Reviewer: weasleywannabe47
Date: 08/12/08 16:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

GREAT!I would like to read a sequel of this!I loved her kids!

Reviewer: dumblond-katie
Date: 04/19/08 1:52
Chapter: Chapter 1

Sweet, I would have liked to read about their Christmas day, but oh well. Fabulous.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: hpreader1
Date: 03/23/08 19:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

I haven't read anything like this before. It is completely unique and I love it!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Reviewer: ren_a87
Date: 01/16/08 21:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

Parvati seems to leave rather abruptly. The time is rather vague because all the children are up and go for a walk and then the midnight mass bells ring. Maybe you could talk about the fire dying down to show a significant amount of time has passed? All in all though it was a good fic. I've never read any about the twins and I never thought about how different they wuld be being from different houses.

Author's Response: Hm, so I'll definitely be looking at the ending. Thanks for your suggestions, and the review, as always!

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 01/16/08 4:56
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aw. that was a really sweet fic Alison. It was just so homy and comfy and warm. A perfect christmas read.=Sammy

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Valentinia
Date: 01/12/08 19:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very sweet! A nice Christmas fic! I liked seeing how different they had become - from their original dreams and from each other. Also, it was great to see them back together again. Padma's family, too, did seem great! I liked the feeling of a short story, where we don't know too much background information, but just see this one evening. I did think that Parvati's departure was a little abrupt. You might want to try to make it a little smoother. And, there was a lot of dialogue. You could probably add a little more description, but it's not really necessary. All in all though, I enjoyed this fic! It was really quite lovely!

Author's Response: I like writing dialogue more than anything else, and when I get caught up in it, I rarely resurface for descriptions—it's definitely one of my faults. I'll go back and look and take your advice. Thanks so much for the great review!

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