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Name: Jessabelle (Signed) · Date: 05/01/11 0:39 · For: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Valiancy
Wow, just read year 1 and what you have done of year 2 today and i really like it. you have kept is so interesting and captivating. I just made both a fav, and you as an author as well. I love jacob... he's dying isnt he??? :( i hate that... but it makes the story good but still :(
dont do it... do it... i dont know!?!
From the start of the story i cant help but wonder what will happen with theodore nott. the way he's mentioned makes me curious. hope something happens there. Shi is so awesome, she's real and it takes a talented author to manage that. Weldone!
More please!
good work and thanks for writing it! great excuse not to do my uni assignments.

Author's Response: Thank you for faving the stories and faving me as well. I'm flattered. And I must say, you're very bright for picking up my mentions on Theodore Nott. I will admit that something will happen with him in the future, though it probably won't come into play until next year. Thank you for the compliments on little Shi-Shi. I'm glad I gave you breaks from college assignments, but good luck on them all the same. Thanks for the review!

Name: slytherins_queen2 (Signed) · Date: 04/13/11 13:41 · For: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Valiancy
I really do adore this series. I think that this story is even better then the first one, a feat not easily achieved. Especially when your first story was brilliant. This one is even more so. I often check to see if this has been updated- even though I don't even use this site anymore. Thats how much I like it :)

Sorry for the gushing rambles, I just thought I'd say how brilliant of a writer you are, how refreshing it is to see a character like Shiloh, who is intelligent, brave, cunning, and independent- though still human, with emotions and the way she reacts to situations. I like that she has her flaws too. It is so relatable- which is epic. Not at all like the ''Mary Sues'' out there. I hope you update soon! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. And don't apologize! I love gushing rambles in reviews. They make my day. I'm glad that you think Shiloh is human and flawed, because I work hard to make my characters real and non-Mary Sues. I'm glad you think I managed it. Thanks for the review, and I hope to hear from you again next chapter (which should be coming fairly soon).

Name: hpgploversforever (Signed) · Date: 04/12/11 11:50 · For: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Valiancy
That was a great chapter can't wait to read the next when you get to it.

Author's Response: thank you. The next chapter should be coming fairly soon.

Name: Fifth (Signed) · Date: 04/11/11 13:01 · For: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Valiancy
Very nice. My favorite line is "Promises, promises." That is so Persephone.

Name: hermione48 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/11 12:20 · For: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Valiancy
PLEASE, PLEASE DON'T LET JACOB DIE!!!!! I know that you will probably, and he's a seventh year so we wouldn't see that much of him anyway after this story and all but PLEASE!!! Jacob and Shiloh have serious chemistry too, even considering the age difference... maybe an epilogue of when they're older and then they get together? but i love the story!

Author's Response: I never said Jacob was going to die. You'll just have to wait and see what the future holds for Jacob, and for Jacob and Shiloh. I'll admit the idea of them getting together has crossed my mind. You'll just have to see though.

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 04/07/11 15:10 · For: Chapter Twenty-Seven: Valiancy
He knows!!! (dancing around the room!!). HE KNOWS!! Love it!!

Author's Response: lol, thanks. I'm not quite sure what you're talking about, but lol, thanks for the review anyways!

Name: GothicKitten91 (Signed) · Date: 04/03/11 13:21 · For: Chapter Twenty-Six: The Enemies Within
So i came across the trailer on youtube and decided to read the story that went with it. (first i read year one)
I'm enjoying the story a lot and i can't wait to read more. I enjoyed it so much i made an account here to review.
The way you describe everything is so good. your story makes perfect sense and i don't feel confused reading it. also i could so see this happening while harry potter's story is also unfolding.
I enjoyed the first story and this story so much it's taken me 2days of doing nothing else but reading it to finish.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you like the story so well.

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 02/04/11 17:25 · For: Chapter Twenty-Six: The Enemies Within
Wonderful! Oh I'm sad I've reached the last chapter for now!! Can't wait until you post again!!!

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 02/04/11 15:29 · For: Chapter Twenty-Two: Her Daddy's Eyes
Oh the nose!! That was great!!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 02/04/11 15:19 · For: Chapter Twenty-One: All They Ever Wanted
Yes you did!!!!!

Name: nevilleherosnape (Signed) · Date: 02/04/11 15:19 · For: Chapter Twenty-One: All They Ever Wanted
Yes you did!!!!!

Name: k8yhalman (Signed) · Date: 02/02/11 13:09 · For: Chapter Twenty-Six: The Enemies Within
Ha, I love it! Great chapter! And yes, I realize the age difference and I know that its something that wouldn't happen, but they just seem to have more chemistry. Jacob's gonna die isn't he? I know he SAID he'd be alright, but whatever it is is killing him isn't it? Ohh, and lemme guess, Snape is the professor that Seph accidently gets? Things are escalating here! I hope after waiting soo long (12 years!) Snape gets a chance to really BE a father, though I can completely understand that for Shiloh trusting a Death Eater (spy or not) would be pretty difficult. I think its practically a given that Snape is gonna be furious when he finds out about her mark eventually, but it's gonna be interesting to see what the result of that anger is!!! Anyway, update again soon!

Author's Response: Yes, I'll admit Jacob and Shiloh had a sort of chemistry. But right now, their relationship remains a really close friendship. Perhaps in the future, things might be different for them, but for now, they really do feel for each other like really close brother and sister. The situation with Snape and Shiloh is very complicated, and since I'm not into spoilers or crushing hope, you'll just have to wait to see if he ever gets the chance to be a real father. Yes, Snape's reaction to Shiloh's mark is bound to be interesting. Thanks for the review!

Name: Ras Bas (Signed) · Date: 02/01/11 9:58 · For: Chapter Twenty-Six: The Enemies Within
I'm really enjoying your descriptions of Snape's and Shiloh's feelings and thoughts concerning each other. Their conflict, it seems, will take some time to be solved. Very clever! Keeps us sitting on the tickling needles of curiosity and expectation. Again my full admiration for your elegant writing.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Yes, Snape and Shiloh are both complicated people, especially when it comes to their internal side. It will take a bit for their struggle to be resolved. Thanks for the review, and I hope you keep reading!

Name: AReader (Signed) · Date: 01/31/11 21:35 · For: Chapter Twenty-Six: The Enemies Within
This story is amzing!

--Proud to be the 100th reviewer, AReader

Author's Response: Thank you. And thanks for being my 100th review!

Name: Bambieyes (Signed) · Date: 01/29/11 17:50 · For: Chapter One: Surprise, Surprise
Loving this story! I registered to this site so I could favourite it :)

Name: k8yhalman (Signed) · Date: 01/22/11 13:37 · For: Chapter Twenty-Five: Bruises
Hey so I just came across this series and I stayed up WAAY too late reading it, but it was soooo worth it!!! Am I wrong in picking up a little Jacob/Shiloh romance here??? Shiloh seems to have more chemistry with Jacob than she does with anyone else! Update soon please!

Author's Response: Well, I am glad you liked it so well and I do hope you will continue to read (hopefully not so to cause you more sleep deprivation later). As for Jacob/Shiloh, you really have to remember their age difference. Jacob is seventeen and Shiloh is twelve, so the only relationship between them is friendship. As Jacob said in chapter twenty, Shiloh is like a sister to him. :D Hopefully, I will have the next chapter done soon.

Name: Ras Bas (Signed) · Date: 01/19/11 9:58 · For: Chapter Twenty-Five: Bruises
Stumbled over Shilo's story only a few days ago, and it held me gribbed tightly since (even neglected studying for an exam...:) )
You're a wonderful writer, I love your style, imagination, the plot and of course the adorable heroe you've created!
There's only one thing I'd like to point out - as much as the many ( well written) insights and explanantions of people's motives enlighten the reader, sometimes it's a little bit too much, and the flow of the story becomes too viscous. Less is sometimes more, if you get my meaning...
but otherwise, I'm in love with your story and wait impatiently for an update!!!

Author's Response: Oh, dear, I'm sorry about that exam. Hopefully you will do all right anyways. I'm very glad you liked the story, and thanks for the advice. I tend to do it as a matter of characterization with Shiloh, since she is very over-analytical. However, I do understand that I probably take it too far. Hopefully I will have the next chapter finished soon enough.

Name: MissMeg (Signed) · Date: 01/04/11 18:22 · For: Chapter Twenty-Four: A Merry Little Christmas
It never ceases to amaze me how long your updates are. In most cases you make good use of the words, but in this case I think the chapter was too long for the amount of content. Obviously the fact that Christmas was a little over a week ago, affected the content of the chapter. (Out of curiosity, did you plan for the Chistmas chapter to be published so close to Christmas, or was it simply coincidental?) But, I don’t think that the content of this chapter really needed almost 10,000 words to be told well.

There were a lot of paragraphs, which were explanations, which really weren’t needed. (for example, it’s nice to know what Shiloh and her family normally do for Christmas, but not really important.) There was also a lot of content, which I would describe as fluff (but since I don’t know what’s going to happen next, I really can’t judge what was important and unimportant. However, I highly doubt that the whole Heretics’s Christmas get together had to be so long).

I’m also quite curious as to whether Shiloh’s mum and dad being worried about the events at Hogwarts and wanting to withdraw Shiloh will be an important in the later plot, or if it was just a way to develop their characters, or if you put it in to add some ‘action’ to the chapter.

On another note, I really liked out you begun the chapter. It was a really nice transition from the last one. I think at the beginning you did a really good job expressing Shiloh’s feelings about finding out that Professor Snape was her father, and about telling her parents. It felt very in-character and realistic. And, was certainly my favorite part of the chapter.

I was very curious as to whether you would include a passage with Professor Snape. I think it was a good idea to keep it short, as it wouldn’t really do anything for your plot and character development to have a long scene focusing on a probably depressed and sentimental Professor Snape, and in fact I think you could have done without the scene at the end.


Author's Response: Thanks for another detailed review. However, I really don't agree with you about this chapter at all. I struggled with this chapter too, since I realized it wasn't as exciting as the last few chapters. However, that's what I believe made this chapter so important. After what I put Shiloh through in the last three chapters, I believe she deserved to have some time of peace and senseless fluff. Plus, this is an important Christmas for them. I don't regret this chapter, not a single, solitary word. There were several reasons why I added what I did with Alan and Elaine. One, because I do believe that they, along with many other parents were extremely concerned about what went on at Hogwarts that year (and other years). Two, it was the reason Shiloh wouldn't have told them about Severus and that's a secret that needs to remain a secret...at least for now. ~Chante'

Name: AReader (Signed) · Date: 01/03/11 21:37 · For: Chapter Twenty-Four: A Merry Little Christmas
What an excellent chapter for the holidays!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Saif (Signed) · Date: 11/29/10 14:28 · For: Chapter Twenty-Three: A Long Road Home
Awesome! How many more chapters are there?

Author's Response: I really don't know. I won't know until I'm done writing.

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