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Name: RonaldLookALike (Signed) · Date: 07/09/09 11:04 · For: Behind Glassy Emeralds Lays a Broken Heart

Name: WIZARDMANIA (Signed) · Date: 06/15/09 14:27 · For: A New Start
great story. very moving and it has a lot of emotion keep up with the good work

Author's Response: I appreciate your review! I'm glad you found it moving, that's exactly the sentiment I was shooting for. :-)

Name: BLooDy_NaTaLy (Signed) · Date: 05/23/09 7:49 · For: A New Start
It was such an amazing fanfic! One of the best that I read =]
So much action, love, romance.... Only one word can describe it:P.E.R.F.E.C.T!
Continue wrighting your amazing fanfics ^^

P.S Can I be Ginny in this story? *dreamy face*

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you thought it was so well done! Haha, you can't be Ginny because I want to be Ginny, LOL. Thank you for the review! :-)

Name: HolliJene16 (Signed) · Date: 05/21/09 14:33 · For: An Unlikely Hero
wow the sorry is very intersting so far i love it i really wonder what harry is going to say about all of this (as if he read it) wink!

Author's Response: Haha, I'd imagined he'd be quite appalled, LOL. WHAT, Ginny ends up with Draco?! Haha. I'm glad you like it!

Name: coffeecrush (Signed) · Date: 04/04/09 13:15 · For: The Beginning of Regret
liked it so far.. the writing style is pretty good, its precise n very enjoyable..

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I hope to hear how you like the rest of it! :-)

Name: spaniel_is_cooler (Signed) · Date: 01/19/09 4:45 · For: Behind Glassy Emeralds Lays a Broken Heart
I cried
Did anyone else cry?
That was worth crying -sniff-

Author's Response: I hope it was a good cry! Thank you so much for the review! :-)

Name: cullen8 (Signed) · Date: 12/14/08 23:09 · For: A New Start
My most humblest and sincere apologies. I am a terrible reader because I just read your entire story without writing one review until now. It was just so tempting to click on that little button at the bottom of the screen that would lead me to the next chapter and I couldn't resist. Now that I have finished Torn Between Ice and Emeralds in one sitting I can honestly tell you that it was my favorite D/G fics ever.
Your story was absolutely phenomenal. I saw none of the mistakes that most (almost 95% actually) romance writers make. I was completey captured by this fic so thank you for posting it.
If you are curious about those mistakes that, to my everlasting joy you didn't make, here they are:
1) When romance writers get to the point of the story where the two romantic leads admit their love for each other they start to write dialogue that does not suit their characters at all. It's as if love turns the two into poets and they start professing their undying love in the most eloquent terms. It's so annoying to hear characters start spouting off lines that would be better off in a Shakespear play just because they have admitted their love to someone. You were able to keep the dialogue real while still adding in the sweetness of love. I could honestly see the Draco you created voicing his feelings as you wrote them. Some people want to make him an arrogant prat on minute then hace him start speaking like Geoffrey Chaucer. Thank you for writing realistic yet sweet "love scenes" between Draco and Ginny.
2) After the lovers have vowed everlasting love to one another, writers sometimes to feel the need write some horrible event that causes immediate distrust or even hate between the lovers. This literally happens in the same chapter that they profess their love or the one right after. Of course they overcome whatever obstacle they were faced with in the end and decide that they love each other again but still...why is it so hard to have the couple face the major conflict of the story toegether rather than having the conflict be that they don't trust each other or whatever. You had Draco and Ginnny face Draco's issolation from the rest of the world together after they decided they loved each other and your story worked out great.
3) This one kinda goes with number three and you had this problem a bit but it worked out. You often see Voldemort come in when either A) the lovers are fighting with each other. After Voldemort comes they decide that their problems aren't so bad and really do love each other or B) he just kinda comes in randomally to set up the climax of the story which is (hopefully) followed by a happy ending. You kinda had this problem when Voldemort came in just when Harry and Draco were getting into it (I really was anxious to see where that would go) and grabbed Ginny. I loved how the next few chapters went though with Harry and Draco fighting together, Voldie and Harry having a battle of wills (that black eyes thing was so COOL!!), Harry letting go, Draco's sadness, Snape's role, and Harry living (YAY) so you are fully forgiven. You more than made up for it.
I loved the last chapter so much. I can only say that it absolutley perfect and I wouldn't change a thing.
Watch out for any typical romance writer mistakes and keep doing what you're doing. You are a fabulous writer.
P.S. If you've written any more stories please let me know. I'd love to read more of your work.
Happy writing!

Author's Response: LOL, you are most forgiven since you left me such a long review! One sitting? Impressive! I'm so glad to hear that it was so captivating that you couldn't stop! :-) I really, really appreciate you letting me in on some of the more annoying things that romance writers do with these stories, I've always tried to avoid the cliche and unbearable cheesiness that you can sometimes find when writer's take our beloved HP players too far out of character. I'm also happy I made up for my almost-mistake! I enjoyed reading your review very much! As for other stories, I do have another one posted to go along with this one called Here's to The Death of My Heart, and it's Harry's perspective of chapter 15. It's a sad one, I'll warn you now, much more so that it already is. I also have an unrelated Rose/Scorpius one-shot that I think is really cute, if you're interested, called It Began With a Push. I've been mapping out a sequel to TBIE, and I have a first chapter finished as well as most of the plot planned, but I'm having some writer's block problems, hehe. Look out for it, though I don't know what it'll be called yet. Thank you again! :-)

Name: rayasunshine (Signed) · Date: 11/15/08 10:28 · For: A New Start
I loved this story, I was just dying to find a fic where Ginny fell in love with Draco while Harry was gone, and this one was perfect!
I've probably reviewed this fic the most, and its one of my favorite Draco fics, definitely my favorite Draco/Ginny.
I feel sorry for Harry, but that probably is the way it would have turned out. I hope you have a sequel coming soon!

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad I hit the criteria you were looking for! Thank you so much for all your support! I'm toying with a sequel at the moment, but it may be awhile. Thanks again! :-)

Name: Flying_Pheonix (Signed) · Date: 11/08/08 16:55 · For: A New Start
this fic was awesome!!
i loved it!!
really great, keep writing!!

Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you! :-)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/08 20:28 · For: A New Start
I was really surprised that this got updated because it said it was finished when I started reading it. It's a really nice finish! I look forward to move fics by you in the future! you're an excellent writer!

Author's Response: Haha, once Chapter 20 was in the queue, I went ahead and updated the status to complete. But at least you got a nice surprise when you saw the update! Thank you so much for your encouragement, I really appreciate it! :-)

Name: mathgirl365 (Signed) · Date: 11/04/08 20:15 · For: A New Start

Author's Response: LOL, I'm working on it!! Thank you! :-)

Name: ahattab33 (Signed) · Date: 11/03/08 20:39 · For: A New Start
Great story, I liked the ending...even though I wished Harry could have found more happiness, it is probably more realistic this way, for him to be heartbroken.

Author's Response: I know, poor Harry. I'll try to make it up to him, but it's so easy to make everything go wrong for him! Plus, I love writing the heartbreak, I don't know why. Thank you for your review! :-)

Name: mathgirl365 (Signed) · Date: 10/22/08 21:01 · For: Tears and Victory
write a sequal

Author's Response: LOL, I'm thinking about it, though I'm not sure what the main storyline would be, or who it would focus on. I'd really like to make things up to Harry after being so awful to him. There's one more chapter in the queue, and a one-shot as well from Harry's POV of chapter 15, so be sure to look out for those! Thanks for your encouragement! :-)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/21/08 0:28 · For: Tears and Victory
By the way, I absolutely love the emphasis you have on the different emotions and conflicting views that Ginny has to battle. To me that is what really makes a book/story because I want to know that the author has thought about each action and reaction and I wan realistic responses to those actions and you definitely delivered there!

Author's Response: I agree, drawing the reader in with the varying emotions and struggles really makes a story great, and I'm so happy that I've achieved my goal! Thank you again and I hope to hear from you in the future! :-)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/21/08 0:26 · For: Tears and Victory
That was such an amazing fic, I really wish there was more to it, however, it would be my downfall if there were because I would spend all my time reading it instead of doing my homework! Anyway, I hope you write more becaus I would love to read it! This is seriously one of the best fics I've ever read I loved every single detail in it!

Author's Response: A pleasure, as always! Thank you!

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/20/08 23:54 · For: As Seen Through Greasy Curtains
Ok, I misspoke in my previous review! I actually do not know if your account or JK's is more edge-of-the-seat worthy! I actually think your final moment for Voldemort was more creative! Anyway, I am at a total loss as to why there are not gobs of reviews on this story...I wish it were longer! I'm sad that I only have one chapter left :(

Author's Response: I'm so very flattered! :-) It's hard coming up with an original way to end Voldemort with all the fanfiction that's out there. I'm glad that you've recovered from the last chapter, LOL! Thank you so much! I'm not sure how to get more reviews other than becoming a featured story. I have one more chapter coming up, chapter 20, so don't fret too much yet! ;-)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/20/08 23:37 · For: Neither Can Live While the Other Survives
Oh no! Not Harry! Yeesh...that was cruel: break his heart and then kill him! ;)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/20/08 23:37 · For: Neither Can Live While the Other Survives
Oh no! Not Harry! Yeesh...that was cruel: break his heart and then kill him! ;)

Author's Response: Aww, I think I made a lot of people mad with the ending of this chapter! I thought it was very poetic though... :-)

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/19/08 23:24 · For: Behind Glassy Emeralds Lays a Broken Heart
Aw! That broke my heart too! But you are right, it had to be done! I love, Harry though :(

Author's Response: If you thought that was bad, I have a one-shot in the queue of this chapter from Harry's POV. It should be up soon, and it's called Here's to The Death of My Heart. It made me sad just writing it!

Name: ren_a87 (Signed) · Date: 10/19/08 22:51 · For: Who's the Fairest One Of All?
I really loved the beginning of this chapter. I think of all the Ginny/Draco fics I've read that had gone with Ginny dating Harry somewhere in the story this one explains the turmoil she must feel the best. There is usually just the whole Weasley/Malfoy turmoil like Romeo and Juliet, but if the story has Harry involved, it's even more complicated! This is amazing, hope you write more!

Author's Response: I really am glad that you enjoyed it. It was hard to convey the struggle with the right amount of depth and emotion without boring the reader! Thank you!

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