Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 09/05/08 10:12
Chapter: The Innocent Werewolf

A quiet, boring chapter? Are you kidding?

I love arguments. LOVE them. And that was fantastic. Haley was probably faring better than James, because she had an example she could point to but James couldn't exactly point to Remus, but he fared all right. Remus sitting there praying to God had me rolling around on the floor. I've read some fics in which Remus is an atheist, and the reasoning is always funny. "Cue locusts now." *dies*

The scene afterwards was a mini-fight as well, even though it wasn't big and loud. Remus was pretty much dead right about someone getting suspicious, cause Snape figured it out. I wish Lily had defended werewolves on James' side, but I guess she probably is just doing her mutual empathy thing, being raised in a Muggle house, and doesn't know what to think.

There were one or two typos, but the only one I can see right off without scrolling back to the beginning is Snape's second to last comment (but he two are completely unrelated) needs a t.

Keep writing, Remus-genius. Cheers!

Author's Response: Yes, I was kidding. I'm glad you loved the arguments; they were fun/painful to write. And I had a little too much fun writing Remus's prayers I think. :) Lily doesn't really know much about werewolves other than what she's learned in DADA, so, while she doesn't have a reason to hate them, she really doesn't have a reason to defend them either. She only defends Remus because she thinks he's nice, but she's still in denial about what he is. I'll fix that typo and check for more, thanks for the tip. Chapter 7 is in the queue! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!

Reviewer: Pendraegona
Date: 09/05/08 9:54
Chapter: Monsters

I missed a chapter. How did I miss a chapter?! You must have sneaked one by me.

This was good--not my favorite one so far, but definitely good. There were two long memories there, and it would have helped if you'd made them a tad more concise, but the subject matter was appropriate and necessary to make your point. I think you're pretty brave fitting the nicknaming of the Marauders into a flashback, but it worked out. The flashback with Remus' parents I liked the better of the two--interesting pair, aren't they? John's promise not to send Remus away was particularly moving, the way you did it, and him six and crying and scared just makes my heart HURT.

The werewolf murder of the ten-year old boy kind of paralleled the death of the MacDonald boy in HBP. When stuff like that happens, though, people do get up and all activist for a while. I shouldn't have laughed when James said, "Who died?" and someone really did, but I did laugh...a lot. More good Marauder-dynamics, them being protective and up in arms to defend werewolves because it meant defending Remus, each in their own way. Awkward-trying-to-talk-about-feelings Sirius was brill. James' explosiveness and Peter's trying to be sensitive were also right up there--pretty much how they would all react.

I do think you should take out the last two lines, though. They sound too narrated and might just hint at what's about to happen next.

'Kay, off to read six!

Author's Response: Pen love, I missed you! I'll try not to be so sneaky. I never intended the naming-thing to be a huge deal (actually, I intended to leave it out and just say they made then up over the summer) so I was comfortable making it just a quirky flashback. And don't worry, you're hardly the first person to laugh at the line "Who died?" It's meant to be funny, even if what happens next is not. I actually kind of stole the idea for this chapter from the (I'm sorry, canon freak) Montgomery boy in HBP. How the school would react, how Remus and the other Marauders would react - it was all too interesting to not write it out; I'm glad you thought my interpretation was accurate. The last two lines are supposed to hint at what's coming. They're supposed to make you think, "Oh Merlin, what's he going to do?!" and force you against your will to continue reading. Muahaha. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: 11phoenixtears
Date: 09/04/08 18:15
Chapter: The Innocent Werewolf

not boring at all!!! i thought it was great!!!!

Author's Response: Yeah, I was actually being a bit sarcastic when I said it was a quiet chapter, but I'm still glad that you weren't bored! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: mostly_harmless_66
Date: 09/04/08 15:52
Chapter: The Innocent Werewolf

I LOVE this story! Definitely one of the best Marauder fics ever! Everyone is so perfectly in character. Especially Remus and James. I particularly love how James defends Remus, and how there's more to his character than just being obsessed with Lily. The whole thing is just ridiculously enjoyable.

Author's Response: Ridiculously? I consider that high praise! James is a really fun character to write, but I have to admit that he does go a little stupid over Lily in the next chapter and the ones following. However, I promise that chasing Lily won't be the soul focus of James's character, just a funny side story. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 08/19/08 17:40
Chapter: Monsters

REMUS!! Noooo! My love for Remus has slightly surpassed my love for James in this chapter. Although I did greatly enjoy reading them name each other. Reminded me ever so slightly of another scene in another fic which is called The Cause and which I wrote ... =D

I really, really like this fic. I hope you update it soon! And I have a horrible feeling about the baby, but I don't dare voice it. When Remus was four and he was crying in the hallway ... I think I about had a heat attack. I got very VERY maternal all of a sudden and wanted to just adopt four year old Remus and never ever let him go.

Anyway. I really hope you update soon. I'm looking forward to it.

Author's Response: Ah yes, I remember that scene, something about James not wanting to be called "Horny" if I am correct. *sniggers* Don't be too hard on James, he's a good guy. I completely understand your maternal instinct to protect Remus. My heart breaks a little every time I read the line "Do you still love me, Mummy?" and I wrote the freakin thing! About updating: my computer's been having certain issues with saving things right now, so I'll have the chapter in the queue as soon as I put in the html formating...again. But you'll still have to wait for chapter seven to see the baby. Thank you SO MUCH for EVERY SINGLE ONE of your reviews!!!!!

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 08/19/08 17:00
Chapter: The Silver Knife

*Smothers Remus in hugs*

So he has a younger sibling? Will we hear from them? I wanna hear from them! Or did something horrible and tragic happen? Please don't let something horrible and tragic happen!

Four year old Remus was freaking adorable AGAIN. =D I'm moving on now ...

Author's Response: Yes, we will hear from him or her. And besides the fact that it would break my heart to have something horrible/tragic happen to them, I also think it's a little overdone. I've read enough stories where Remus loses a sibing, thank you very much. *hugs Remus and never lets go* Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 08/19/08 16:32
Chapter: Potential Death by Spherical Snow

SO. MUCH. FREAKING. LOVE.

Author's Response: MUCH. HAPPINESS. THANK. YOU.

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 08/19/08 16:07
Chapter: Stupid Ideas

Bloody. Hilarious.

Cod, I LOVE James! I ALWAYS love James! Why do I always love James so much? If I met him in real life I'd probably hate him. Anyway. Loved James. Loved how he skipped out the word "not" every now and then. Loved how he set Snape's pants on fire. Loved how they started talking about stupid ideas. LOVED how he was avoiding his friends to read up on animagi. Loved how freaking ADORABLE the image of him sleeping was.

Also how they were fighting through Peter. That was cute. =D

Author's Response: *Pets Prongs* James is amazing, I agree. The "not" skipping thing just seems like his brand of cheek to me. I'm glad you liked the part where they fight though Peter. It's something I can totally see them doing. I would say "poor Peter" but then I would have to go stick a bar of soap in my mouth. Did I make James adorable in his sleep? I don't exactly remember... Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 08/19/08 15:18
Chapter: His Worst Fear

Okay, I came to see if you'd written anything and it turned out you had, so go you! Unsurprisingly it was about Remus ... but I'm glad! It's good so far!

Well, I mean, I was practically sobbing when they were being mean to him. Poor Remus was just ... sob. I wanted to give him a huge hug. But then, bizarrely, when James was like "That was bloody hilarious!" I started laughing along with them. I felt kind of guilty about it though, because BLESS LITTLE REMUS who was just SO adorable. What is it about Remus as a child that will just never ever stop being cute? Anyway, I'm going to carry on reading now. I'm afraid you've got me hooked!

Author's Response: OF COURSE it's about Remus! He's my favorite character! Sorry I made you sob, but I'm glad that you laughed when things turned around. Don't feel guilty about laughing; I laugh too. More because the Marauders are idiots than because I think what they did was funny...but, whatever. Now I'm off to read/respond to the rest of your reviews!

Reviewer: its_prongs_world
Date: 08/06/08 19:56
Chapter: Monsters

you just made me very hungry!!! great job on all chapters LOVE LOVE LOVE them all!!! very funny keep it up!!!

Author's Response: Haha, that's what my editor said. She sent me my chapter draft back with a complaint about craving omelets. I'm so glad you love my chapters! The next one is going in the queue now. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: Laurelyn
Date: 07/24/08 15:10
Chapter: Monsters

"Who died?" Despite the sadness, that line almost made me laugh. It is SO James. I also really enjoyed the whole scene in History of Magic; the scary thing is that my mind works just like that! You also impressed me with Sirius' characterization. Great job. When, oh when can we expect another chapter?

Author's Response: I agree: SO James! At least the way I see his character. The History of Magic scene was not originally the main focus of the chapter, but I really think it's important. James, Sirius, and Peter all accepted Remus's condition so easily in the beginning, but I think it's only natural for them to experience a little doubt, if only briefly and completely privately. Looking back over my stuff, I realized how much I'd been favoring James out of Remus's friends, so I thought Sirius needed his moment; I'm glad you thought I did it well! Chapter six is done, but I've been super busy lately (I'm so behind on reading all my fav fics!) so I might not get it into the queue until next week. Hopefully it will be approved first time through. *crosses fingers* Thanks again for your reviews!!!

Reviewer: Laurelyn
Date: 07/24/08 15:06
Chapter: The Silver Knife

I just reread your whole story for the third time and realized that I hadn't reviewed the last two chapters! Shame on me!

Poor Remus! This chapter really hit home for me, as it's something I've often wondered about. Silver poisoning just isn't something that would occur to a teenager, is it? And then the nightmare on top of that. You captured a 4-year-old's mental state very well.

Also:

“Can you guys just explain one thing to me?”

“Sure,” said Peter.

“How is it fair that when Sirius gets hit with a snowball, twelve girls surround him, but when I pass out in Potions, I get you three and Madame Pomfrey?”

=Brilliant. I laughed out loud.

Author's Response: I really appreciate you taking the time to review. I'm also very flattered that you enjoy my story so much to be rereading it for the third time! That line of Remus's was originally just a device to tie the snowball fight with the silver poisoning - back when it was all in the same chapter. But it makes me laugh too; life is just so unfair when you're Remus and Sirius is Sirius. :)

Reviewer: jediprankster
Date: 07/09/08 17:30
Chapter: Monsters

That was fantastic! It's my favorite chapter so far, as well. I especially liked that Lily Evans was the sole dissenting voice among all of the werewolf bashing. I imagine that she will figure out that Remus is a werewolf. She is a smart girl, after all.

I love the story. Keep it coming!

Author's Response: Funny you should mention Lily... I'm not going to give anything away, but she does have a short scene coming up in the next chapter, although, it might not be exactly what you're expecting. *shifty eyes* I'm so happy that this is your favorite chapter too! The next one should be up soon. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: stagmarauder
Date: 07/09/08 10:47
Chapter: Monsters

Best. Chapter. Ever.

Author's Response: Wow, high praise when I remember how attached you were to chapter two. I'm glad I didn't disappoint! Thank. You. Matt.

Reviewer: LizzyT
Date: 07/09/08 10:14
Chapter: His Worst Fear

It seems so realistic that James was afraid of Remus.
It was a great chapter, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: LunaforGryffindor
Date: 07/09/08 2:50
Chapter: Monsters

You know what? I enjoyed every chapter so far, but it's right, this one's the best. Can't wait to read the other half!

Author's Response: I'm glad you think so! The next half should be up soon. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 07/08/08 20:35
Chapter: Monsters

This is a great chapter! I like the doubt and the fear the James was feeling. It seems only natural that at some point or another, they'd have to have that moment when what they know about Remus and what werewolves really were on the night of the full moon would collide, and you've done a beautiful job of 'handling' James' POV. But gosh, poor Remus! Can't wait to see what James does now!

Author's Response: I'm not going to give away what James does, but rest assured, it will be very...well...James. At least the way I see him. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter! Thanks so much for the review!

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 06/02/08 17:59
Chapter: Potential Death by Spherical Snow

I read the four chapters that you have posted, and have to tell you--I LOVE this chapter! You've done a wonderful job with all the different characters and the House stereotyping. I love Remus and Sirius as the envoys--honestly, the way you wrote them is just PERFECT.
Most excellent!

Author's Response: Writing for Remus and Sirius is so much fun (but of course you already know that!) and I had a great time playing up each of the different Houses too. I'm so happy you love it! Thanks again for reviewing!

Reviewer: DragonDi
Date: 06/02/08 17:56
Chapter: The Silver Knife

I am enjoying this story very much! I love the flow of it, and your dialogue is very smooth and very much in character--or at least in character for how I've always perceived the Marauders. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
(Is the chapter feeling a little less neglected now?)

Author's Response: The chapter is feeling much less neglected now, thank you. I'm so glad you're enjoying my story! I hope the next chapter lives up to your expectations (it's my personal favorite so far). Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: tonks_the_dreamer
Date: 05/30/08 22:22
Chapter: Potential Death by Spherical Snow

awesome chapter! i love snowball fights! we should do that some time over xmas break.... hm....

Author's Response: Okay, you get together all the Hufflepuffs, I'll get all the Gryffindors, Jenny can get the Ravenclaws, and I'll meet you outside of a castle in Scotland. I just hope there's enough snow... :)

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