I'm not a great poetry fan as well, but this was was cute. Simple, though, but made me smile. The language was easy to understand and it was not a big problem for someone like me to follow. The rhyming was nice, though, you could have made each line of even length. Some lines have only a few words while others are long, and that's kind of weird. Anyway, I enjoyed the poem. Short and sweet.
I have to say, that I'm not much of a peotry fan, but this really made me smile. So the fact that I read yours through is a huge compliment! I liked your use of muli-versed quatrains. The language was simple and easily understood but you picked good verbs/adjectives to convey your meaning. I appreciated the fact that it was humorous. Overall I found it very enjoyable. Good work!
wow! great job that was an awesome poem! i just love J/L stuff its so cute!! (as you can prbly tell from my name) good job!
That was absolutely adorable!!!! Rock on!!! lol
AAAAaaaawwwww! That was a really sweet poem! I LOVE it! I love Lily/James stuff, it's soooo cute! Keep writing! MORE LILY AND JAMES PLEASE?!?!?! :) (Oh, and by the way, *10*)
Author's Response: Hi, thanks for reviewing. I like this story too, but it was a one-shot fic. I wanted it to be more chapters, but, giving the lack of L/J information in the books, I figured the next chapter would just be kind of stupid with a lot of lack of canon. Thanks again!