Reviews For Fate's Toll
Reviewer: azngurlwidhighlights
Date: 04/03/09 19:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

OMG! Why did you stop there!? You could have at least told what happened! Now I've literally been killed of the suspense!

Reviewer: azngurlwidhighlights
Date: 04/03/09 19:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

OMG! Why did you stop there!? You could have at least told what happened! Now I've literally been killed of the suspense!

Reviewer: Keri Potter
Date: 03/02/08 12:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

AUWSOME! It was totally auwsome!

Reviewer: harry_victoria
Date: 02/02/08 16:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow. You have such an amazing story right here, m'dear. I'm especially impressed by the uniqueness of this story; and that you did this so proficiently without a beta.

Unable to look away, the man stood staring at himself in the cracked, dirty mirror. His black hair was greasy, matted in places and sticking up ruefully in others. His eyes were sunken and hollow and his cheek bones protruded visibly from his sallow skinned face. The dark black circles under his eyes stood out vividly on his paper white complexion and he looked as though he hadn’t slept or eaten in a very long time.

I love how you started this off. It's a perfect image of someone who's lost everything, and it's so descriptive that you can imagine it in your mind.

I thought that it was a very unique idea to have Bill come, and not someone such as Hermione, Ron or Ginny. As you said in the story, he was someone who cared about him, but not enough to be overly-concerned.

Your way of describing Harry's torture, especially with his Lucius-torture scene is very believable. Leaving it as Bill about to kill him is a very nice, well-thought-out cliffhanger.

Honestly, this is one of the best stories that I've ever read here on this site. I'm overly-jealous of your spot-on characterization of all of the characters you worked with. If Joanne Rowling decided to end the series another way, I would definitley vote for this one. Kudos to you for a job well done.

-victoria

Reviewer: paperrose
Date: 01/17/08 19:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

please please don't leave it like this. please post the sequel! we all want to know what happens!!!

Reviewer: paperrose
Date: 01/17/08 19:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

please please don't leave it like this. please post the sequel! we all want to know what happens!!!

Reviewer: HogwartsGirly124
Date: 12/17/07 18:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a work of genius, i completly loved it. You had be hanging word from word. It just upsets me that we dont know what happens... hints = MOREE!
i cant take in to count that there are only 4 reviews. Absurd. Should be like 435435,90493423,02934824. Just wait till the world finds this sucker. Great great, and cant wait for more.

Sophie


p.s.

hope i didnt scare u

Reviewer: baby b
Date: 11/25/07 12:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

oh my god u can not just end it there its completely evil. does he do it?

Reviewer: Dissendio
Date: 11/25/07 8:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Harry's still a Horcrux isn't he? So he can still live, right? Please don't kill Harry off! Or maybe you will and then we'll see how they coop. Great story though. You've GOT to write more. NOW!

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! There is a sequel, but I'm not sure I'm going to post it. I'm kind of waiting to see what people think before I decide.

Reviewer: Merope Gaunt
Date: 11/25/07 1:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh... my.... God.... Pure brilliance! You write with the flair of J.K. Rowling herself! I was hoping there would be another chapter... maybe Bill can't do it and takes Harry (and Voldemort) back to the Burrow? Hehe... can you tell I am hinting for more? Nonetheless, I look forward to reading any more stories you write!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's very high praise! There is a sequel to this story, but I'm not sure I'm going to post it. I think I like this better as a one shot...

Reviewer: Marauder4Life
Date: 11/24/07 22:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow....

Author's Response: Is that a "Wow this is really good," or a "Wow I can't believe you'd post such an awful story?" Either way, thanks. :)

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