Reviews For Meaningless
Reviewer: Russia Snow
Date: 06/29/09 14:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really liked this story; I have always been interested to see what Bella felt after the war was over, and I think you wrote it very well. Your description of Azkaban was really good, and it was interesting to see Bella’s real feelings, and to see that maybe she isn’t all evil.

Bella’s characterisation was lovely. You really captured her love for the Dark Lord, and how she felt when she found out he was dead. I liked how you used the possibility of suicide to look at Bella’s thoughts, and how you used third person when talking about Bella. The cross cutting you used was very clever, and made me want to read the rest of the story, to find out is she jumped or not. I liked how you included bits like, “after he had taken her chin in his hand and promised her…” This sentence really enhances the feel of Bella’s almost childish dedication to her master. The use of further flashbacks in italics to show her thoughts was also really cleverly used. The way she thought about the Dark Lord now he was dead, trying to picture him in the afterlife, was a really clever addition to the story.

The only small points of critique I have are about the word choice and flow; “only to breathe once more the sea air” - I think this would flow better as “only to breathe, once again, the sea air”. I also noticed a space missing between “certain” and “he” in this sentence: “until he was certainhe had enough power [...]”. Other than that it was a very well written story.

Russia xxxxx

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 12/12/08 19:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

Amazing. I love it. I never believed that Bella died. Anyone who knows me, knows that I could never really accept that.

I love the way you wrote this. I liked that Bella was so frightened of death. No matter how little we have to live for or how miserable we are, death is still scary. You captured that wonderfully.

I'm also not surprised that Bella chose to live. She's a fighter. I could see her committing suicide in some instances, but this didn't feel like one of those. I think you handled her chatacter beautifully.

Author's Response: Yay, glad I decided to check my reviews again, I haven't been back here in a while. I'm so glad you liked it!

Reviewer: hope47
Date: 01/10/08 17:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

.....no words.....

Author's Response: Ha, I'm hoping that's a good thing...

Reviewer: Saif
Date: 12/30/07 16:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

Absolutely brilliant, not to mention dark!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! ^_^

Reviewer: baby b
Date: 12/27/07 9:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

Its a great story everything is done well but i don't think Bellatrix would return back to Azkaban if she had the chance to escape. Other than that everything is ace.

!!Becky!!

Author's Response: Well, she couldn't really escape -- her only options were to jump and kill herself, or return to her cell. Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Lover of Luna 9462
Date: 12/27/07 8:36
Chapter: Chapter 1

Whoa. This is a very nice fic. You can impersonate Bellatrix so well. Strange that Bella would know of heaven. Anyway you are very talented in angst fics. Keep up the writing.

Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, angst is kinda my genre, though sometime I want to write a humor fic :)

Reviewer: Leahr
Date: 12/26/07 22:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

I was surprised at how good this was. You didn't try to humanize Bella or explain her away, but you showed something of her thoughts and beliefs, making me reallly glad I'm not like her. Her choice to live was...just cool. Really well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 12/26/07 17:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

good story!

Author's Response: Thanks ^_^

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