It sounds like Hermione's logic. I loved the passage that this is based on. Great one shot.
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Hell Yes! Great job!
It was almost as if we had come to a silent understanding. I loved him more than life itself, and I knew he felt…something for me, though I wasn’t sure of the depth of his feelings.
Really now? Wouldn't this be too... thick of Hermione? After how Ron acted during the incident in Malfoy Manor?In that moment, all my inhibitions fell away like the basilisk fangs I had been holding...
Nice analogy.I don't read much Dark/Angst, hon, but this was lovely. You gave us a new perspective to those frantic scenes back at Hogwarts.
Hermione's reflections on how Harry's image shifted in her mind was eloquent. You made her more real. Hermione almost always comes across as a protective mother hen-like creature. Here, the spotlight is as much on herself as Harry. She can't be that selfless, right? You only neglected to make her recall the Malfoy Manor horror. I think the memory of being tortured would have been a nice addition here.I should take note to read more Dark/Angst. At least yours anyway. A character's fears somehow double and add to their glint.I wrote a fic in a similar setting, leading to the kiss. I'm incapable of D/A, though, hehe.
PS: I agree with Ford. Tweak the formatting a bit. For perfection.
Author's Response: Thanks for the long review! It's always nice when reviewers go into more depth. I just wanted to stick in my view of the Malfoy Manor. I must have read dozens of fan fictions in which Hermione is holding on to Ron's voice as she's being tortured. That obviously proves he cares about her a great deal--much more than just a friend--but she still doesn't know quite how much. That was my thought of it anyway. :)
Nice little fic. I would request that you insert a couple of lines between your author's note and the beginning of the story. It was a bit confusing until I figured out where it actually began.
hey this is nice! i like reading the story from other points of view.good job on this:D
Wow, I love this! =D I really like how Hermione's thoughts went with that part of DH! How she kissed him all of a sudden, how they held on to eachother tighter, it all fit! I also loved the way Hermione views the war, in this story she seems so rough and angsty! =) And the ending is great!
Author's Response: Thanks! I was really worried I went a little overboard with the angst, so it's nice to know someone didn't think so.