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Name: 4v_19 (Signed) · Date: 01/25/08 0:43 · For: Prologue
heya! dearie...

What’s your name?’

‘Scorpius Malfoy. Yours?’

‘Rose Weasley. But most people call me Rosie.’

‘No wonder you’re so pink …. like a rose.’

The girl laughed along with the boy.

He’s not so bad after all. And Chocolate Frogs are delicious.

these lines create magic...they r so very sweet.. i jst luv these lines..
i know u r a superb writer...n d treasure has jst opened..


Name: Nupur (Signed) · Date: 01/24/08 10:58 · For: Frozen Words And Broken Promises
Already told you in MUCH detail what I feel about this chapter. I think it's well written and you're darn good with dialogues. Rose is quite a cry baby here, though you'll probably flesh her out in the coming chapters.

I liked the way you've characterized Scorpius and James. I understand this is just an introductory chapter and I know you've got a lot of angst and tears planned out (oops spoilers. hehe) *evil laugh*

Do keep up the good work and I want tosee the next chapter here!


Name: MissyQuill (Signed) · Date: 01/24/08 8:11 · For: Frozen Words And Broken Promises
Manu dear,

Another awesome chapter. I love the Rosie/Scorpius/James conflict. And even so early on. I guess it goes to show that parenrs and a little misunderstanding can really mess a child up :D
The only nitpick I found was that they were all talking like much older then people their age. But otherwise it was teh awesomness.
Please update soon.=Sammy

Name: Gin_Drinka (Signed) · Date: 01/23/08 6:08 · For: Frozen Words And Broken Promises
Wow, Manu, a lot happened in this chapter. What a train ride of emotion.... Okay, I just wanted to comment before I start on the rest of the review, on how much I like the title of the story. I didn't remember to last chapter, but at least I'm saying it now.

Alrighty, on to constructive review mode. *flexes fingers*

First, I like the way that Scorpius seems to be sufficiently proud to be his father's son, but still much more pleasant. You portrayed that aspect of him really smoothly; nice job!

But, I think Rose's character is a little 'transitory'.

Nothing. I just sat down on my windowsill gazing at the stars. I simply love the darkness. It has a sort of haunting beauty that enthrals me. I enjoy walks under the soft light of the moon. I’ve always considered the stars as my companions, which fill me with hope and light whenever I feel depressed or lonely. I can forgive anybody in the world if they apologize to me under the night sky,’ she said smiling lightly.

This is lovely speech, absolutely lovely and full of gorgeous imagery, but I can't really see an eleven year old saying that to another on their very first meeting. But that think about apologizing under the night sky was briliant. It just strikes.

Anyway, I loved how they were suddenly awkward, even though it was a bit too sudden. The detail about the upside down book was a really great added touch. I love the upside down book scenes. :)

I liked James. His character seems nicely fleshed out. Even though I was surprised that Rose would start crying about him leaving (I think it's just my pre-formed impression that all the Weasleys are extremely bold... maybe it'll be nicer to see someone a little more timid), I loved the whole scene with him

Okay. Maybe I should stop now… if I care for my safety.

Loved that. Made me giggle like mad. But now that I notice it James fearing for his safety at Rose's hands and her just crying as a reaction is a little incoherent with her character...

‘He’s good, I know. He’s really nice.’

‘And how do you know that?’

‘He gave me Chocolate Frogs!’

James was becoming exasperated.

Hehe...that last bit was hilarious.

I think the argument at the end was written very well, but it just seems a bit much for two eleven year olds that have just met. I know some loves begin with almost nothing, because we just can't help it, but maybe a little more interaction before the argument would have been better. I'd love to see more of them. :) Seems like there won't be now...:( They're fighting. ;(

Well, all in all, it's a lovely start, Manu. The only thing I'm nitpicky about is Rose's character. But I suppose the next chapters will help to flesh her out... :) Can't wait for more....

Name: dulcet_tones (Signed) · Date: 01/23/08 1:17 · For: Frozen Words And Broken Promises
OMG! Manu, this chapter was such an insight into little Rose's world and such a sad ending! I hate cliffies, but I adore them in the sense that they make me excited for the next chappie! Agh, I'm confusing.

Anyways, again, I really liked your characterization of little Rose and Scorpius. I especially like the current situation they are in and the conflicts it presents.

I also really like how you have James being the present voice of her father, and I'm assuming that you will have little Albus fill that role as well - but I'll have to wait to see that for sure. I really liked the characterization of James as well, he seemed very age appropriate.

The plot of your story is written very well also. I can't wait to see where you take this. At the risk of sounding cliche I say, update soon! :D

~Stacy~ of the Gryff Review Crew

Name: FlightofthePhoenix (Signed) · Date: 01/22/08 21:42 · For: Frozen Words And Broken Promises
Awww Manu! How could you do that poor Rosie dear? You better get them back together! ok, ok, good comments now. Hehe, I LOVED it dearie. It was fantastic, I love their conversations and reactions. Like James's finding out his innocent little cousin befriended a Malfoy *shudder* Do tell me when you get the next chappie up. Oh and I tell you when my next Teddy fic is up. *huggles*

Luv ya Manu xoxox

Name: TheBlackSister (Signed) · Date: 01/22/08 20:35 · For: Frozen Words And Broken Promises
Quite nice! Their behaviour is very well written...keep up the great work!

Name: theworldonlyknows (Signed) · Date: 01/13/08 16:46 · For: Prologue
I love this, I love the way you have told both of their stories. I can't wait for the next chapter. Good Luck.


Name: butter_beer_drinker (Signed) · Date: 01/08/08 9:51 · For: Prologue
This is a cute stat. It is a little bit confusing with the back and forth but it flowed well enough to follow the story.

Name: Pondering (Signed) · Date: 01/03/08 7:07 · For: Prologue
This seems to be a promising start to your fic. I like how you have set the foundation for Rose and Scorpius’s future relationship, and their interactions seem to be very in-character considering their background and ages. Actually, I think you do a very good job with the characterization in the prologue.

Take this line for example: ‘Of course not, Dad. I’m grown up. I’m three inches taller than last year, see?’

I can imagine any young girl saying this to her father. Young children often think that they’re grown-up, especially when they get their first taste of independence. From this line we can tell that Rose is taking a confident outlook on her Hogwarts adventure.

Also, I enjoyed that Ron’s warning to stay away from Scorpius just propelled Rose’s curiosity about him.

‘Bye Mum, bye Dad!’ the little girl waved goodbye

Just thought I’d point out that the t should be capitalized, as waving is an action. Otherwise, you did a very good job with the grammar in this story.

‘Rose Weasley. But most people call me Rosie.’

‘No wonder you’re so pink …. like a rose.’

This is an exchange between Rose and Scorpius that I love. I can just imagine the awkward expression on Scorpius’s face as he says this to Rose.

The way you have set out the prologue is also worth mentioning. At first it seemed a little distracting with the POV switches, but then it started moving into a rhythm where I could see in my mind these back and forth flashes. It felt sort of like in a movie where the camera swings back and forth from two characters, you know what I mean? :)

I look forward to the future chapters and seeing how Rose and Scorpius’s relationship grows.


Name: slytherins_queen2 (Signed) · Date: 01/02/08 2:07 · For: Prologue
ZOMG! *squeeeeeeeeeeeee*
A Rose/Scorpius fic! Yay! lol. I've just finished (finally!) the chapter and I must say, bravo! It was wonderful like all your other writings, and is making me excited to see what'll happen next! A fantastic start to a wonderful story about my new favorite couple! Can't wait to see what happens next!


Name: Mariangelo (Signed) · Date: 01/01/08 22:18 · For: Prologue

It is I, The Cupcake Who Marauds... I really like the beginning of this story. Rose/Scorpius, quickly becoming a favourite of mine.

I enjoyed the back and forth with the character as well as your characterizations. I like that Scorpius would be mindful and respectful of his father, and yet his own person. I'm interested to see where he will be Sorted.

Well, you've grabbed my attention and I'm patiently waiting for the next chapter.
Well done!

Michelle, The Marauding Cupcake of Gryffindor!

Name: mispersonality (Signed) · Date: 12/31/07 21:46 · For: Prologue
Hello, dearie!! Lovely story!! I like the whole switching characters, let you see the whole picture, thing. I like to see into people's heads (not literally, of course!) And the "intrigue" was really good too. All the questions that arise. What was Ron so eager to tell Rose? Why does Scorpius call his dad "Father" which sounds so formal? Why is it that kids seem to act more mature than grown-ups (ie the whole rivalry, no co-mingling with the enemy thing)? Why do people speak their mind when they really shouldn't? (third from last line) And who on earth would name their kid Marguerita? I'm on the edge of my seat!! I mean really, these are mind-boggling questions!! They must be answered soon!! (otherwise I'll come up with more and they'll get sillier and sillier as I go. Oh, and I love the chocolate frog thing!! They are totally delicious!! You must write as quickly as possible!! I demand it!! Very nice job ans I can't wait to see where this goes!!! Mispersonality

Name: XhayleeXblackX (Signed) · Date: 12/31/07 9:01 · For: Prologue
Aw, this is a nice start to a story. I like the way you interjected the two of them. Good Job!

Name: babekitty_92 (Signed) · Date: 12/31/07 6:29 · For: Prologue
Oooooh, that's cute! it's so innocent, but yeah, it's gorgeous!
I'm going to keep my eye on this one, it looks good!

Name: James Jameson (Signed) · Date: 12/30/07 10:43 · For: Prologue
aw! that was so sweet! I can't wait for new chappies!!!!! This is deff on my faves!

Name: Noel Weasley (Signed) · Date: 12/28/07 23:59 · For: Prologue
Awe, Manu, this is really sweet.

Now, for the critique. Don't worry, it won't be long.

Ow! Don’t pull me so hard. - I think this should be in quotations, as a thought. Or maybe she should just mutter this, have Ron just say a quick sorry or something.

See, Done!

This is really sweet. I enjoyed reading Rosie's thoughts on Scorpius. She doesn't seem very prejudice, which is good, since I could just imagine what Ron has told her.

And Ron, oh Ron, he seemed like himself a bit. not wanting his baby girl mixing with the wrong people, or the children of the wrong people. He's very protective of his child, which shows that Rosie may be a Daddy's Girl. they seem really connected, just from those few lines.

And Scorpius, (wow, I spelt his name right without even looking. Go me.) He seems like a thinker, from this quote here - I hate noise. I need a place … alone.-
Just my thoughts though.

‘No wonder you’re so pink …. like a rose.’

Now this was really cute. Scorpius (yes!) seems to be both sensitive and somewhat of a ladies man. He knows what to say to charm a lady. :)

I like how you put in those little thoughts about the Chocolate Frogs at the end. It added a sweet touch. Pun not intended, mind you. ;)

Well, alas, all things must come to an end, including this review. Lovely story hon, just lovely.

~Lindsay (HUZZAH!)

Name: TheBlackSister (Signed) · Date: 12/28/07 18:11 · For: Prologue
Well done! Very mysterious and intriguing! Funny how the fathers seem similar, somehow - both very forceful. With one sentence you establish Mrs Malfoy as the definitive dame of society. Can't wait for more!

Name: Weasley24 (Signed) · Date: 12/28/07 7:25 · For: Prologue
Wow! This is a really good start, Manu. I didn't think I would be into Rose/Scorpius but I am. Write more soon.

Name: FlightofthePhoenix (Signed) · Date: 12/28/07 4:23 · For: Prologue
Manu! Couldn't not reivew your lovely story! I need more, maybe just a little sneak preview *hopeful eyes* Nah, I'll just have to wait until you update. Soon, I hope :D I like the changes of the POV between Scorpius and Rosie. Helps us understand whats going through each others mind. That's really great. I love reading the next generation stories because the characters are all ours to fiddle with. The way they react and stuff, we give the background to the name. Its obvious J.K wanted us to write Rose/Scorpius fic, otherwise, why would she had written Ron have forbbidon Rosie to date him?Just a little nudge of inspiration she's given us. Can't wait to read more Manu!


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