ARGH. I LOVE the last part of this poem.
I adore most of this. It may not be shocking or flowery or symbolic, Katie, but it's powerful and sad. The last stanza absolutely killed me. It was amazing. This poem started out 'meh' - I personally wasn't into it - but the ending was amazing. Great job there. You should definitely be proud of this poem.
I think I didn't like the introduction as much as the rest of the poem because it was a bit cliché – two slightly clichéd metaphors right next to each other isn’t always the best beginning (*is totally not guilty of those* x_x). It didn't...hook me in.
But otherwise, I loved this. The premise is great, as is the ending, overall good execution and writing. =)
Author's Response: Thanks!I know what you mean about the beginning--personally, I hate it. HAAAAAAAAATE it.But I will agree that the ending is slightly better than the beginning is, if not as great as you proclaim. ;]Thanks for the review and all of the great concrit and praise! =]
Well, you know what I think? No, you don't. Well I will tell you then...
I think that this was a wonderful poem. I can picture Dumbledore thinking these things. Great job.
Author's Response: Ha ha. Maybe I DO know what you think! Maybe I am a Legilimens! *shifty eyes*
Then again, maybe not.
Thank you! I feel all warm and fuzzy now . . . and NO, I DO NOT HAVE GIANT PUFF BALLS ATTACKING ME IN SEARCH OF THE MYSTICAL FOUNTAIN PEN.
That's the last time I drink caffeine at 1 AM.
*Standing Ovation* Brilliant job, you are SOOOO good! 10/10
Author's Response: I don't think I've ever gotten a standing ovation before! And a 10! Thank you!!!!! I like exclamation points!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Great job! I really liked the last stanza.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. :)
You know how much I love dear little Harry. And, sadly, I like it when he's sad. So, this poem hit the spot for me. I especially like the last two stanzas: they show a touching scene.
*pokes* Super job!
Author's Response: Stubby! Squee!
I'm glad you liked it! I'm not too proud of this one, so. . . .
For a sec at the beginning I thought it was Petunia's POV, you know, her feeling sorry for him...it kinda worried me. Dumbledore makes so much more sense. Good job!
Author's Response: LOL, that would worry me, too. ;)
It was well dome though I know you can do a lot better. Don't mind me I usually turn into a grinch at chrstmas.lol=Sammy
Author's Response: I know, I know. This was an older poem, but I just felt like submitting it. . . . I actually really hate it. I think it's rubbish. So you're not being a Grinch. : )
I liked it! It really brings out how he resembles all the people who have died for him... ugh, that sounds morbid...
It was very nice! I thought it was Dumby's POV. I was right!!!
Merry Christmas, by the way!
Author's Response: Thank you! To be quite frank, this is most definitely not my favourite poem, so to hear that someone likes it makes me smile. : )
Merry Christmas to you, too!