Reviews For Deciding Factors
Reviewer: Saif
Date: 12/30/07 16:29
Chapter: Broken Bonds

This was brilliant. I liked the interaction between the sisters and overall, the fic was awesome!

Author's Response: *grins* Thanks so much! That was so nice of you to say. I am glad you enjoyed it. ~Nicole/NikkiSue

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 12/29/07 13:29
Chapter: Broken Bonds

Nicole, once again you amaze me. This was brilliant. I loved every bit of it. The way you described Andy and Bella's relationship was wonderful and interesting.

The only part I had a question about was did they too live in the Black house? Or are all Black houses the same? Just wondering.

I was surpised that Narcissa didn't have more to say though, but their mother's words were so deliciously icy.

Excellent job,

Author's Response: Hrm. Yeah, I had issues writing Cissy but she HAD to be in there, didn't she? As far as the people who do and don't resort in the Black house . . . I cannot believe I missed that detail. I should consult with an expert and mend that. *coughEllecough* Thanks for your awesome reviews, Haylee. *hugs favorite fangirl* ~Nicole

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 12/26/07 19:26
Chapter: Broken Bonds

You've done a very nice job with this story; it really is astonishing how different the three Black sisters truly are. The argument between Andromeda and Bellatrix was particularly intense, and your version of Mrs. Black as cold and detached was chilllingly perfect.

I guessed the story would center around Bellatrix from your summary, but it ended more heavily focused on Andromeda (who I like much better, so it made me happy). I think it would be more powerful, though, if you kept to one of the sister's point of views. It wouldn't take much to make this all Andromeda's point of view, and it might be interesting to add a chapter of the same event from both Bellatrix and Narcissa--I'm interested in how you would show Narcissa's thoughts, as she doesn't speak very much at all.

I love the last two paragraphs, though! You make me believe that Bella still loves Andy, even if she can't seem to reciprocate the emotion for Ted and Tonks, and it makes her almost human, in spite of the fact that most of the time she comes across as pure evil. Great work, and Happy New Year!

Author's Response: Hmm, I never thought of adding another chapter with Cissy's POV. I need to look at the summary again. I may end up rewriting it. I found it amusing that you enjoyed the last two paragraphs as I ended up adding them after the story was approved at the discression of a Mod. Some things were not clear and so I used the final paragraph to clarify a point or two. I'm glad it made sense. Thanks again for reviewing. ~Nicole

Reviewer: InvisibleAparecium
Date: 12/26/07 18:46
Chapter: Broken Bonds

Oooh, I'm impressed. That story was so intense and realistic that I am thoroughly convinced it really happened! It also shows how Bella once had a fraction of a decent side... 9.2/10!

Author's Response: Haha, thank you. I am trying to stay open minded to Bella since I have several friends who are determined to "fight for the cause." I'm pleased that you seemed to enjoy it. ~Nicole

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 12/26/07 2:42
Chapter: Broken Bonds

That was a very intence fic and your characterization was qiute well done. 9/10.=Sammy

P.S. Its kinda impossible to get a 10 from!

Author's Response: Whew, thank you. I have never written the Black sisters so I was unsure how it would be accepted. Thank you for taking the time to review. I appreciated your imput. ~Nicole

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