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Name: XhayleeXblackX (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 10:29 · For: First visit to King's Cross Station
This was really interesting. I liked seeing this scared side of the pureblood statis. I get the feeling that she won't be in Slytherin though. The only thing I have to comment on is that sometimes I felt that you had extra paragraphs that didn't really fit. Like when she would explain something, then jump right back into reality. Its not major though just something to look at in your next chapter. Great first start. I can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Thank you! The house she'll end up in is kind of obvious: Gryffindor. Anyway, she needs to explain otherwise you really won't know what's going on (or what she's talking about). Pureblood statis... is cool. I think that I'm enjoying writing this. My Muse says that she/he's coming back. So I'll be updating soon. Thank you for coming by to review, XhayleeXblackX! ~Meli♥

Name: MissHufflepuff (Signed) · Date: 11/20/07 23:16 · For: First visit to King's Cross Station
First chapter and I already want to read more. What house is she going to end up in? Can't wait for the update.

Author's Response: Hmmm... that house is actually very obvious for Mary-Sues, however, Selene isn't really one. Thank you for your review and of course, I'll update soon. :] ~Meli♥

Name: Pissenoffanis (Anonymous) · Date: 11/20/07 21:45 · For: First visit to King's Cross Station
Oooh is she gonna get into Slytherin.... Out of interest, was that sandy haired boy meant to be Remus? Just curious :)

Nice interpretation of the pureblood attitudes. A bit heartless, but realistic.

Author's Response: Nope, not Slytherin (she doesn't want to prove herself or any of that). Yes, the sandy-haired boy is Remus. Hmm... Thanks, Pissenoffanis, for your review and your compliments. I'll update soon, promise. :D ~Meli♥

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