Reviewer: ceres51892
Date: 10/08/09 1:06
Chapter: Prologue

Ah! That's awful, but it's such a good start!!! And yet, you haven't updated in so long! This is upsetting. =[

I hope you come back.


Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked the prologue. I'm sorry for being all hiatus-y and annoying, but I didn't really have much of an idea of where this was going in the first place. I have a very insubstantial skeleton of a plot laid out for this story, but if I end up coming up with more of a direction for it I will definitely write more. I apologise for not having more for you to read at the moment.

Reviewer: Marauder by Midnight
Date: 03/20/08 9:34
Chapter: Prologue

This was an intense prologue - my favorite kind. You certainly have my attention, whatever it is you have in store for Severus.

I loved how you didn't The innocence and softness Severus shows are very touching and so very different from the hardened future Snape is like. I hope you can show the transition and perhaps place an emphasis on this contrast.

"Kill you?" he had offered, in a small voice. I was surprised to see that he knew about death and such and that he understood the gravity of the situation. It didn't quite fit the bittersweet innocence of the situation.

Any sympathy he might have had for the man who had fathered him was eclipsed by the fact that his mother was about to join him.

Talk about foreshadowing. Very powerful. However, I'm wondering if this means that Severus already knew his mother was about to die or if this is just Severus' commentary looking back on his past. Also, his father "now lay" on the floor. Was Severus playing Gobstones with his father dead at his side or did he die a few weeks before Severus' mom died? And I'm very interested to find out how he died.

Finally, I noticed that you had revealed that Voldemort knew about Severus and his blood status ("if they don't like you because you married Dad and had me"). Then how did Severus gain Voldemort's good graces?

I'm looking forward to your next chapter, whenever that may come.

Oh, and you may want to close your HTML tag; you've got your whole story italicized :)

Author's Response: Wow, I'm not used to such in-depth reviews! Several of the things you mentioned I hadn't planned on addressing in future chapters; thanks for bringing them to my notice. One such thing is how Severus's parents died, which I plan to have him explain fully later on. As for your last question, this is an AU fic. The Severus in this universe doesn't necessarily have to join the Death Eaters in the future.rnThanks again for reviewing! =]

Reviewer: Rhi for HP
Date: 02/27/08 14:00
Chapter: Prologue

Oh...this is excellent! I'm really interested to see more. And I have NEVER seen a Severus/Remus pairing before. Props for originality!

Author's Response: Thanks! Unfortunately, I've recently been suffering from writer's block and a truckload of schoolwork, so I don't know when the first chapter will be finished. I'll try to make that as soon possible, though.

Reviewer: BlackWinterWolf
Date: 01/03/08 4:29
Chapter: Prologue

...It's short...:'( I wanna know what happens! Write more please, it's good so far.

Author's Response: The first chapter should be coming soon. I'm not sure yet how long it will be, but I'll try to make it well past the MNFF requirement. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: BlackWinterWolf
Date: 01/03/08 4:29
Chapter: Prologue

...It's short...:'( I wanna know what happens! Write more please, it's good so far.

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