Reviewer: DMTAT003
Date: 07/25/08 3:41
Chapter: S.C.O.U.R.G.E.

Thank you for the update. This is an interesting angle with S.C.O.U.R.G.E., and I want to know what happens with it. The way you described Dewey's confused emotion about girls was simply brilliant, that young man definitely does not have the emotional range of teaspoon. You are an advanced writer and your work shows that in the plot and the word choice used in your writing. Thank you for taking the time to write your fanfiction, and I look forward to the next update.

Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream
Date: 07/23/08 22:53
Chapter: The Return of the D.A.

Well done. It seems that Violet either had a rather greater familiarity with the concept of forgiveness than one might have expected -- or perhaps Mercy did have a positive effect on her. As for Chloe -- yes, there are definitely times that anticipation is worse than what actually happens, and keeping a person in that anticipatory state for a while can be exceedingly stressful. Kinda too bad that she told Teddy what Violet said to her, in some ways, though.

Yeah, I can see how the apparent usurpation of the "DA" moniker might be more than just a bit off-putting for Neville. I wonder what the Potter & Tonks (& Weasley) reactions to the recent activities (& use of the "DA" name) will be.... :-}

Very well done!

Reviewer: rosemerta
Date: 07/22/08 18:56
Chapter: The Return of the D.A.

i loved the scene with violet and chloe. i knew violet wouldnt do anything to chloe, because she is rational and fair. but the slow buildup and then speeding up of the drama as they circled was excellent. i also really enjoyed neville's moment of nostalgia to himself and the melancholy note it brought to the end of the story. great transition among so many emotions in one chapter! angst, anger, apprehension, pride, melancholy. except for a few typos, it was perfect! [impatiently waiting for the next.]

Author's Response: Typos? Aieee! (Goes back to proofread again.)

Reviewer: LunaforGryffindor
Date: 07/22/08 2:52
Chapter: The Return of the D.A.

The D.A., really! This story gets more interesting with every chapter.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 13:54
Chapter: The Secret Meeting

Terrific chapter! Really cannot wait to see what happens in the next one!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 13:51
Chapter: Slipfang

Oooo, I hope the wand snatcher is caught very soon! Poor kids

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 13:46
Chapter: Ophilia's Lesson

Very clever class activity, poison flavored water!!! I was torn between horror and laughing my head off! Wonderful job

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 13:41
Chapter: The Zero Toleration Policy

Hogwarts is certainly a difficult place to be now! Keep up the great writing :-)

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 11:53
Chapter: Mischief Management

Interesting chapter! Even if the ministry ever gets involved its not like it would really do any good!!!!!! :-P

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 11:48
Chapter: The Riot Before Christmas

Well you really have to give a round of applause to the Weasley twins, wand alarms, who knows what else will be invented! :-)

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 11:43
Chapter: Slytherin Qualities

It really makes you wonder just how hard interhouse relations are to make and keep! I cannot get enough of this story :-)

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 11:41
Chapter: The War Season

I really love these long chapters!!! Excellent chapter

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 07/19/08 11:39
Chapter: Violet's Birthday

Wow, Drama, drama, drama!!!! Keep up the good work

Reviewer: DMTAT003
Date: 07/16/08 19:18
Chapter: The Secret Meeting

Thank you again for your update, and I look forward to the next chapter. Your writing is always excellent and it is clear that you are a very talented writer. I really hope that Violent and Chloe can resolve their situation, and I like how you have used Professor Longbottom and Harry Potter in fiction. I really like how you have built upon the maturity of Neville Longbottom.

Reviewer: bigtimer
Date: 07/16/08 17:56
Chapter: The Secret Meeting

it's cool to see everyone getting along after the huge fight.

Reviewer: ahattab33
Date: 07/16/08 10:26
Chapter: The Secret Meeting

Oh what a cliffie!! I can't wait for the next chapter and to see how this meeting goes! Great work as usual, I absolutely love your stories!

Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream
Date: 07/16/08 7:29
Chapter: The Secret Meeting

Huh -- I wonder if Violet's minor brush with the concept of "forgiveness" (from Mercy) might affect her perception of what Chloe says or does?

And yeah, I expect that understanding (let alone extending) forgiveness is likley to be a rather uncommon trait in Slytherin House. :-}

Excellent interactions & development, there!

Reviewer: minervassister
Date: 07/15/08 6:34
Chapter: Slipfang

Another great chapter, you are good at coming up with new unexpected turns in the plot.
Slipfang does sound like a goblin's name
so it probably isn't!

Reviewer: lunalestrange
Date: 07/13/08 15:25
Chapter: Slipfang

This chapter was great and the suspense for the next one is killing me!

Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream
Date: 07/11/08 20:20
Chapter: Slipfang

Well, that "ice cream social" idea certainly has undergone a bit of metamorphosis. and there's nothing quite like the perception of a common enemy to unite fractious groups. :-)

Very well done!

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