, he lied about not being in the Order. I should probably go back and make that clearer....
hope you keep reading.