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Name: marauderteddylupin (Signed) · Date: 04/05/08 16:02 · For: Foregone
that's so *sniffles* sad


Name: Fantasium (Signed) · Date: 03/23/08 15:23 · For: Foregone
Ha, it seems that I’ve managed to find a Beth!story that doesn’t already have lots and lots of reviews. Though, having mentioned that, I must say I’m surprised to see that there weren’t more reviews for this story; while perhaps not very… uplifting, the pure quality of the story still improves my mood.

I’m sure I must have mentioned it in a review for you before, Beth, but I’m going to say it again: your writing is a joy to read. Your command of the English language is impeccable and so mature; I somehow feel safe when enjoying your works, because I know that my reading experience is in good hands. I get the same feeling from reading your stories as from only a few other MNFF writers – the feeling that you are actually a more accomplished writer than the original author, even if you happen to be basing your stories in her world.

The formal tone of this story is perfect for Percy. It makes me aware of how important it is to build not only the story, but also the type of language you use for writing it, around the main character. You use more advanced words not only in the dialogue but also in the rest of the text, which, seeing as we’re listening to Percy’s point of view, is incredibly fitting.

I feel almost grateful that you took the time to explore and develop the Penelope aspect of Percy’s “betrayal”. It is something that we never learned about in the books, but something that must have been important to his character. I couldn’t agree more with your interpretation of Percy and your reasoning for his actions – which is what makes the story so heartbreaking. A non-convincing Percy’s break-up with Penelope wouldn’t have interested me much, but here, you make it a very personal sacrifice for him, and successfully make me hate and pity him at the same time.

The ending is, for want of a better word, tragic. A nice little reminder, I feel, when most fanfic stories revolving around romance tend to lean towards happier endings. And while I’m generally one in favour of fluff and peace and understanding, I also appreciate the kind of harsh reality of love that you show us here.

Excellent, my friend. :)


Name: Hermione Clone (Signed) · Date: 11/14/07 19:37 · For: Foregone
Wow.
I actually was feeling sorry for Percy.
This was very well written; you captured all of the characters perfectly. I really liked Penny, and how she changed throughout they story.
Great job!


Name: JustLikeHermione77 (Signed) · Date: 11/09/07 16:54 · For: Foregone
*sniff* good story!!


Name: ginevra715 (Signed) · Date: 11/08/07 16:51 · For: Foregone
oo i really like this. very well-written, you really captured percy in it. i liked reading about the separation from his family from his point of view. and MY favorite part is how it ends: sometimes the best stories don't have happy endings, sometimes the best ending leaves it up to your imagination.


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