Really cute! I like how the story was adjuted to Ron's POV. Oh how I love fluff!
I liked the story, especially the ending of the wizard bedtime story- nice twist! I also like how you incorporated Mrs Figg… It was also nice in how simple terms the bedtime story was written- because it adjusts to the intelligence of the reader!
Just a small thing in the letter:
It will sadden my parents
Since she is writing to her sister, shouldn’t it be “our parents” or “mother and father” or something?
That was a nice missing scene.
I like that you have Ron telling the ‘Tale’ and that the book adjusts accordingly to the teller. Hermione wouldn’t like that very much would she?
I am surprised that she didn’t interrupt the story a second time to say something about the letter between sisters. It said, “I have also come to the conclusion that the child is a Squib. It will sadden my parents, even though we aren’t on good terms.” Wouldn’t that be the sister’s parents too?
He just said Wingardium thingy and the pot started bouncing? Oh that is hilarious.I was wondering if they would be in Little Whinging Surrey.
I am of the opinion that Harry was right in the beginning though. It’s not Mrs. Figg, but his family.
Oh I enjoyed your story, and I hope to make it back to read your other story soon. Until then though,
Happy Holidays from "The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves."
Ooh, this finally got up! Congratulations!
I've got to say that I really do like this fic. (And no, I'm not just saying that because I beta-ed it.)
The idea was not only original and sweet, but it was a great turn away from all the angst that people have gotten from DH.
Good job, and congrats that this got up!
Author's Response: hehe you are a great beta though. thanks!
I like it, but I think it's a bit too modern for Beedle the Bard. I mean, this book is supposed to be like, Grimm's Fairy Tales, which were gathered in the 18 or 1900s. They didn't have neurologists back then, and this book was likely written even longer ago, considering it's a book of wizarding fairy tales and their history is longer than the Muggles.
The idea itself is really cute though, and your writing is good. I think it's great that you got Ron reading the story and everyone else breaking in; you've really got the Trio's characters down pat. I particularly liked how Ron didn't want to read it, and then once he got started, he really got into it and wanted no interruptions. Good job, just watch the whole time period thing.
Author's Response: Yeah, originaly there were names for all the characters but my beta told me that there wouldn't have been names in a fairytale back then. Thanks.
*claps* I loved it!
Author's Response: Thank you :)