Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 07/20/08 20:30
Chapter: Chapter 2

HAHAHHA! This is a great story. There's a serious undertone, but all in all its hilarious.

Valerie sounds awesome. That's what I try to do, or would, if I had the guts.

I love how this isn't cliche or normal at all. It's very unique.

Wonderful job.

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 07/20/08 20:30
Chapter: Chapter 2

HAHAHHA! This is a great story. There's a serious undertone, but all in all its hilarious.

Valerie sounds awesome. That's what I try to do, or would, if I had the guts.

I love how this isn't cliche or normal at all. It's very unique.

Wonderful job.

Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 07/20/08 20:10
Chapter: The Sleepwalker

Oh, this is brilliant.

It's well written, and very un-cliche. Lily is not perfect in it, for one thing. She's just an awkward teenager like any of us, trying to survive. Her parents are not the perfect parents, either, that some would expect.

xD It's realistic. And humourous. Very, very funny. Fantastic job.

Might I add that Clarissa sounds like my friend? Her biggest threat is that she'll give me a make over.

Great job.

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 07/20/08 18:55
Chapter: Chapter 4

Oh... It hurts so much to laugh this hard, but it's so worth it. This was amazing, I mean the first part was rather scarey and I must admit i cringed quite alot at the metal spike, but as soon as Potter and Co showed up I knew I'd soon be doubled up in laughter. Wow that sentense was huge. Anyway, I know she hates James, but if she stopped to think it'd probably feel nice to be carried in a strong pair of arms. And I doubt very much whether i'd mind being carried by Sirius or Remus either, but I'd deffinately draw the line at Pettigrew too. Although I'm not sure he'd be strong enough to carry anyone. In fact, in my case, they'd probably all have chronic back trouble by now. That none kiss was hilarious, I'm sure James feels very cheeted right now, hopefully she'll make up for it later. And it really made sense that Remus would be the one to know all the useful spells like those for healing. Oh, and do we get an explanation for Sirius' dirty hands? I'd have thought being who he is he'd be a well groomed sort, perhaps he'd been running round the grounds as Padfoot all night. And finally I think Clarissa was so out of order, I mean she's a seventh year, she could've transfigured the glasses into something a little more stylish rather than snap them, and could Lily not have used an accio charm to retrieve them? Come to think of it, if she wasn't wearing her glasses on the train, she must have been wearing her contacts, so she can't have left them at home, did she lose them when she fell of the roof? Might have made it easier to kiss James if she couldn't see, she could pretend he was her favourite movie star or something. Best go, I've been told i leave horribley long reviews, so if you've got to this point then I apologise profusely. Can't wait for the next chapter to see what McGonagall says about the window, whether the marauders mention the previous nights events at breakfast and whether Lily is brave enough to return to the roof and write more wonderful stories.

Reviewer: lostinside1
Date: 07/20/08 18:05
Chapter: The Sleepwalker

12347 words. so

i loved this first chapter. :)

Reviewer: Trivia Camlee
Date: 07/20/08 17:27
Chapter: Chapter 4

Yes! You're back! You have no idea how loud I shrieked and danced when my computer informed me that this story had been updated :)

This chapter was diffidently worth the wait. I couldn't have imagined a funnier scenario between James, Lily and the rest of the Marauders after her roof incident. And it was so like James to ask for Lily to kiss him as the bargain!

Some of my favorite lines were:
~I got all the hysterical screaming out that I was too afraid to do when I was falling from the roof. This probably wasn’t the smartest tactic.

“No, I just enjoy breaking through windows,” I said sarcastically.

So, of course, they all naturally start laughing and exclaiming how exciting their lives were. Guys are so weird.~

Something else I love about this story is that I have no idea how Lily and James are going to fall in love. I mean, you have made James to be such an arrogant prat, and Lily so set on not liking him. And after this embarrassing roof-falling-James-kissing- incident, I have no idea how they are going to end up together; and that's neat. It makes the story much more interesting, and keeps the reader wondering how they will fall in love.

Great job! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: soccerlover4always
Date: 06/25/08 17:53
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

I love this story!!! You need to write more!!!!

Reviewer: Hermiones BFF
Date: 06/24/08 22:00
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof


Reviewer: Wolfgirl08
Date: 06/24/08 12:01
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

Amazing story! Review, Review. Now please add more!

Reviewer: Cirelondiel
Date: 06/14/08 9:41
Chapter: The Sleepwalker

Hello! Well, this is an excellent start to a fic. I'm very impressed with how you've successfully avoided Mary-Sue!Lily and incorporated a lot of humour.

First off, I love the title of the fic. It caught my attention immediately, as it's different to the boring, generic titles that are so often seen in this genre. Your summary then built on that by outlining Lily's 'problems', which I'm pretty sure a lot of us teenage girls can relate to.

This is really fussy of me, but I actually have a nitpick about the summary *blush*. You don't need a comma after 'She sleepwalks', but rather after the phrase in parentheses after it.

Yeah, now on to the actual chapter...

I absolutely love Lily's narration! She seems so realistic and down-to-earth and is really amusing. And I love the quirk you've given her (sleepwalking). That's so original; I've never seen that one used before. And it provides excellent opportunities for funny moments later in the fic! I also love that she writes romance :D Again, a very original take on Lily!

Your version of Petunia is good - she's not TOO over-the-top (calling Lily a freak every second word and so on, as happens in a lot of fics), but she's recognisable as the Petunia we all know and love (?). And you gave her a bit of spark - putting a slug down Lily's back! Lol!

It's great how you introduced a conflict - her family bothering her about getting a boyfriend while she wants to find the perfect guy - straight away. I'm also very interested to see how you weave the idea of Cinderella into the fic. I loved how you slipped a quick reference to Prince Charming (by Lily's mum) in there too! Very subtle, nice job!

There were a few teensy formatting errors in there, such as in this line:
"WHAT?" I shriek..
You have two full stops. But overall the fic is pretty readable with very few spelling or grammar problems.

Off to read the next chapter now!
~ Chelsea

Reviewer: Oh_No_Not_Fred
Date: 05/12/08 0:05
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

ahhhhhh you can't leave it there! Your story is so addictive... and funny :)

Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 04/17/08 16:10
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

I love this fic! It's so different to most marauder era fics, you've made Lily so unique! Usually she's made out to be a studeous prudish uptight girl, I love your Lily, what a shame Harry never found out what his mum had been like at Hogwarts. I can't wait for the next installment, how on earth is she going to get out of this one? I wonder if she lands on the boys dorm roof and has to sneak back inside through their room, or if James goes out for midnight flying sessions and catches her? Oh, and just before I go, my favourite part of all so far is when Lily restaged her entrance onto the platform, muddy puddle and all, priceless. Please, please, please update soooooon!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Hermiones BFF
Date: 04/16/08 23:38
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

AWESOME!!!!! This kinda reminds me of the Princess Diaries books. It also reinds me of me a bit.

Reviewer: Karya
Date: 04/05/08 20:57
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

omg i havent laughed like this in forever i love this lily it is so much better than perfect lily i hope you get the rest of the chapters out their cuz i expect to be getting more emails saying that this story is updated for it is in my favorites which i havent over filled i have like 6 in there so you need to get more chapters out there cuz u are like super funny!

Reviewer: Tweak
Date: 04/04/08 18:18
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

This is great! Keep writing!

Reviewer: Trivia Camlee
Date: 04/02/08 15:02
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

Ahh! What can I say that will let you know how brilliant this chapter and you are? Hmmmm..... Oh, yes, I know; You are brilliant!

Once again, great chapter! I always look forward to reading this story, and you always leave us with a cliff hanger ( or in this case a roof hanger...) I really loved the "THIS IS NOT A PLAY GROUND!" And Lily's dancing on the roof. Keep up the amazing writing!

Reviewer: Sunny_Rainbow
Date: 03/29/08 16:47
Chapter: The Sleepwalker

This lily is soooooooo much like me! I name random lifeless things (like parts of buildings), I feel sorry for ramdom lifeless things (like trunks), I make people mad for fun (like lily does to guinevere), and I am stubborn to do everything on my own (like the mud). Also im the most unorginised person I know! Oh and one time when it was raining i went out in the night and danced just because I had an urge! I LOVE THIS STORY!

Reviewer: Sunny_Rainbow
Date: 03/29/08 16:39
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof


Reviewer: Daisy Blue
Date: 03/28/08 22:11
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

Ooh please, do keep writing. I can't wait to here what happens!

Reviewer: Pidney00
Date: 03/28/08 22:05
Chapter: Dancing on the Roof

hahaha, great story, INgenius.
Can't wait for the next installment!

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