I loved this piece! It was really well written and I thought that the exploration of Nevel was exceptional.
Keep writting.
Oh Maia, I love it!
It's so sad and orignal, you know. I particularly like the idea of Neville throwing away the wrappers. Poor.
I like your exploration of Neville's this dark and unstable side. The fact that its been years now and he hasnt been able to get over their insanity is so touching.
The first person POV makes it even better.
On another note, I've written on Neville too, Getting Across, my response to Seasons Change prompt. The Neville in my story also argues with Augusta and he works in a Diagon Aley shop too!
well, thats that.
But your story made me sad. I liked Hannah too!
terrific job!
~ Akay
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you found it original. I guess I just find some authors underestimating Neville as a character; I think he deserves a lot more. Which was why I wanted to explore his darker side.
I'll have to give your Neville story a read too!
I'm sorry I made you sad, lol! Thank you so much for such a positive review! :)
Maia
Hey. Really nice story, I love the calm feeling you put in it. Fits really well with the song.
It also feels really like Neville to me, the calm careful exterior, but a turmoil of feelings on the inside.
Love it. :)
Author's Response: Hi, sweetie! :) Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you liked it. I guess your opinion matters more than most... Thank you! *kiss*
I was searching around MNFF and guess my surprise when I found out that there's a new story based on one of my favorite songs. Now, onto the review:
First, I think that it's a very poigant story. There's a real elegance in this story that you don't find in most.
Neville's emotions about his parents are very real. I especially love the line that you say: I wish I could remember her some other way. Maybe that’s why I’m here. Maybe I’m trying to spark a memory of something other than white hospital walls and sterile bed sheets. It's so brutally true, that you almost feel Neville's pain.
Also, I love the exchange between Neville and Hannah in this story. Hannah is a believable Healer, which helps the story flow well. I also like the ending. Although Neville's parents are in the hospital and he's cut up about it, he still finds a light from Hannah.
I was very impressed with this story, and I hope that you do more like this one. :D
-victoria
Author's Response: Awesome first review! Thank you so much, I'm really happy you liked the story.
I've never really explored Neville's character much before, so this was really interesting to me too, and great fun in general. Nor have I every looked into Hannah's character, but I figure her to be very down-to-earth. I think that's what Neville needs in his life, too: stability.
And you like Tool! Yay! Do YOU want to join the MNFF Tool Appreciation Society? :)
Maia
