Reviews For Vicarious
Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21
Date: 01/26/08 13:31
Chapter: Vicarious

So much pain. From the very first line of this fic, I could tell I was in for a great read. When a story begins in such a captivatingly simple way, I’m instantly sucked in.

Snape’s thoughts on how people think of pain is also amazingly accurate. I, for one, don’t mind reading, watching, or writing about extremely violent things — as long as they’re unattached to me and my life.

He said, “There are many forms of evil, and people may do evil things, but people in general are not evil. Though some are selfish, proud or ambitious, this does not make them bad. People may do evil deeds, but that does not make the people evil. Just like how performing a dark spell does not make you a dark wizard, and how the lightest of magic can be used for dark purposes.”

That is an excellent, excellent definition of intent. If I were to kill a cockroach using the Avada Kedavra, after all, I would hardly consider that to be Dark. And if I were to use something like Aguamenti to drown someone, then I would hardly consider that Light. It’s a kind of fine line, but in the end, it’s the intent that really makes the difference.

It also does sound like something Dumbledore would say and believe; and it’s incredibly like Snape to not believe in this theory. So far, everyone’s perfectly in-character, which is a feat that many authors can’t pull off, though you do it brilliantly.

Dumbledore’s little speech on love also sounded exactly like him. I really liked how you incorporated that into your fic, because he put emphasis on love so much in the books. Putting in details like that just makes the fic seem more . . . real.

I am sat in my office, staring at the walls. Forgive me for finding a grammar error, but it really should be ‘I am sitting in my office. . . .’

I also really like how you switched from the scene in Dumbledore’s office to when Snape killed him. Doing this really brought a different take to the story, and it made reading a lot more enjoyable.

Ooh. Knowing about what happened to Ariana really puts into perspective exactly why Dumbledore felt that empathy towards Snape. I also kind of liked seeing Angry!Snape at the mention of what happened to Lily.

Whoa. Snape’s thoughts on killing Dumbledore really are just . . . perfect. I don’t know how else to say it. I really like how you kept emphasising that he thinks the world is evil. That brought new insight into his character for me — before, I pictured him as just a man who had bad things happen to him; now, I see him as a man who kind of expected bad things to happen, because in his mind, nothing good can occur in such an ‘evil’ world. That’s my take, anyway.

And, vicariously, I live, though my world has died. That is an absolutely stunning end. The ending, much like the beginning, is really captivating and deep.

This was a truly great fic.

- Katie

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for such an amazing review! I'm honoured to receive something so substatial and full.

To address the gramatical issue... Actually, "I am sat" isn't exactly wrong... That is, it is wrong in official written prose, but not really in the spoken word, and first person is "spoken", in a manner of speaking. "I am sat" doesn't mean quite the same thing as "I am sitting". It's a more passive nuance. Don't know how else to explain it, but I do know it isn't incorrect per se.

I was most worried about Dumbledore. I get Snape; his character comes easy to me. But Dumbledore is a character I have very little experience with. Lately, though, I've been using him a lot. I think book seven sort of made him more "human", which makes him easier to grasp and characterise for me.

I'm really glad you enjoyed my story, and thank you, once again, so much for a lovely review!

Maia

Reviewer: C_A_Campbell
Date: 12/12/07 22:49
Chapter: Vicarious

Wow - that was...amazing.

I adore Severus - he's my favorite character - and I've always known that to be asked to kill Dumbledore would have been sheer torture for him, and you put that into words perfectly. I loved the beginning of this - adored it in fact. The narration was beautiful, and the details were potent. You showed an awesome understanding of a part of human nature.

Characterization was spot on. I loved this line: It was a look of the purest empathy and it frightened me more than anything has frightened me before. It was so much the way that he would have viewed empathy and pity - hating it, because it scared him.

In short, this piece was outstanding.

The only two pieces of criticism I had was once you said thy instead of they and I don't think Severus would have thought that everyone was horrible, because of Lily. She had been wonderful, and I think you could have mentioned that a little more (I know Dumbledore hinted at it, but Severus should have thought it). But seeing how Lily's gone, I can still see him as viewing the world the way you described him viewing it.

To sum it up, I loved this story. It captured Severus potently and I absolutely adore it. Wonderful job!

Signed,
The Order of the House Elves

Merry Christmas from the Ravenclaws!

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for this great review! I'm honoured you liked my story enough to put this much effort into reviewing it.

I suppose in retrospect I could have mentioned Lily a little more... To be honest I didn't think much about it.

Thank you so very much, once again, for a wonderful review. Merry Christmas to you too! :)

Reviewer: Stubbornly_appeared
Date: 11/10/07 19:10
Chapter: Vicarious

Ooh, a Snape-centric!

He's hard to write, but you've got him on the screen well. It's interesting how you put things from his perspective, but it was a little jumpy. Good concept, though!

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you found something to like. I know it's not perfect... :) Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 11/09/07 20:24
Chapter: Vicarious

*sniff* good story!! poor snape!!

Author's Response: I know! *cries* Thanks for rewviewing! :)

Reviewer: RonandMioneForever
Date: 11/09/07 14:41
Chapter: Vicarious

Wow. This brought tears to my eyes.
You captured the essence of Dumbledore and Snape perfectly.

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you. I was a bit worried about the characterisation, but my beta was so encouraging! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: wings_of_hope
Date: 11/09/07 8:48
Chapter: Vicarious

I really enjoyed reading this, mostly because I just finished reading the seventh book. You really showed Snape's motives well, it almost made me cry! (the reason for that is because of the seventh book)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm so happy you liked the story. Thank you ever so much for such a positive review!

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