*gasps* *bounces around hyperactively* I can't stand the suspense... what kind of place was that to end? This was a super chapter, loved it, loved Snape, loved Harry (really loved Harry - haha, Dittany, excellent), amazing, amazing, amazing... AMAZING. Okay... calm down now...
Episkey, Potter, is a spell used for minor tissue damages, such as cuts, bruises and bumps.
I don't know about this... Tonks did fix Harry's nose, didn't she. And I'm pretty sure it was broken, so it wasn't slight tissue damage. Unless Snape is just saying this because he doesn't want to admit he can't do the spell.
'Not much for me to do, is there?' he shrugs. 'It's up to you, really. I'm just a bait.'
I think it should be "the" bait.
'I hope it's worth it.'
Great last words. :p
I'm so excited - can't wait for the rest of the story!!
Author's Response: Warning: reviews of this type may infect author with hyperactivity. ;)
Hmm, actually, you make a very good point about the spell. I believe I should revise the definition, possibly into 'usually used for minor tissue damages.'
Thank you for the review, the nitpicks, and for picking up one of my favorite details (i.e. Harry Potter and the Essence of Dittany).
Chapter 4 is in queue!
Very nice story, told from Snape's point of view...The scene between Snape and Harry was very tense, as it usually is between those two.
And Snape's undying love for Harry's mom is very much in evidence as he spoke to Harry, looking into his green eyes as he fought off the urge to not look into them, and weeping over a picture of Lily...
Forgive me for making this comment, but there's an old song by the Who called 'Pictures of Lily'...Just a thought...
Author's Response: Thank you for the review!
As for song associations, in my mind Severus would usually associate with several songs by Within Temptation (actually, the original video that inspired this piece, was based on their son See Who I Am).
Incidentally, the picture featured in this story is the same one that was retrieved from Grimmauld Place.
Another great chapter. I love the banter between the two. I even chuckled at certain scenes ,because I could "hear" them speaking. So realistic.
Author's Response: Thank you for your R/R! "Realistic" is a high praise indeed, considering how much I agonized over whether it sounds plausible!
Hope to see you around for the continuation!
There are so many great parts in this but my favorites are:
One last chance… Let him walk away. Just one more death on my conscience. Why does it matter? Why does it matter now?
'Do not leave the area, wear the Cloak if going outside, do not use magic, stay away from books, enjoy the boredom,' he mutters.
Excellent writing, again. This story is getting very gooooooooooood. :D I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Awww, you've made my day - again. :D
We authors are creatures so easily pleased. Creatures of sweet, sweet vanity. ;)
Eagerly expecting January 3rd now to submit the next part.
Wow. This story begins perfectly, with just the right amount of "tug". :) I really like it so far, but when does it take place? After HBP? And what's happening... elsewhere? With the rest of the world. You say there's a war happening... will we hear more about it?
A tiny typo that I picked out:
'And you agreed?' the green eyes look huge in a mixture of shock and disbelief.
The "t" in the should be capital. :)
Harry and Severus both seemed slightly out of character (to me) at the beginning of the chapter but by the end, the flaws vanish, so no harm done.
The last line is very, very well written, and makes me so sad. :( But that is most definitely a good thing. On to chapter two!
Author's Response: Firstly and foremost - thank you for reading and reviewing! :)
The story does indeed take place after HBP, and from some of Snape's thoughts we can surmise that 'almost a year' has passed since the Lightning-Struck Tower. That is all he is willing to reveal at the moment - limitations of first-person view.
I, personally, believe this to be happening somewhere in the middle of DH, except Severus does not appear to be the Headmaster. Harry, I believe, decides to pay him a visit somewhere in the middle of their (his and the trio's) Horcrux hunt, having found out his location somehow.
I would be very glad to hear more on what seemed OOC to you, and should you be so kind as to elaborate, I'll appreciate it. To avoid being frowned upon for (ab)using the review page for conversation, I'll be happy to provide my address (faerywebmaster at rambler.ru)
Thanks again and hope to see more of your comments!
*sniff* good story! snape is so sarcastic!! lol i like the dialogue!
Author's Response: Thank you. There are more chapters coming along, with both sarcasm and dialogue in abundance! ^_~