Reviewer: twirlergirl583
Date: 12/29/07 1:01
Chapter: Chapter 1

*Claps* very nice,
Tis a good rhyme.
I'd leave a just review
Had I slightly more time.

But since I do not
This will have to suffice.
Some lines just don't mix
Quite like vodka and ice.

The first stanza
Fits together quite well.
The second is wordy,
Try "Shan't go to hell."

For the second line
In the third section,
Try "Pity me not a bit."
To be nearer perfection.

The rest of the poem
Has a great sound.
Each line is perfect
No problem is found.

Now i hope this review was helpful enough,
Cause coming up with "fixers" sure was tough.

-Emily-

Reviewer: twirlergirl583
Date: 12/29/07 0:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

*Claps* very nice,
Tis a good rhyme.
I'd leave a just review
Had I slightly more time.

But since I do not
This will have to suffice.
Some lines just don't mix
Quite like vodka and ice.

The first stanza
Fits together quite well.
The second is wordy,
Try "Shan't go to hell."

For the second line
In the third section,
Try "Pity me not a bit."
To be nearer perfection.

The rest of the poem
Has a great sound.
Each line is perfect
No problem is be found.

Now i hope this review was helpful enough,
Cause coming up with "fixers" sure was tough.

-Emily-

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 12/23/07 23:25
Chapter: Chapter 1

You know, I really like the idea of a prayer before duelling. The language while simple relayed the message and it even had a kind of a religious feel so good job.=Sammy

Reviewer: Shortone
Date: 12/23/07 20:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was really good, kind of humorus. Or maybe I just have a strange sense of humor...

Reviewer: r_j_lupingirl
Date: 12/23/07 15:57
Chapter: Chapter 1

Uh, was that supposed to be funny? If you were aiming for that,or anything else, I suggest revising.

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