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Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 05/26/12 0:29 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
Awwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!! Man, this was a heartbreaker of a story!! The minute I read about the fawn in the ornament, I melted and I squealed that it was Snape and Lily's patronus. I wasn't disappointed later when Snape called the necklace that! Oh, how I'm sad those two didn't end up together!
Perfect story, though. Makes me wish with all my heart to become a better person before its too late and I lose what I can't replace. *eyes fill with tears* sigh...

Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked the ornament! (Keep an eye out in Much More Than A Game to find out how this particular ornament ended up in Snape's family.) Plus, for what it's worth, I've generally found that the point of too late is that moment when that person walks away; everythng up to that point still holds hope. :)

Thanks for rviewing,

Name: TimeturnerBabe (Signed) · Date: 12/17/11 22:00 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
Gah, I really need to stop reading little Severus and Lily fics. They make me sob EVERY TIME. Especially this one. I feel so bad for Snape and how Lily is so sweet on him...I also love that she always wore the necklace, and how Snape got it back at the end. Beautiful.

Author's Response: It's hard not to feel bad for Severus, even though his own choices were what drove them apart. I think what always gets me is that he definitely loved Lily... but not quite enough to change in time. I can't help but wonder what would have happened if he'd rejected the Dark Arts before she ended up with James (or even after while she was still alive). Would we have all been reading Harry Snape and the Philosopher's Stone? Would they have had the sense to not name their child Harry Snape? Alas, the world will never know... unless someone goes to the trouble of wirting the AU fic. Thank you for your review; I'm really glad that you enjoyed it (and am sorry that it made you cry).

Merry Christmas,

Name: DMTAT003 (Signed) · Date: 03/22/08 13:36 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
Thank you, this story was truly amazing. Great job.

Name: Sev and Lily (Signed) · Date: 12/17/07 17:00 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
awwwww omg that was a spectacular story. I absolutly LOVE sev and lily stories (hence my username) this was so well done.. i love the idea of her patronus being a doe because of snape not because of james. this story was excellently well written and made me happy but sad too because they can never be together. but who sent the package???

Name: njyecats (Signed) · Date: 11/24/07 9:12 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
Very Good! I love the Severus/Lily stories. This one is great!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! :)

Name: Skipper424 (Signed) · Date: 11/22/07 11:27 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
Being that I entered the one-shot challenge this month as well, I always like to bounce around the other entries and check out the competition. **cough** I mean, see what others have come up with in response the same prompt. I can say this much about your fic: if I were judging, this story would definitely be one of the finalists! I thought this was a simply marvellous story!

The main thing I loved about it was the way you did the interaction between Petunia, Lily, and Severus, especially Petunia! As I was reading, I just thought to myself ‘wow, she’s got Tuney down perfectly!’ Just the overall nastiness and rudeness she expresses towards Severus, all the while Lily is defending him.

“I think it’s cruel to make an animal fat just so that it will like you,” added Petunia.

That was just one of my favourite parts! It was so mean, and poor Severus isn’t doing anything at all. She’s just all over him about it.

I also really liked the whole thing you did about him having the potion all made and ready to go for her. How he tested it on himself to make sure it was safe and that it had the effect he wanted. He has it all planned and then his mother finds it and wrecks the whole thing, leaving him with nothing to give her. I also liked the replacement gift you came up with. I thought it that it was a great idea: turning his favourite Christmas ornament into a little necklace charm.

The ending, however, was probably the best part. When he gets he gift back and finds out that it was found on her body when she died. That part was what really sewed the whole thing up for me. Lily hadn’t hated him, per se, she hated the darker path he had chosen for his life … one she simply could not follow him down.

Great job … that’s all I can say. I can certainly see this entry winning. Either way, great work and I’ll be looking forward to reading more of your work in the future!

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for your thoughtful review, and best of luck to you in the challenge as well! :)

Name: Trucker (Signed) · Date: 11/22/07 2:20 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
What a beautiful story! Very well crafted, good characterizations (especially the spiteful Petunia), and a great way to show Snape finally realizing why Lily had finally rejected him (because of his choices).

Author's Response: Thank you! :D

Name: HPLoverForever (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 23:37 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
Wow... honestly, I feel this is one of the few stories I could go on and on about how much I enjoyed reading it. You did such a good job at so many things! Where to begin?

Severus couldn’t recall his own mother ever having called him ‘Dear’ but obediently took a gingerbread man and began nibbling on its head, feeling horribly self-conscious.

This quote says so much. It subliminally says how Severus wasn't treated well at home by his mother, rather than actually stating so. You sort of implied it, rather nicely, I might add, and it gave the reader that view perfectly.

I absolutely LOVE the way you wrote Petunia! Her snotty attitude and jealousy really does show here, just the way Jo Rowling wrote her in Deathly Hallows.

“Thank you, Mum,” Petunia trilled, once the plate had been passed to her.

“You’re welcome, Petunia,” Mrs Evans answered, one eyebrow slightly raised.

When Mrs. Evans raises her eyebrow, it's more than obvious that Petunia is purposely trying to be rude. I'm sure that her saying 'thank you' must be quite uncommon, due to her mother's reaction.

I also like the idea of the ornament. Although it fits the theme of the story, it holds more significance than that. It held the promise that Lily will always be safe with it, that she doesn't need to be afraid of the dark, and that Severus, in a way, would always care about her, which he does.

The only thing that seemed a bit out of place was where Lily kissed him on the cheek. It was cute, don't get me wrong, but it seemed sort of out of character for her. Lily is sweet, but not to the degree where she could kiss him on the cheek if he was hurt. And remember, young girls at that age still aren't exactly comfortable with the idea of boys, or at least most of them. It was more the action, not necessarily the concept of it that bothered me a bit.

You did a great job on this, I really enjoyed it!

Author's Response: I must admit, I felt the kiss was pushing it too. Unfortunately, it was a required part of the challenge prompt. When time permits, I may go back and see if there's a smoother way to work it in. Thank you very much for your in depth review!

Name: osier (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 19:48 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
stop making me cry! this is the BEST Severus/Lily story I have read. Period.

Author's Response: I don't know what to say, except thank you so much! :D

Name: wewillmissyou (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 19:36 · For: When Darkness Meets Light
This is so unbleievably sweet. It was sad yet filled with hope. Does that make sense? Anyways, good job and keep writing.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm really glad the story came across that way!

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