Reviews For Dudley's Dementor
Reviewer: Dissendio
Date: 01/03/08 12:49
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

I really enjoyed this but I feel that I ought to point out that caning has been illegal in Briton for many years. I don't think that you should change this though as the caning takes rather a big role in your story. If, perhaps you made this out to be in a slightly earlier time period then it would work better.

Author's Response: Thanks for your input, I remember staring at a cane when I was in second grade in Australia, standing with my hand held out. It was very scary for an American boy who had never heard of such a thing. I put it in just as another form of school punishment, I think most forms of physical abuse have been removed from most school systems now. Thanks again.

Reviewer: Ceedub
Date: 12/30/07 18:27
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

I felt for him and then hatd him even more.
great job

Author's Response: Thanks for the input!

Reviewer: Saif
Date: 12/30/07 16:25
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

This was unique!

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: xombie
Date: 12/28/07 6:12
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

I really liked this fic, Tibi. You've made us feel compassionate for a character we all hated, and to that is an amazing job!
You've done the fic very well, and I can see a distinct style between the drabbles and this fic. Great work!

Author's Response: Glad you could enjoy it Manu. Thanks.

Reviewer: moonstargazer
Date: 12/27/07 14:50
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

Well Dudley is'nt as tough and terrible as we all thought, huh?
Nice story though. Serves Dudley right for being a bully to Harry...He got a taste of his own medicine...

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. Appreciate it.

Reviewer: Lover of Luna 9462
Date: 12/27/07 8:17
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

How sad! Even Dudley doesn't deserve that. Brilliant. It almost brought me to tears.

Author's Response: Thanks alot for taking time to read and leave your thoughts. It started out to be comedic, but became more and more a case of a victimized Dudders. Hard to feel too sorry for him though, he does become a bully once more after he joins the boxing team.

Reviewer: marvelousmeg
Date: 12/26/07 23:19
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

I really like your story. Teh connections you placed werefantastic too. Great story:)

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reading and leaving feedback. I am glad you enjoyed it. Tibs

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 12/26/07 19:10
Chapter: Welcome to Smeltings

Wow, you made me feel bad for Dudley. I NEVER felt bad for Dudley, but I have wondered what he was forced to relive because of the dementors. Your reference to his bullying of Harry was well-placed, as well, and the way you began and ended it was appropriate.

Two little things:
First paragraph, "His mind turned in upon itself. Dark thoughts overpowering him." The second bit is a clause, but you could make it part of the sentence before it by swapping out the period for a comma. Also, fourth to last paragraph, "Sitting ionce again n the Deanís outer office", the i is a little out of place.

Oh, also, you did a fantastic job with the three older boys who were bullying him, the way they framed him each time neatly, and how the teachers managed to misinterpret everything he was trying to say. Smeltings must have been something like how you portrayed it, since the Smeltings sticks are a traditional part of the uniform.

A unique take on Dudley's worst memories, overall. Well done, and Happy New Year!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks a lot for taking the time to review the story, I really appreciate your input, the changes should be made now. Thanks again.

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