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Name: EmmyT (Signed) · Date: 12/21/10 14:21 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
I really, really loved this!! I adore Scorpius/Rose and you gave them both believable personalities. I love the idea that it would be Neville who helped them finally kiss. Well done!

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Name: montse (Signed) · Date: 05/31/08 2:15 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
Very nice fic.

Author's Response: Thank you :) ~Nicole

Name: Lucky_13_Girl (Signed) · Date: 05/29/08 13:27 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
This is totally awesome! I'm a total Rose/Scorpious shipper! TTFN!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot. Definately a Rose/Scorpius shipper as well :D ~Nicole

Name: jenny b (Signed) · Date: 03/22/08 3:09 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
Aww! This was very sweet. I adore Scorpius/Rose, and the Christmas feel to this story was just wonderful.

I loved how you characterised Rose. She was so … original. :] I’ve been reading a lot of stories featuring Rose lately, and a lot of them seem to make her a carbon copy of Ginny, or Hermione. You’ve made her a true Weasley, but with her own charm. It was very refreshing. However, she does seem a little too perfect. I know it can be hard to really develop an unknown character in such a short fic, but she should still have her flaws. She was beautiful, outgoing, good at Charms, boys liked her … you need her to be a little more fleshed-out.

I wasn’t too fond of your characterisation of Scorpius, though. I’m trying to keep in mind that he is a completely new character, and we don’t know a thing about him, but still … I can’t see how Draco Malfoy’s Slytherin son could be so shy and quiet. I was a little disappointed that he didn’t have at least one smart-mouthed comeback, or a sneer. You mostly showed him around Rose, which I understand, but surely he could’ve said something to his friends when they were talking about her. I just think he should be a little less reserved.

I loved how the plot of this fic developed, but I think you could give it a little more originality. Having Neville put Scorpius and Rose together alone is just a tad too cliché for me. The rest of the plot was fabulous, and it all flowed together well, but that part could use a bit of work.

I also think you should add some more dialogue and interaction in there. Where you did have it, I absolutely loved it. You write them together very well. I only wish there was a bit more! In particular, at the end where they have a fight with the decorations. I think if you added in a little more of their reactions to each other, it would be amazing. Maybe you could have Rose blush a little, Scorpius’s hand tingle as she let go of it … do you see what I mean?

Their kiss at the end made me smile like crazy. It was perfect, and very romantic. I love how shy and innocent they seemed. ‘Now that she had officially kissed a boy’ made me laugh out loud. It kind of reminded me of me as a thirteen-year-old. :] The last line was absolutely magical. I suck at last lines. Yours was wonderful though, because it ends it, but it also makes you wonder what’s to come.

All in all, I really loved this fic. Thanks!


Author's Response: *is excited* A very long review! Yeah, I can see her a little like Ginny and Hermione with some of their characteristics but not exactly like them. Looking back at her now, she does seem a liiitle to perfect. So when I write more Rosie stories, I'll flesh her out a bit :) With Scorpius, I tried to show the shyness of a guy around a girl. I'm a little sick of the arrogant smart mothed boys (namely ones at school) And being influenced by his friends isn't good. I wanted to show he's different than how his father was at his age. Hopefully not all guys are bad, but some are sweet shy boys. rnrnI like your idea Jennifer! About the blush and hand tingling, I'll be sure to writethem into another story. I think I might write like a sequel to this story or something, either just as sweet and innocent or a little bit older *wink* I can try at least, hehe. Ha 'now that she had offically kissed a boy' I was watching a tv show and theese kids were like, "Well, we're not offically boyfriend and girlfriend until we kiss!" So I liked that idea. But Scorpius and Rose are 'going out' really, just crushing on each other. Well, for now *wink*rnrnThank you so much Jennifer *huggles*rn~Nicole

Name: jellydogt (Signed) · Date: 01/19/08 12:48 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
This is so cute! i think it would be great if scorpious and rose got together, it would force malfoy, ron, hermionie, and eventualy harry to get together sometime, without trying to kill each other.

Author's Response: Exactly! Well, maybe they won't get along all that well at first and maybe Ron and Draco will hope that Rose and Scorpius will break up but they might grown on each other :D Thanks for the review!rnrn~NIcole

Name: bubblegumpinkhair (Signed) · Date: 01/17/08 18:50 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
It's really cute, but i wish you would have written more about how their parents hated each other, but still I reallly like it!!!!! Plus I really like your style.

First Post!!!!!

Author's Response: *perks up at the thought of plot bunny* Well then, I'll have to write more about the parents side of their relationship. Maybe a Christmas party meeting? *hurries to jolt down ideas* Thanks for the reviews :) ~Nicole

Name: JustLikeHermione77 (Signed) · Date: 01/17/08 18:47 · For: Mistletoe: Innocent Decoration, or Guilty of Causing Kisses?
good story! rose and scorpius, what an unlikely couple! well actually if you think about all the hermione/draco stories it makes sense.... :-P

Author's Response: An unlikely couple, well I don't think so. JK Rowling, I think, intentionally wrote some of those comments in the epilogue for us to pick up on and write these stories. But yes, with all the Hermione/Draco stories and the outrage of a mudblood and Malfoy loving each other, this is perfect. Because we all knew that she was going to end up with Ron (sorry to disappoint Hermione/Draco fans) but we control the events with Rose and Scorpius. Hehe, nothing to stop us.rnrn~Nicole

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