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Reviews For green eyes- seen

Name: HogwartsGirly124 (Signed) · Date: 11/23/07 22:52 · For: green eyes- seen

Loved it.... so much! I look forward to more.

Sophia R

Author's Response: Oooh, thanks! I've got another poem I wrote a couple of days ago that may or may not make it into the queue called 'summer queen'.

Name: MissyQuill (Signed) · Date: 11/23/07 9:03 · For: green eyes- seen
A good bit of work. I specially liked the constant repitition of the words loves too much in brackets.=Sammy

Author's Response: Thanks, Sammy. I thought the repitition created a nice rhythm that broke up the poem uniformly.

Name: R_U_LDS_2 (Signed) · Date: 11/21/07 12:14 · For: green eyes- seen
i loed it, keep writing

Author's Response: :D Thanks.

Name: xpadfootsangelx (Signed) · Date: 11/20/07 9:41 · For: green eyes- seen
Holy flip! I remember when you wrote this! hehe! I feel specialllll.....

Author's Response: You double-poster! It looks like someone got a little happy on the submit button....

Name: xpadfootsangelx (Signed) · Date: 11/20/07 9:39 · For: green eyes- seen
Holy flip! I remember when you wrote this! hehe! I feel specialllll.....

Author's Response: ;) You should feel special.

Name: Hermione Clone (Signed) · Date: 11/18/07 16:00 · For: green eyes- seen
Well done! The first part could kind of apply to Lily/Snape or Lily/James too.
Good job!

Author's Response: Hehe, thanks. It could be those parings, now that you mention it. Except that it's from a girl's POV.

Name: harrypotterfangirl21 (Signed) · Date: 11/18/07 12:05 · For: green eyes- seen
Wow, Stubby. Just. . . wow.

This was EXCELLENT. My favourite stanza was:
and they lock,
and she; canít break his eyes
like glass

In that section, it's almost like you're calling his eyes glass, which is brilliant, as he's dead and his eyes might be "glassy."

My only concrit is all the punctuation. I understand the purpose it served, and that it brought a unique element to this poem, but it almost seemed "too much" after a while.

But I'm a nitpicker, so that may just be me.

ANYWAY. This was fabulous. The repetition, the rhythm (which sounded almost song-like at times), the wording -- all were amazing.

Great job!

- Katie

Author's Response: *goofy grin* *trying to think of something to say, but just still smiling like an idiot* Um... uh.... THANKS! Yeah, I like that stanza too. At first, I had something really bad. But then that wonderful line came into my head. I did mean it the way you saw it; I broke the line there so it could fit either way. Mmm, yes. I think the punctuation IS a bit excessive. I think I'll go back and edit.... *still beaming* *gurgle* Thanks, again. And again. -Stubby

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