Reviewer: hpfanmz
Date: 01/15/12 2:46
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

This is such a beautiful story.

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 07/10/08 9:44
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Oh, Olivia, I love this!

Your Oliver is fantastic- he's very sweet and a bit sentimental, yet is a lot like how we see him in canon. Maura's adorable, too- their relationship is so cute! Their belief in angels adds a nice touch to the story. The fic also has a lot of detail- it make sit seem more realistic this way.

Good job on this! You seem ot be a great author, as well as an amazing bannermaker ;)

~PnP

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 02/09/08 16:41
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Lovely fic! You've captured the beautiful innocence of a little child. It was so sweet when she said that her mother was her angel, and Oliver said that Maura was his. The story brought a smile to my face, it was very touching. Great writing!

Reviewer: pokethedevil
Date: 12/20/07 7:50
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Hi Olivia!
Wow, what a wonderfulstory! It nearly made me cry.
Your writing is simple, but brilliant.
Characterization is perfect and Maura is such a sweet character.
I loved it.

Reviewer: Colores
Date: 12/17/07 17:22
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Olivia!!! *huggles* This story was so beautifully written and the characterization of Oliver was perfect. I also enjoyed the way you developed Maura throughout the story. At the end of this admittedly brief oneshot, I felt as though she could have been canon. Excellent work, I loved it!

Reviewer: Ghoul In Pajamas
Date: 12/15/07 11:27
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

That was really adorable! Oliver's and Maura's relationship was so close, it's really sweet. I like that it is centered around flying, since that is what we see of Oliver in the books. He is also one of my favorite characters!

The focus of angels is also very sweet, because it emphasizes the loss of her mother, but she is handling it well and feels that her mother still watches over her. Maura's determination for a year to continue looking for the angels shows that she really wants to learn to fly, and I'm sure she'll be as great as her father!
~Kristen

Reviewer: Stubbornly_appeared
Date: 11/25/07 13:00
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Aww... how sad. You painted a nice picture of loss and childhood innocence. Well done.

Reviewer: _Fawkes_Phoenix_
Date: 11/23/07 6:38
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

good story, it's different from all the Harry/Ginny and Ron/Hermione and Marauder Era ones, good job, is it just a one shot or has it got more coming?

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 11/18/07 13:26
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

That was beautiful, Olivia. You are such an amazingly talented author. This was a heart-warming, wonderful fic and I absolutely adored it. The only question I have is Maura's age. She seems quite advanced for a three-four year old. Good job, Haylee

Reviewer: James Jameson
Date: 11/10/07 19:18
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

aw! olivia this was so great! i really like the banner for it too. The girl looks like scout from to kill a mockingbird! I loved it!

Reviewer: DontCallMeNymphadora
Date: 11/06/07 13:27
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

This story is so sweet! I like how Oliver is so protective of his daughter and then when he finally allows her to do what his passion was when he was young- fly.

Reviewer: Fantasium
Date: 11/06/07 11:07
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

What a sweet little one-shot you have here, social loner! Iím glad that you decided to write your favourite character, because you have done it very well.

Canon doesnít exactly show us Oliver Wood as very emotional Ė passionate, perhaps, when it comes to Quidditch, but he also considered putting his favourite sport before the safety of others, *cough* So, with that picture of him in mind, one might find it a little surprising that you chose him for a fic like this. But it works; youíve taken the Oliver Woods you know, and through the challenges of becoming a widower and a father you have smoothly changed him into a different character Ė someone who cares for the safety of another person and realises that there are more important things than flying.

The father/daughter relationship is very nicely written and you have created a great chemistry between the two. Maura is fun to read, what a great personality she seems to have! You have used her faith as one of the main parts of her character, and while I donít believe in angels myself, I think that itís an effective way of writing a good, believable OC.

Your story has a very fresh and clean feeling to it Ė I couldnít spot any errors. Itís very straightforward, and while I like that I also wouldnít have minded seeing some more details. You tell us very little of the setting, and I must admit that Iím curious about where they live, what Oliver does for a living, and so on. Leaving out such details puts more focus to the essentials of the story, which is good, but it can also make it seem a bit simple.

The only other criticism I can offer to this lovely piece is concerning the name you chose for Oliverís wife. When I read ĎBellaí, I immediately thought of Bellatrix Lestrange. I realise that Bella is a common name, but unless you want your readers spare a thought, however brief, for a particular HP character, I would advice you to be careful with using names that already exist in the books. :)

I think thatís enough of my rambling, but I need to tell you again that this was a lovely one-shot, and that your style of writing is very comfortable and easy to read. Well done!

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for the review, I really appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you thought. As for the name, 'Bella', I had considered that as well. I even thought about changing it, but I couldn't find a more fitting name than Bella. Of course, I was thinking of Bella being short for Isabella instead of Bellatrix. I based my brief idea of Bella on a character from another book that I love, so that's mainly why I couldn't separate from the name. But thanks so much for letting me know, I had a feeling that miss Bellatrix might come to mind for some readers! And once again, thank you for taking the time to read my story. I love hearing what other authors have to say, it helps me grow as a writer myself! So thank you! -Olivia

Reviewer: born2BaRavenclaw
Date: 11/06/07 10:49
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Awwwww...I almost cried

Reviewer: Merlin the Weirdster
Date: 11/06/07 7:03
Chapter: The Angels Come to Visit Us

how sweet...

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