Reviewer: washedmemories
Date: 07/20/08 7:39
Chapter: Prologue

I'm impressed. I didn't see many uses of passive voice like I do on most stories. I'm also very intrigued by the story. I think you have something great going on. Just two things I thought I would point out, both not very big.

Albus would only rarely come to the pub, preferring the mulled mead and flirtatious personality of that wench Rosmerta.


 Just drop only and I think you should be fine =) 


Altogether versus All together, always an interesting battle. I just thought I would point it out and just throw it in the air for you, 'cause it isn't even something I should be worrying about, it's just something I find amusing. Apparently scholars and grammaratics (hm. that would be funny if they were actually called that) argue about the concept of all together and altogether. All together seems to be used in formal occassions when writing, but hey, I just thought I would share the debate bit about it ^^'


As for the story, very strong prologue I think, the letter actually felt like it was from Dumbledore. Good job. Reading chapter one :D     

Reviewer: triangle90
Date: 04/02/08 21:48
Chapter: Shaken

I love you story please write more.

Author's Response: There should be a few new chapters available now, plus one in the queue. I love the summer because I can actually do some writing.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 03/30/08 22:50
Chapter: Shaken

Wow! Very impressive! You'd think Harry's aunt would have been more civil to him, but, old wounds never heal.
It's a shame, too, he was her nephew, whether she liked it or not.
Once again, great story!

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 03/30/08 22:24
Chapter: Prologue

Very interesting story, so sad that Aberforth loses his only brother. At least Albus kept in touch, if ever so briefly.
I look forward to reading the next chapter.

Author's Response: There are a few more chapters available now, and one in the queue, so hopefully it's approved sometime soon!

Reviewer: voldiegirl
Date: 01/26/08 8:46
Chapter: Prologue


Author's Response: The first real capture is in the queue. Hopefully approved some day soon!

Author's Response: The first real chapter is in the queue. Hopefully approved some day soon!

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