That's a really cute story. I especially like the last paragraph.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
First off, I love how you took a minor character, and dedicated an entire one-shot to her. I adore reading fanfics like this, simply because it gives the author so much room to breathe and come up with their own original back-story. I find it much more interesting reading a new opinion of a character, then the one I’ve been reading repeatedly. Change is good. But, I digress.
The main thing that bothered me about this one-shot was that I had to re-read parts a couple of times because I kept getting confused. Now, this is probably partially my fault, because I get distracted and confused easily. But especially in the beginning, things just seemed off. It probably had a lot to do with the fact that you are working with practically original characters, so the reader has no clue what’s going on with them. For example, in the beginning, I thought Cecilia wanted her brother to come visit her and at one point I thought that Edward was in love with Riddle too. I think this could have been easily remedied by more details, though.
But I soon choose the obvious answer, and, leaving the shack, was just in time to see her running down the lane
Small nit-pick; it should be chose opposed to choose.
I like the Edward’s speculation towards the end about Cecilia ever taking Riddle back, but I would be curious to see exactly what did happen. Since obviously, Riddle didn’t really love Merope, and odds are he did love Cecilia. Guess we’ll never know though.
Through-out this one-shot, I’ve grown rather fond of Edward. I like how you always present him with a choice of what he wants to do and what he knows he should do. He seems like the perfect friend for Cecilia, especially in her current time of need.
Out of curiosity, since your friend who dared you to write this name is Cecilia, did you base the other Cecilia that was in love with Riddle off your friend?
Overall, I really like the idea behind this one-shot. Sad as it was, it was brilliantly written.
Author's Response: First off, thanks so much for another great review!! Yeah, I should introduce who Cecilia is a little early on. But *gasp* Edward in love with Tom? I'm inadvertently writing slash? I'll go back and look. Thanks for letter me know. I probably should have mentioned in the author's note that this is going to be a one-shot trilogy. *headdesk* Next one-shot is Cecilia/Edward fluff, and then the last (which might end up chaptered) is for when Tom comes back. No, Cecilia isn't like my friend at all, actually. My friend Cecilia is a lot more Slytherin. This character got her personality mainly because Edward was so clear in my mind; Cecilia was moulded in a way to be the kind of girl he'd fall in love with. *prays hard that this response doesn't become one huge paragraph* Thanks again! ~Alison
I forgot who Cecilia was until about half way through this! She definitely isn't a character that is remembered! I would say this is definitely an original fanfic. Well written, of course. I kind of wish you would have ended it with Tom coming back, because to me that would have made a stronger end because then Edwards narrative would have a definitive end to his hope for gaining Cecilia. Other than that, I really liked it!
Author's Response: Well, this is only the first in the series (as to when the others will be completed, I have no idea!), so that should give it quite a bit more closure. I'm glad you liked it!