Reviews For His Happy Holiday
Reviewer: jenny b
Date: 12/11/07 3:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh my Godric. Iím crying.

Youíve made me speechless, so just wait a moment until I stop bawling my eyes out.

I loved this story so much! I think I began to cry when he told Lily about not getting many presents, and I really started sobbing at this line:

It was red and gold ó the colours of Gryffindor, he thought, but at the same time realised that it didnít matter, because it came from Lily and she would always be there for him, even if she was red and he was green.

That was definitely my favourite line. It was a beautiful way to word their relationship. The whole fic was really descriptive with emotions, and you didnít just skip over them or write them down bluntly like some people do. Your writing is so beautiful. You know you can write well when you make people cry!

I only found a few mistakes:

Ö but he would but forth his best efforts.

Iím guessing you meant put forth.

He creped into the bedroom Ö

It should be crept.

Ö sleeping under a think layer of earth and snow,

That should be thick.

I canít find any criticism for this story. Itís really good. The ending in particular was amazing. You made me want to hug Severus. Before DH, I never would have thought Iíd say that. :]


Author's Response: Hey! Oh, I'm sorry if you got too upset! Thanks for the very lovely review, for saying what you liked and so forth. And thanks a ton for pointing out my typos! I went and corrected them immediately, thanks! ~Nez =)

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 11/27/07 20:29
Chapter: Chapter 1

*sniff* poor snape! good story!

Author's Response: Poor Severus indeed. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 11/27/07 15:46
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awww that was soooo touching *sniffles* You've developed the characters so well, and capture their emotions perfectly. Poor Severus...

Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I'm glad you like it.

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