Reviewer: sjanakan
Date: 12/22/07 9:20
Chapter: Stupid Ideas

I would Work on your Paragraphing

Reviewer: roisin_dubh
Date: 12/11/07 12:24
Chapter: His Worst Fear

EEEE! It looks GREAT!!!

Author's Response: Thank You. You can only imagine how excited I was when I saw it was accepted. Have you ever heard the phrase "dance like nobody's looking"?

Reviewer: lilyevans489
Date: 12/11/07 2:31
Chapter: His Worst Fear

That was great! You wrote a really good story, but it was the little things you put in that made it so good. Great job for a first story.

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for your lovely review!

Reviewer: froggie
Date: 12/10/07 22:58
Chapter: His Worst Fear

hmm i like your take on that scene, but i was actually horrified. i would like to think that remus would have a bit more self respect. what they did was plain old disgusting, and if it were me i would be very furious. i think the story would be a bit more believable if remus told them how much it hurt him the next day.
good luck!

Author's Response: Yeah, to be honest, that was the one thing that worried me as far as believability. If I had been Remus, I might have actually taken a swing at James the second I was off the ground. However, it wouldn't have worked with how I wanted this chapter to go or with what I'm trying to set up for later. I do plan that, in a later chapter when he is older, James will realize how much of an idiot he was (and Sirius, and perhaps Peter too) and will feel remorse for what he did. Thank you for taking the time to read and review!

Reviewer: anath
Date: 12/10/07 22:07
Chapter: His Worst Fear

I think it's wonderful. You've got a real talent for writing. Only, I don't think that the boys' joke was funny - it was awful! But then again, I'm a girl.

Author's Response: To be honest, I don't think it's very funny either. I never did. I also am a girl, but I tried to put myself in the mindset of a twelve-year-old boy (it's a scary place, btw) and this is what came of it. Thank you so much for saying I have a talent for writing! It's a pretty recently discovered talent (she said modestly), but I'm having loads of fun and it's great to know that people are enjoying it. Thank you for taking the time to read and review!

Reviewer: KaileeA42
Date: 12/10/07 16:49
Chapter: His Worst Fear

I really liked it. It was a really good first fic and very believable as well. Everyone was really in-character and it also had good Humour. "Amazing Quaffle Boy" *snorts*

Author's Response: "Amazing Quaffle Boy" was my editor's favorite line. Bless James and his giant head, it gives me so much potential for humor. I'm happy you liked my story and thought it was believable. Thank you very much for your review!

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 12/10/07 16:13
Chapter: His Worst Fear

You want to know what I think? I think that was amazing! I would have imagined Sirius in the library trying to figure it out with James, but the way you did it was good. James and Sirius were perfectly in character the whole time, it was fantastic.

I also really like that you didn't overuse the "sick mother" excuse, but played it just right, and threw in some other pretty transparent excuses as well. My favorite line in this story is when the Fat Lady asks how they reappeared, and James says, "Magic." The eternally best retort in the history of Harry Potter, no matter who uses it.

Oh, yeah, Shrieking (as in the Shrieking Shack) has the i before the e.

Anyway, excellent work--I can't believe this is your first fic--and please update soon!

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 12/10/07 16:12
Chapter: His Worst Fear

You want to know what I think? I think that was amazing! I would have imagined Sirius in the library trying to figure it out with James, but the way you did it was good. James and Sirius were perfectly in character the whole time, it was fantastic.

I also really like that you didn't overuse the "sick mother" excuse, but played it just right, and threw in some other pretty transparent excuses as well. My favorite line in this story is when the Fat Lady asks how they reappeared, and James says, "Magic." The eternally best retort in the history of Harry Potter, no matter who uses it.

Oh, yeah, Shrieking (as in the Shrieking Shack) has the i before the e.

Anyway, excellent work--I can't believe this is your first fic--and please update soon!

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 12/10/07 16:12
Chapter: His Worst Fear

You want to know what I think? I think that was amazing! I would have imagined Sirius in the library trying to figure it out with James, but the way you did it was good. James and Sirius were perfectly in character the whole time, it was fantastic.

I also really like that you didn't overuse the "sick mother" excuse, but played it just right, and threw in some other pretty transparent excuses as well. My favorite line in this story is when the Fat Lady asks how they reappeared, and James says, "Magic." The eternally best retort in the history of Harry Potter, no matter who uses it.

Oh, yeah, Shrieking (as in the Shrieking Shack) has the i before the e.

Anyway, excellent work--I can't believe this is your first fic--and please update soon!

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it!!!! I've read some of your fics too and I think you do great work, so it really makes me happy you like my work too. "Magic" is one one my favorite lines as well. It just seemed so... fitting, in the Potterverse. I can't believe I misspelled Shrieking! Remind me to flog my editor (I kid, she's actually really excellent). I'll fix that error right away. I will update as soon as my editor sends my second chapter back. Thank you so much for your review!

Reviewer: Leahr
Date: 12/10/07 15:27
Chapter: His Worst Fear

Yeah, that was really mean of them to break it out that way, but I think he wouldn't have really believed them if they had just told him so maybe it was for the best. YOur dialogue was very natural, which was good, I only wondered why Remus's excuses were so pathetic until the Marauders advised him to improve them. Grandmothers can only last for so long, and he has seven years to go at hogwarts. Why didn't Dumbledore or his parents advise him better? Then again, it took even his closest friends nearly a year to catch on, and the rest of the school has less reason to notice, but a less suspicious excuse, like a recurring problem at home or something? Anyway, you had excellent characterizations and I liked this story. Is it a one-shot?

Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! I'm glad that you liked my story and that you thought the characterization was excellent. Being true to JKR's characters is really important to me. As for Remus's excuses, I didn't think it would be quite as much fun if Remus were a really good lier. His parents might have advised him, but he is only twelve after all and he's in a rough situation. To answer your last question: no, it's not a one-shot. There will be plenty of chapters to come (I think I have twenty-four planned right now, yikes!). However, this story is, oh how did I put it in my summmery, "glimpses into Remus's life", and it may read more like a series of one-shots. I just sent chapter two to my editor, so hopefully it will be up soon. Thanks again for your review!

Reviewer: iluvkrum
Date: 12/10/07 11:37
Chapter: His Worst Fear

you did well. that was horrible what they did, taking him into the forest but believable from what we know of their sense of humor. good job! i always love a good remus story!

Author's Response: My very first review! I'm so excited! Thank you so much for reading. I'm glad you thought it was believable. Yes, it was mean, I know that, but I wanted to do something different. There are a lot of fics on MNFF that tell the discovery as a warm and fuzzy moment of acceptance (don't get me wrong, I love those fics, marauder era rules), but I wanted to put a new spin on it. Thank you so much for taking the time to review; seeing that my fic was posted and that I had reviews totally made my day!

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