My favourite line:

I wish upon the stars
For time to turn back

I just really liked the idea of Harry wishing on a star cuz Sirius is after all named after one. I liked how you showed that.=Sammy

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad someone caught on to that! I love the idea that so many characters were named after stars and constelations! (Draco is one.)

PS: You are the next Edgar Allen Poe...mwahahahaha! Did you know that Edgar Allen Poe stayed with Thomas Jefferson when he went to the college Jefferson started? I read that on wikipedia when I was working on my inquiry project!

Author's Response: *Sniff!* That is so touching!

The simplicity of the poem is actually really nice--it emphasizes how life can so simply take a perilous turn w/o warning.

However, in the line "I know you won't come back" you could have also used "I know you can't return to me", which would have sounded more poignant. Since your last line was "For you to return to me", it could have been like a poetry mantra of some sort, haha. Otherwise, very touching. :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Can I change that? If you don't mind I'd love to use that!;)