Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 07/16/12 0:25
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

So sad! I really wish they had gotten together! I loved both of their characterizations! Especially the kiss! Such innocence! :) Beautiful story! Beautiful pairing!

Reviewer: wicked_rachiella
Date: 10/25/11 1:36
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

Aww! This is ridiculously cute. I have never liked Snape and Lily's romance up until now. Totally adorable!

Reviewer: Gin_Drinka
Date: 12/15/07 12:21
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

Well, that was very sweet! It's probably really true of ten year olds too, just not the ones I know. But I recognize the kids in my family like to act older than they are. :)

I like the scattered deeper sentences throughout that keep this poetic.LIke, wondered what he was searching for over the horizon.

My only suggestion would be to reconsider how Severus showed her about his parents. I just think it's not entirely likely that they would be fighting any time they go around to see. Of course, that depends, but maybe you could add something to make it more probable.

Well, nice story! Keep writing.
:)

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 11/18/07 16:06
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

I loved this story, especially the part at the end where Severus touched his nose.
So sad, but so sweet. I loved how Severus was so protective of Lily.
Great Job!

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 11/13/07 20:03
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

*sniff* good story!!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 11/13/07 19:32
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

that was soo sweet! i loved it!

Reviewer: RonandMioneForever
Date: 11/11/07 20:22
Chapter: It Wasn’t Supposed to Happen Like This

Wow. Amazing.

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