Oh, it made me cry! Great Job!!! I love it... it really got me with the "I'm not sorry for marrying your mother- my one true love" bit... just because it shows how much he loved her...
Author's Response: Oh I'm so sorry for making you cry, though in a way I'm kinda glad you did (horrible of me I know) because that means I did something right lol. You seem to be a fan of Tonks/Lupin, me too. I think they're awesome in every possible sense of the word. They just fit. Who else could have made a blue haired baby as sweet as Teddy Lupin, woot! I think Remus loved Tonks very much just had trouble sometimes conveying it, I swear I could have knocked him out in DH. Thanks for reviewing, it's really really appreciated.
Wow, well done! It portrays Remus' emotion perfectly. My favourite absolute favourite part is this:
To make the world a better place,
Just so a smile could be etched across your face.
To wipe out all the evil and all the sorrow,
Just so you could have a better tomorrow.
So, a great poem again! And good luck in the future (=
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the kind review. I'm so glad you think I portrayed Remus' emotion well. I like that part too. I'm so glad you reviewed, it's appreciated like always! Aww, your kind words are overwhelming, thanks. =) *gives you panda*
Oops! I clicked the 'submit review' button a little too soon. Anyways, wonderful poem, keep writing! *admires your writing abilities*
Author's Response: Hahha, that's ok! Review as many times as you want, I don't mind haha. Another awesome review by you, thank you so much again! =)
Wow! *wipes eyes* I loved it - I can definitely hear Lupin saying this to his son. The whole poem was beautiful, but there were a few lines that really stood out; the ending was just superb.
Author's Response: Awww... Thank you, thank you so much. That's one of the best reviews I have ever received. Wow.. just.. thank you, thank you so so much. I'm glad you could imagine Lupin saying something like this to Teddy, I was a little worried that he was a bit OOC, so it's always a relief when you hear you did alright. The endings my favorite bit too =)
Wow, that was beautiful--it brought tears to my eyes (which takes powerful writing, too). I loved it! *adds to favorites*
Author's Response: Aww... You have no idea how much that means to me, as I'm quite a fan of your own work! Thank you so much for the lovely review!=]
Beautiful. Simply beautiful. --MJ
Author's Response: Wow! *blushes* thank you so much for the kind review I know it sounds corny and over used but I really do appreciate it! =)
This was a very abstract poem, and that's why I like it so much ;) It's also incredibly sweet; I LOVE Teddy Lupin, and what he thinks about his parents/how he feels about them dying. And don't worry, it's okay if some of the lines don't make sense. It's poetry! =D Here's my favorite line/stanza/thing:
I’m not sorry for going,
It was the right thing to do…
But Teddy, my son, my dear boy,
My pride, my joy…
I am sorry for leaving a son like you.
My only suggestion would to be, in certain places where it seems rushed, to add/take off a one or two-syllable word, like
I'm not so sorry for going,and
Teddy, my son, Teddy, never forget
Of course, those are only suggestions. Wonderful poem!~
Author's Response: Thank you so so much for this review, it really made me smile. I think that's my favorite lines of the poem as well. Thank you also for the suggestions, I always enjoy readers input on how to make my work better and I'll take your advice on board especially when/if I start another poem. Thank you again for the wonderful review, it's much appreciated! =)
Aww! Really cool poem, it made me a bit teary at the end!
Author's Response: Aww thank you =) I'm sorry I made you a bit teary towards the end! Thank you for the review, it's really appreciated.
Don't be shocked that this got accepted! It's quite lovely and tragic and displays Remus' sense of right and wrong to perfection. You did a great job.
Author's Response: Oh wow! Thank you so much =) I'm glad you think that I displayed Remus' s sense of right and wrong, good, I was (as stated before) a little worried he was OOC. Thank you so much for reviewing- it really means a lot to me. =)
*tear* Even if it isn't your best (which I'm not sure I believe, as this is really good), it's still emotional and eloquent. ;)
The last line was the best line: I am sorry for leaving a son like you. I knew something like that was coming, but it was still amazing and beautiful.
I think a few lines could have been revised to flow better and have more 'rhythm', really, but otherwise this poem was very well-written, beat-and-rhythm-wise. ;) Some of the longer lines were a bit too long; the shorter ones a bit too short. The poem is still fantastic, though - you did what you wanted (I think) - made the reader feel sorrow and pain and yet happiness at the same time, so kudos!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I wrote the poem with the last line in my head- knowing that's how I was going to end it. It's my favorite line in the poem as well. I'm glad it gave (to you at least xPP) the effect I wanted it to give; sadness happiness and a little pain. Thank you also for the critique- I always love when readers give me few suggestions on what to do and what not to do. It helps me with future projects, poems etc. All these compliments will be going to my head =) Thanks again (yes I'm saying thanks a lot today xDD) for the kind review!
I like this, it's sweet, we have to look on the bright side of things sometimes, don't we? Good job, i'm glad you did post this!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you :) Yes we do have to look on the bright side of things sometimes, even if the bright is sometimes dark (If that makes sense). I'm glad you liked the poem, and I'm flattered that you're glad I posted it. As I'm sure you're aware I was a little weary of doing so... But all these kind reviews are washing the weariness away. Thank you for the lovely review, it's really appreciated. :)
Wow your stories are one of my favs keep up the good work
~harryjukudreamer *huggles huggles*
Author's Response: Awww... I'm so flattered that it's one of your favorites (you're one of my favorite authors too, but I think you probably already know that since I probably left a review on one of your poems/stories). *huggles back* Thanks so much for the review, it's really appreciated!:)
*sniff* good poem!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review! It's really really appreciated :)
This is lyk really really gud! I reallyyyy luff it. It's so cool. It's so sad dat Lupin and Tonks died:( Poor Teddy! Luffly poem!
Author's Response: Thank you as always for the great review! Yes it is sad that Tonks and Lupin died :(
This is very,very good.It even sounds like Remus. I only have one teensy weensy suggestion.
If I said I didn’t expect it,
I would’ve lied.
I don't know about actual grammer( which is why I need betas ) but these lines didn't sound right. Perhapa you could change the line to
If I'd said I didn't expect it
To you I would have lied.
Anyways this is just one( more then slightly crazy ) girls opinion and you don't have to take it. Once again, great job.=Sammy
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the awesome review, it's really really appreciated:) And thank you for the grammar tips, I think I will change it to the line you suggested, I too aren't that great at grammar so it's I always welcome suggestions on how to change certain lines etc. Thank you for the compliments and the critique! :)
NIKKI!!!!!! *hugs to death* Awesome poem, you're so talented! I can totally see Remus writing something like this to Teddy... Keep up the awesome work, buddy! *hugs again* xxvictoria
Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for the compliments -hugs back- I'm still shocked that it got accepted!! :) I was a little weary about posting this, I thought that it may seem a little OOC, but I'm happy that you think Remus would write something like this, so perhaps it's not too OOC. Thanks again for the awesome review! :) -huggles again-