Nice use of the quatrain format of a poem. Your rhymes are beautiful and the rhythm of this poem flows. Nice work!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Great poem, Dumbledore's death was very sad, as was the poem. A stanza that I especially liked was:
Even the very bravest amongst us–
Those who are noble, kind and wise–
Have pushed aside the ones they love, thus,
In pushing them down, letting evil rise.
[I really liked those last two lines!]

The only suggestion I can give is to divide up or reduce the size of some of your longer lines. I know how that can be hard sometimes, especially with poems that rhyme, but it will overall help the flow and appearance of the poem.

Great job and keep writing!


Author's Response: Thanks! I love that part too!

Kewl. Emo enough, way too sad. *sniff* I'm so proud of you! It's awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I am not emo, Luna. Or was that a compliment? Whatever, you pwn. Thanks for reviewing!