What of my fifth sense,
It’s hidden from me,
Will my dream come true,
And bring pleasure in me?

He is so confusing to look at,
His darkness and evil is not complimented well,
By the angelic glow,
Like an angel from Hell.
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Wow, that part there really shot out at me. I like it well enough, but, it just really didn't click. I couldn't really picture what was going on. I'm sorry, but, well, I'm being truthful. Maybe you could use more descriptive words, vivid words. Like, words that you usually don't see, but look and sound cool, has rhyme, and means what you need it to mean.

It was interesting. Was the "Angle from Hell" perhaps... Draco Malfoy? ;)

~Lindsay

Author's Response: Thanks for your advise, it is my first poem, or first fic if I can call it that. I'll keep your thoughts in mind when I write anything else. And yes it is Draco. Thanks SS.

good but who's she talking about?

Author's Response: She's talking about Draco, there is a brief description in the 3rd stanza :)