Reviewer: PurpleBlackSilver
Date: 07/05/11 21:20
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

great! wish u wld write ssomething about them at hogwarts

Reviewer: Beebbop
Date: 07/02/08 7:13
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

I read quite a few of your stories and you capture each character really well. I like the fact that Snape is still grouchy when it comes to Petunia but how he softens to please Lily. I also like the four clover thing and it really makes the reader feel sorry for Snape. Thanks for all these great stories and please write more.

Reviewer: Beebbop
Date: 07/02/08 7:11
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

I read quite a few of your stories and you capture each character really well. I like the fact that Snape is still grouchy when it comes to Petunia but how he softens to please Lily. I also like the four clover thing and it really makes the reader feel sorry for Snape. Thanks for all these great stories and please write more.

Reviewer: Skipper424
Date: 11/22/07 8:04
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

Hello, Jo! I enjoyed reading your story and just wanted to drop by with a review for you to tell you what I liked. I really think you managed to capture some of the dynamics of Severus and Lilyís early relationship very well. Lily just seems to be this wonderful person who is very sweet where Severus is, well, Severus. You can just feel how his tormented home life seeps through into his relationship with other people, even though he really doesnít mean to take it out on Lily.

I really like some of the description you use in the story. A few of my favourites are He had not aged yet, but his eyes looked familiar to Harry: they were the same brooding eyes the adult Snape wore, Snape hungrily stared back for about a couple of seconds before looking away, and His mother leaned in, engulfed Snape in a golden, warm mink hug and kissed him on the cheek. In the way you describe things, you donít seem to waste many words while getting the message across. This is opposite of how I do it Ö I through filibuster-style paragraphs, jam-packed full enough description so that the reader is beaten into submitting to the point. I just think itís great to see it done the other way so effectively.

I also like how you have Petunia calling to Lily in the background and how it just serves to agitate the whole situation. It adds tension and keeps it from being a flowery scene that it might turn into otherwise.

The idea you had for the gift was nice too, a four leaf clover. I liked how worked in what Snape thought was the significance of its colour along with the green scarf. In all, this was a very good fic. Great job, and much luck in the contest!

Author's Response: Oh, James, thank you so much for this SPEW review! *grins*

I don't know, you try writing without sleep, I bet your sentences will come out a little terse, too. Caffeine is to blame. *another grin*

The four-leaf clover, oh thank you so much. I was the first to submit to this challenge, and while your stories came in, I was chanting, 'How lame, how lame, a leaf!'. But now, I'm reassured a little. Thank you, hon. And same to you! ~Jo

Reviewer: x_lily_evans_x
Date: 11/08/07 2:00
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

Hey, Joanna! I loved the way you characterised Severus, he grouses about Petunia but then he goes "don't mind me" so as not to hurt Lily's feelings again. And I think it was pretty cute of Severus to hide his wide grin with a scowl. Haha you actually made me kind of like Severus Snape in this fic. And that's saying something. :D

Author's Response: Hi Mavis! Ahaha, really. I still haven't stopped hitting myself for ever hating him... He was really bad, though. But he has these tender moments, too. He was just so stupid not choosing Lily over those... cast Silencio on me now... *mouths 'Thank you!'*

Reviewer: remilupin
Date: 11/07/07 21:05
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

This is well-written and rather sweet. Although I don't think Snape would be as mean for as long as his is to Lily here (before he gives her this priceless gift), I love how you captured Lily's effervescent nature, her ability to laugh off that which would wound others, and her being caught in the middle of Tunie and Severus. I also really liked Snape's emphasis of Green for Slytherin and the "accidental' gold & red colors Lily was left with - it made me smile.

Author's Response: Oh, you know, Remla, I think Snape's disdain for Petunia had been obvious from the start. See Chap 33 again. I like how he made no attempt to hide it, but instead was a different, milder person, to Lily.

Your review made me smile, too! I love it when readers point out the story's good points, if they'd seen any! Thanks a lot, sis!

Reviewer: RonandMioneForever
Date: 11/07/07 17:57
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

very good. i love all these little moments between snape and lily =)

Author's Response: Thank you, Sharmila.

Reviewer: Nymphea
Date: 11/07/07 17:41
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

This is really good! But "Harry was looking avidly at his mother, wrapped in a teal scarf and a flaxen mink coat" makes it sound like Harry's in the coat; it should be, "Harry was looking avidly at his mother, who was wrapped in a teal scarf and a flaxen mink coat". Thanks for writing this!

Author's Response: And thank you for reading and reviewing and even nitpicking, hon! ^_^

Reviewer: Passion For Prongs
Date: 11/07/07 16:55
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

I think it was rather...i don't know. I don't read this ship often, so I can't review well for it. Yours caught my eyes though, so that must be good!

~Passion For Prongs

P.S. As you can probably tell by my name, I rather like the James/Lily fics myself.

Author's Response: I'm a James/Lily shipper myself. This is a Challenge entry, hon. Thank you for reading it, putting aside your James/Lily loyalty.

Reviewer: lostinside1
Date: 11/07/07 16:31
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

this is really good. better than i thought it would be. how come this bit is only in the american edition though?

Author's Response: Anna, thanks. Oh, this bit is in Joanna's Edition only. The copyright refers to the piece I quoted directly from DH. The one in italics in the beginning, see? ^_^

Reviewer: Ray the Basilisk
Date: 11/07/07 11:51
Chapter: The Prince and his golden princess

i read Him , and so intend to write Him, as i've never been as devoted to my family as to Him . Nice Fic . Probably Fitted in Well.
Well , i've got a question regarding DH , Didn't Severus Deserve A More ''Dignified Death''? i mean , i think and i believe he deserved to die more Valiantly, atleast he ought to show us something out of his 'vast knowledge of the Dark Arts'
'control over Emotions'
besides his ' Duelling Skills ' .....whatdya think?

Author's Response: Hi Maddox, thanks for the review! Oh, I beg to disagree, Snape's death suited him just fine, I think. A retribution for being stupid. He should have chosen Lily. Instead, he chose power. And so he paid the consequences to his very end. It was poignant. ^_^

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