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Name: lola_lovegood (Signed) · Date: 02/27/08 10:40 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
i hope they fix the site soooon so YOU can UPDATE your story

*sigh*

ttfn
XOXO
~lola~

Author's Response: I second that *sigh*. I hope so too. I notice that some stuff is still getting validated though. I just would hate to risk it and have the archive explode if I tried to submit, though.


Name: saneasluna (Signed) · Date: 02/21/08 16:04 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
one quick question, are those the real names of hermione's parents? i don't care if they aren't, i just find it in my own circumstances to be very, very, ironic, coincidental, etc. anyway, don't mind my rambling; you did pretty boss x)

Author's Response: No, Hermione's parents' names were my own invention. {apart from the pseudonyms we were told about in DH and their surname of course ;) } I simply chose common British names that seemed to go with 'Granger' Thanks for the review!


Name: briar_weasley (Signed) · Date: 02/21/08 2:53 · For: Chapter 1 - Summer That Year
It was OK, except nobody in Australia EVER speaks like that, let alone in Sydney. If you've never been to Australia, write the dialogue how you would write anything else, and in fact, older generation Australians are more likely to say "don't worry your pretty little head about it" than use the word "shiela." I didn't like the way you stereotyped us and the conflicts that were just abandoned, like the death eater thing (I mean, if it was just a dream, why write about it in such detail?) Overall it's shaping up to be an interesting story :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! For my response to the whole Australia-speak - please see my looooong reply further down. The 'conflicts that were just abandoned' - I chose to write the Death Eater scene in such detail precisely so people would not *know* it was a dream. I mean, the excitement would be rather lost if I advertised it was a dream, wouldn't it? Poetic license! :) Oh! And I thought of something else about the incorrect dialogue - I figure I'm in great company ... Ms Rowling herself has realised she erred when she made Hedwig (a snowy owl) nocturnal as snowy owls are actually one owl species that are diurnal. I figure if she can mess up, who am I not to? Glad you think the story is interesting. Hopefully, I can get the next chapters posted soon, despite the current queue problems.


Name: Rislans88 (Signed) · Date: 02/18/08 19:59 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
THIS IS AN AWESOME STORY!! please keep writing it!!!! happy, interesting, original, and more!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you very much!! You're so kind!


Name: deej (Signed) · Date: 02/17/08 21:38 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
Nice story so far, I can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks, Dan. I can't wait to write more but until the queue is opened again I don't know when I can post. As long as people don't forget my story before I can submit more!


Name: Cascia (Signed) · Date: 02/15/08 12:31 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
love the story please continue!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you love it! I'm worried about posting the next chapter as the queue is kind of wonky and we've been asked not to submit.


Name: The Potter boy (Signed) · Date: 02/12/08 20:39 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
Other than the point that Silver Whisper said, this is a great fanfic, and looks to be getting along really nicely. Hope u can update us with another post soon...

Author's Response: Yes, I'm thinking of making some changes to the dialogue in this chapter (see my reply to Silver Whisper below). I would love to update soon, I'll wait til the mods give a clear signal, though.


Name: ember (Signed) · Date: 02/12/08 17:02 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
so funny! Loved the end. But it is reallly them right? Harry was really dreaming about the death eaters?


Author's Response: Glad you loved it! Yes, it is completely them. I would have no idea how to write Death Eaters for real. Not my forte as they say.


Name: hopeless sap (Signed) · Date: 02/12/08 7:49 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
This was great! I really liked how Hermione slowly brought her parents back--very believable. Of course, I love Harry and Ginny's interaction. And, I think it's a hoot that Ron didn't think twice before he agreed to go back to school just to keep an eye on Harry/Ginny. :D Can't wait to read chapter 5!

Author's Response: I'm pleased you think so. Yeah, the Ron bit was an inspiration as I was editing the chapter. When I thought of it, I just knew that was how I needed to end the chapter.


Name: Kiwi_Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/11/08 3:30 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
Brilliant story so far. I loved seeing Hermiones house and how she returned their memory. I can't wait to see their time at Hogwarts.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I can't wait to write their time at Hogwarts either!


Name: Spoony (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 21:14 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
I do like this story hey- I had no idea it was all Harrys Dream- even though now I know I should-
One critiscism- Aussie realy don't talk like that- some do but def not anyone in Sydney City- it was funny though
Lookin forward to an update

Author's Response: Yes. It was all a dream. I couldn't figure out how to use them really. That would have been a whole other storyline! As to the Aussie talk, see my reply to Silver Whisper. I'm afraid I can't update any time soon until he mods sound the all-clear.


Name: marvelousmeg (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 19:38 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
I love this chapter! The story is very interesting and I really liked the twosome argueing in between- it was very real. Harry is wonderful to Ginny and i love it that way. The final bribe to get Ron back to school was great too.

Author's Response: I'm thrilled you love it. Thanks! I like the bickering myself between Ron and Hermione. They just seem like such an old-married couple and it is actually very easy to write! Yeah. Harry and Ron too get very sweet before the story will end.


Name: moonstonesilver (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 11:59 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
lolol “Well,” she said, her lips twitching, “Harry’s coming too. I think we’d rather enjoy not having your prohibitive presence dogging our every move ...”

“When do we leave?” Ron snapped.


lolololololololllll!!!! :D :D well, it was a great story - and update SOOOOON! yahear?!

Author's Response: Pleased you thought it was hilarious! Yeah. Updating. Apparently I can't post anything yet. The mods haven't given an all-clear yet. {sigh} Just when I felt I was hitting my stride. Oh well. It may all be finished when we can post again.


Name: Silver Whisper (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 2:17 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
Hey,

Look, it was a great chapter, it explained alot of questions, the closing scene was cute and the scene between harry and ginny was adorable, but...

as an australian i am really unhappy with the way you portrayed our speech. I have never in my life used or heard the term "galah", the only time i used the word "sheila" was when i was referring to a friend of mine, whose name is, of course, sheila (she was british by the way) and i would never refer to a mentally unstable person as having kangaroos in their head.

Actually, the only one time a man called me "a little sheila" i actually told him where to go. I find the term kind of derogatory. And look, im sure you didnt mean to, but when people portray us like this, it makes us seem "simple".

Im sorry, i really am, but this is probably the only thing in fanfiction that really angers me. I can handle over the top fluff, i can handle ron/draco, i just cannot handle this kind of portrayal of Australian speech.

Although, i do blame media and tourism. I mean, our biggest "personalities" overseas are steve irwin, kath and kim and home and away. These characters do, unfortunatly, speak like this and use such phrases as "flamin' galah", i suppose its tourisms way of making us seem funny or "warm". But if you would like a closer example of how australians speak, maybe look at actors like Nicole Kidman, Heath Ledger (rip) or Naomi Watts.

Wow, im sorry to come across bitchy, i really did like the chapter, and i love your story, it just makes me so angry. but its not your fault, it really isnt. Hmm, its okay, im studying tourism now so maybe i can pave the way for true australian speech portrayal overseas. Yes, i think that would look fantastic on a business card. maybe not....

Author's Response: Hi Sarah. Thank you for taking the time to read and review (and such a long thought-out one, too, not just "Hey, that sucked!"). I could hear your 'but' coming a mile away, by the way ;). I'm glad you thought the chapter was great and you enjoyed some scenes. I appreciate (truly) your comments regarding the portrayal of the Australian characters and their speech patterns. You actually didn't come across as bitchy to me, but rather frustrated and annoyed. Thinking about it, I would feel *completely* the same way when people who aren't familiar with Canada believe that Canadians all (1) talk like Bob and Doug Mackenzie from T.V. with the word 'eh' on the end of every sentence, (2) live in igloos, (3) get snow all year long, and (4) spend inordinate amounts of time drinking beer and playing hockey. Okay, that last one can be true! LOL! I'm picturing my extended family last weekend playing hockey on my SIL's rink in her back garden and my BIL handing round bottles of beer as we shot pucks on the goal!! :) Actually, come to think of it, all those statements about Canada, CAN be true. There are some individuals who DO still make igloos, the farthest northern regions DO get snow all year round, and I've actually met people who do punctuate every, or nearly every, sentence with 'eh'. It's all a matter of generalizations. While I don't drink beer, and can't play hockey to save my life, many in Canada do and can. I'm wondering if it would be the same in Australia. You may not use the term 'galah' or use such a rude phrase to describe someone who was mentally ill, but I'm sure there may be someone, somewhere, in the vast continent of Australia who might. That being said, I freely confess my complete and utter ignorance regarding Australian culture and speech patterns. I also humbly offer my sincere apologies for any offense taken. My information, as you suspected, is culled entirely from popular culture and media references, a couple of Internet sites, and my parents' trip there last year. You are right in your belief, though, that I did not intend to offend or insult you or your great land. It was simply a matter of said ignorance. As mentioned above, you may not use 'galah' or the 'kangaroos/paddock' phrase, but my trusty research (Internet sites, LOL!) did list both as 'common slang'. Of course, by whom, and whereabouts, is anyone's guess! The 'Sheila' comment I'm well aware would be considered, especially by modern women, to be derogatory or belittling (hence Hermione just refraining from rolling her eyes). In an earlier draft, I actually had Hermione's thoughts on that particular word included. However, it slowed down the flow of the action at that point, so I reduced it to rolled eyes (or nearly rolled eyes). Please remember, that it is the older gentlemen Liam who uses the expression. Liam is kind, friendly, and warm, but he is a little old-fashioned. He is modelled after my sweet great-uncles and late grandfather who would refer to me as 'lass' and 'lassie' and have been known to say, "Don't worry your pretty little head about it". They don't MEAN to be condescending, their comments come from a place of affection, and the feminist in me just lets it pass by without much comment. About the kangaroos comment, please remember the source - Jake is a right twit and I needed his speech to reflect that as I didn't have much time to establish his uncouth character. I am considering changing around some of the dialogue. (Perhaps you would be able to assist with that?) I would like to keep the Sheila comment (adding Hermione's view of it), and the kangaroos comment for the above reasons. I have thought a great deal about the comment you made about making the characters sound 'simple' though. That wasn't my intent, and actually the very reason that the nurse, Grace, does not show any 'unusual' speech patterns. However, I am considering rewriting Angus' lines to make him sound less 'uneducated' (although a part of me thinks of Hagrid when I read his lines - I was going for that same sort of affable, easy-going type of character. Anyway, this reply is now longer than the chapter itself, so I'll close. Thanks again for your review and the chance for me to reevaluate the chapter. Good luck with your tourism studies! cj


Name: LilaBear (Signed) · Date: 02/10/08 0:28 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
Brooms don't fly due to aeronautics, but due to magic. Therefore, there is no "aeronautic lift" to be destroyed on a broom :P

Secondly, good luck finding people in Sydney who say "ya" and call people "galahs". It's basically northern Australians or people who live in the outback who talk like that- definitely not inner-city Sydneysiders. And they definitely don't call women "Sheilas".

Also, at the beginning of the chapter you said Mr and Mrs Granger were back in London and working at their practise again, but at the end you said Hermione got them settled in "a home" (in Australia I presume) and then her and Ron returned.

Author's Response: Aeronautics. Yeah. That's me trying to show off my (limited) knowledge of grade 6 science units! ;) I know, I know - due to magic. I needed a phrase, though, to get them into the fall, and that's what I picked. Besides, as we don't really know much about what makes broomsticks fly, I'm choosing to believe that the aeronautic lift is present, just created by magical means. Please see my remarks to the above review for comments on the "Australia speak". I've checked the story for the "a home" bit. Check it again - it does say at home both times. Thanks for reading and reviewing Leah!


Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 02/09/08 23:14 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
I loved this chapter! All of Ron's interuptions were so Ron! And that last bit where he made a complete 180 so he could keep a beady eye on Harry and Ginny was hilarious. Hermione's so clever, thinking to gradually revert the memory charm so as not to cause suspician, who else but her would think of that? And I'm so relieved there were no death eaters... Yeah!!! I loved the bit at the beginning where Harry told Ginny about watching her on the marauders map, it was so sweet. And Ginny seems to be turning into an excellent flyer, quidditch player after Hogwarts possibley? Anyway, great as ever, can't wait until the next chapters posted.

Author's Response: Thank you for all your kind words! I'm thrilled that you think Ron is in-character and are happy with the way everyone is portrayed. As to Ginny - did you read Ms Rowling's interview on the MuggleNet main site about everyone's future? If not - keep reading for Ginny's future ...


Name: txhpfan (Signed) · Date: 02/09/08 20:24 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
I really enjoyed this chapter. You've really captured the essence of Ron trying to protect Ginny (although some would say overprotect). I'm looking forward to reading your next chapters.

Author's Response: I would *definitely* say overprotect (as would Ginny!). This comes later and almost leads to blows between Ron and Harry. *mutters to self* Should not have said that. Should NOT have said that ... Glad you're enjoying it!


Name: SingingBird (Signed) · Date: 02/09/08 19:15 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
I just found this today and think it is really interesting. I like it. :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you find it interesting and are enjoying it! Thanks for leaving a review.


Name: lola_lovegood (Signed) · Date: 02/09/08 12:04 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
EEEPPP you should've seen how exited i was when i saw that the chapter was up!
love this. I think it was cute how you kinda faded in and out of australia and england
oh and harry and ginny were soooo adorable.
R U gonna go allllllll the way through when they go 2 hogwarts????? that'd be great!!!!!!!!!
cnt wait 4 next chappie

ttfn
XOXO
~lola~

Author's Response: Glad you were so excited Lola! Thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it. (was it worth the wait?) And I am going through to the end of the school year (and beyond, too!).


Name: Moonys Only Girl (Signed) · Date: 02/09/08 10:55 · For: Chapter 4 - Home Again, Home Again
It was really good so far! Finish it up ASAP please!

Author's Response: Thank you! I know exactly what will happen in the dozen or so chapters I have planned out, and 5 and 6 are already completed. Unfortunately, with the queue in a problematic state at the moment, I really can't post right now. I will as soon as the mods give the all-clear signal.


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